Untitled For Now Chapter 1

Julia Johnson was putting the finishing touches on her makeup when her boyfriend Ken Matthews pulled up in the driveway. Tonight they were going to Bruno Anderson's party. Julia thought that Bruno was very attractive. He was tall, muscular, with wavy black hair, and dark blue eyes. Ken wasn't bad looking either. He was tall, had a lean muscular body, with brown hair and eyes.1

Ken sat in his car for a couple of minutes. He knew all the guys found Julia very attractive. She was meduim height, with a model thiness with some curves, long silky blonde hair and green eyes. He got oout of the car and rang the doorbell. Julia's sister, Maria answered the door and let him in.2

Maria was the ten year old version of eighteen year old Julia. "How's it going shorty," Ken asked. "Its going alright," Maria said shyly. Like all the little girls, Maria thought Ken was one of the most adorable guys ever. Lucas, Julia's sixteen year old brother came out of his room and hollered, "Julia, Ken's here!"3

"So Lucas, are you going to the party with us," Ken asked. "Nah, I'm taking Jessica Parker to the movies," Lucas said. Ken looked surprised. "Jessica Parker? Tall, brown hair, blue eyes, Jeff's sister?" "Yup," Lucas said with a grin. Lucas was tall, with a bit of muscle, with blonde hair and dark brown eyes. He was a junior in high school and all the girls wanted to date him.4

Mrs. Johnson came in the door as Ken and Lucas exchanged byes and Julia came downstairs. Julia took Ken's breath away. Her hair was curled, her makeup was perfect and her black minidress looked stunning on her. "Julia, you look gorgeous," Ken said after a minute. 5

"I called Lucas and told him to be home by eleven unless he called me or you," Mrs. Johnson said. "You can stay out til midnight, unless you call." "Alright, Mom," Julia said. 6

Finally Julia and Ken were on their way to Bruno's. "Is this Lucas's first date with Jessica," Ken asked. "Yeah," Julia said. "She's had a crush on him for a long time now. He just recently broke up with Lila Thomas." "Why'd they break up," Ken asked. "She cheated on him," Julia said. "Hey, isn't that Lucas's car right there," Ken asked as they passed the Thomas's house. "Yea it is, but if I'm not mistaken, Jessica and Lila are pretty good friends," Julia said looking a little unsure.7

Lucas and Lila were sitting on the couch watching tv. Lila had called him and asked him to come over for a little while. Lucas couldn't tell her no. Besides, Jessica wasn't expecting him until seven. It was only five o' clock. 8

Lila turned the tv off and said, "I've missed you." "Show me then," Lucas said. Lila took his hand and led him to her room, then closed and locked the door.9

Author notes

this is just the beginning hopefully I can finsh this

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  • Upoiuoisjcokmi
    December 25, 2008

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    Great start. It was pretty interesting to read, and had a pretty good amount of detail. Keep up the good work!
    -Raf-


  • LadyScorpio
    July 19, 2007

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    Loving this!

    I like this. The way it begins, and although it isn't the finishing touch, I am going to continue to read the other parts. Kudos for you. Very very interesting. I promise to read ALL! =)


  • bethany may
    May 27, 2006
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    good start

    this is a good start....one thing I would change is to make sure that when a new person is talking you put it on the next line...this would help the story flow better.....keep writing...Luv Caz

    overall: 5.