Destroy

He knew he was beautiful, good lord, yes he knew.  He knew that the first time she laid eyes on him; leaning slightly against the wall in model-esque form, dark jeans perfectly outlining, accenting muscles, the hand casually reaching up to his mouth for a drag of the cigarette.  His mere presence radiated a nonchalant elegance, accompanied by an aristocratic smirk that boldly proclaimed stature.  The slight summer breeze whispered silently through his hair, tossing it gently as small strands of dirty blond momentarily covered his blue eyes.  He exhaled smoke seductively, pinning her gaze on the slow movement as she quickly, desperately fell for him.  Her hand involuntarily reached out longingly, threatening to touch the definition of muscles, to trace patterns on his chest.  1

She knew to touch him would be to confirm mortality.  He purposefully locked eyes with her, challenging her to defy him.  It was all she could do to stare back, mesmerized.  The hand moved in, another drag of the cigarette.  Oh yes, he surely knew.  Those eyes revealed nothing but self interest and cold emotion.  In the moment, it became clear; she knew the sinfully beautiful could be naught but sinful. While she yearned for him to breathe her in, envelop her in his very essence, it was known that exhaled smoke soon dissipates, diffusing into the air.  He sensed her thoughts, and offered her a sly grin.  Closing in on her, his arms trapped her where she stood.  Breath hot on her cheek, he drew her closer still.2

"Come destroy something beautiful.”3

Author notes

written in eng. class today... wanted to work with description/the process of lusting after someone beautiful.

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  • nessatiger
    February 17, 2004
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    ooo its very discriptive....i like it alot. i really like the part "While she yearned for him to breathe her in, envelop her in his very essence, it was known that exhaled smoke soon dissipates, diffusing into the air." niiiice. the beginning kinda lost me...all the he and she knews. could just be cause im so tired. but other than that muy bien!
    ~Ness

  • Apocalyptic Scarves
    February 17, 2004
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    i thin its fine, sounds like rape, destroying innocence of youth, someone who thinks that someone is so attractive, only find a monster raping her of her innocence, i liked the lack of defined features, he is a blur to be forgotten, it was well written, it hink i do agree the eyes are the most memorable part of anything, so describing them a bit more, as it should be the one afterimage anyone has of this piece
    otherise was a good short piece methinks

    fj -

  • chat noir
    February 17, 2004
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    gnarly

    alright: maybe describe the eyes more? the shape of his face?
    Oh yes, he beyond doubt knew..... i would take that part out.

    other than that, i am *very* impressed.

    *golf clap*