I have this irrational fear. That when I'm alone, everyone else forgets I exist. Stupid huh? I can't help it. Even when I'm in a public place but I don't see anyone that knows me, I feel like I've disapeared. I become a non-entity. Like I'm suddenly a ghost that everyone can see but noone acknowledges. People look at me, may even nod or smile in my general direction but I just know that everyone I consider a loved one and all my friends and aquaintances forget that I exist the minute I'm out of their sight. Wait, that's not fair. I know that this is not true, I know they remember me, miss me, whatever. *sigh* I just can't help it.1
Author notes
Not a story exactly. More like me needing to vent where not everyone in my life can read it.
Please tell me what you think
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I don't think you are ever alone, but perhaps sometimes lonely. When you exhale, it is inhaled by others; you are never alone and your existence is ever present.
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Awwww. People remember you, your mother probably thinks of you each second of the day. Thinking like that's bad for your health. Because then your always depressed and can't do well.... And that's why you should be happy
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relatable
this is actually a common phenomenon. I have heard people say they felt this way. Maybe you SHOULD write an entire story about it. I know people would want to read it.
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Everyone always may think they are nonentities to society. But everybody's a somebody!
This is where "Emo" deprived from, but, you may be ignored or not acknowledged, but, every being has a purpose to fulfill... ^^
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That is such a scary irrational fear i hope i never get one this was a pretty exciting story even though it was so short. I suggest doing dome things that might calm your nerves and put you in a deep state of relaxation. If I were in your position i would talk to my friends every time i felt like that and so i could just get it over with and make sure they remeber me. I hope that you get more friends in the future and that this fear will go away
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its lonely in the middle of a strange crowd
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gosh, that's bad, i mean i know what it feels like to be in a big croud all alone when no one's looking for you and it feels really lonley but to feel that everyone you care about doesn't care about you either...maybe you should tell them about this and maybe that would help
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Of course your loved ones and friends don't forget you the minute you're out of their sight.
But I know what you mean about being amid tons of people you don't know and feeling like a non-entity. Yeah... I'm kinda contradictory about that: on one hand I prefer to go unnoticed and un-commented; but on the other hand I don't like going out in public alone and feeling kinda lost and small out there. But I have to deal with it because there are many times I have to do it! Interestingly written, and useful (for the sake of venting...)!
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Not really stupid so much as something to think about. I guess i never really thought about something like this....interesting though. Great job!
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I enjoyed this because it shows a lot of emotion, and that is always a good thing in a story or poem or even lyric. I think you could make this longer, if you wanted to... but since it's not a story, as you say, it's just as amazing as it can be this way--since it's in the original form and all.
I enjoyed this and will read more of your work as I can. I will do that shortly, if you have more on here.
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Its like being alone in a world full of people. Totally understood.
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That's an interesting way to view things. I tend to feel a bit lost if I don't see anyone i know around, but I don't mind not being acknolwedged by people i don't know. I've never liked being center of attention.
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I think that at sometime in life we all feel as though we are invisible, that no matter how close someone is to us physically that there is no one there.
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This is a huma condition and is normal ~ Just so you know it is okay to feel this way, but it is horrible to do so~ I know - I hope things pick up and that you feel like people do notice you - For I notice you ^.^ and so do many others ~
Blair
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Ok interesting. Do you have low or no self esteem? That could make you feel unwanted, unloved or unnoticed (trust me, I know) Also becasue you have said that you know that it's not true, perhaps it's just your imagination running away with you (or without you in some cases
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As you said in your authors note, not a story, BUT you could change it into one. Go out by yourself and when you start to feel it, write anything and everything down. Then some back and put it all on storywrite
Anyway good luck
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I hope writing this brought you some peace... Captivating, and beautiful.
Peace, and have a nice day. -
oh wow, that sounded honest.. a rarety these days..
thanks for sharing. tc
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Good
It may just be a rant, but I like it, I've felt that way before, but I'm usually the oppisit( i think I splet that wrong, sorry) but I noticed that you,
'but noone acknowledges'
there's supposed to be a space between 'no' and 'one' other than that, great rant!! I like it =DD -
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lol opposite, but you were close
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It might not be a story, but I know the feeling you are venting about in this short paragraph. I've felt that way for many years. -
emotional and deep. Work on this, make it into a novel! Nice description and detail. It is good, even without any dialogue at all.
Great job, nice. I love to rant too. It's all about letting the steam out. -
I totally know how that is. Even in my own house it feels like that sometimes, like i'm alone at home as well as out there in the world.
Now on the writing part, I loved it. It was to the point and venting is always a good thing. It's better than doing whatever else. Lol. I enjoyed in probably because I can relate to it so much. Thanks for sharing :]
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interesting. I think that this is a fear that a lot of people share with you.
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.... Sweet, short, and very sad. Very beautifully written, and instantly captivating. I should think this is a fear we all experience at times, and not so irrational after all. It really makes you think. If you aren't there, who thinks about you and wonders how you're doing? Yes, interesting indeed. Very curious questions. As for this little piece... Wow. Very well done, very strong, and laid out as the thoughts of a person. I'm not quite so clear on why the title is 'Moody Megan'... But I like it. Very good use of vocabulary to get the ideas across with only a few words and strong imagery, even though nothing was described. Thanks very much for this piece, it was superb!
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This is exactly how I feel sometimes. I feel like if I'm not being aknoleged (sp) than no one in the world cares that I'm here. That if someone ignores me, I'm suddenly alone in this world. Grets..'vent' 5/5. Keep up the good work and until next time,
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iz not stupid, iz pretty true
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hmm.... i understand the venting thing... everyone needs to do it everyonce in a while.... this fear is somethign that many have so it is ok... we all just kinda learn to deal with it
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You exist in the presence of other people.
When you are alone do you let other people exist, or are ya constantly worried about ya non-existance? Seems like when you are alone you worry only about what you mean to other people. What do you mean to yourself? This is definitely a mood and not a good one. But sure enough, some of it is true because when we are not around our friends...they sure are around others. It takes a balance. I am sure most of us have never taken the time to be this moody. But sometimes such an exploration is helpful.
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Go! You understand that writing is a way to express your feelings!
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I get what you mean. I feel the same way sometimes. It sucks T_T
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sounds sorta like me. I feel your pain... i sometimes feel happy that people dont notice me because i could do something bad and no one would even notice.
I also know how you feel about you loved ones... I try not to I try to send them all e-mails. I always forget. I feel like they think i dont care about them. I love my family, and i hope you do too, so I started wondering what they thought I was thinking, about them not talking to me. Thats when I relized, its there fault, not mine. -
This is something that many people (including myself) can relate to :-)
If you want it could make a very interesting story. -
Lmao, I kinda feel that too...not my fave emotion. O.O It's called the "lonely in a crowd" thing. xD
-HT
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Aww.. Well, for being a vent it would make an excellent story as well.
Maybe it's just the intense genuine feel it gives when you read it, but it really seems like it could go somewhere else as well..
Props to you for using the stream of consciouness.. ness -
It came off very well for not being an organized story =P
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this is very deep. i like how this was just a vent and not much effort was put into 'having' it be made into a story. sometimes things just need to be said to get off your chest. but i can really relate to this. i also feel like this a lot. but dont worry. life does eventually get better. it hasnt for me yet but i know it does
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Different, and I agree with 'terror' that it i unusual topic. Very short, but you may wanted it to be short, I do not know for certain.
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unusual, an unusual topic but one that I think most people consider for short times. I wouldn't worry to much about it, you know you aren't really going to be forgotten so its just speculation. One the other hand it makes quite a good story if you write about it actually happening.
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Wow, this is a great read. Why? Because many people can connect to this sort of event. Not only me, but millions of other people in the world. I really hate being forgotten, but I ave been told that you are only forgotten when you forget to remember about yourself. If you do not want to be forgotten all you have to do is commit ARK (from Evan Almighty). Act of Random Kindness, at least that is what I think it was. You have to be nice to yourself and to other people. Then people will never forget. I use my talents, practice at what I can improve, and try my best so people do not usually forget me.
I loved your piece, and I hope you keep on writing. I, also, thank you for the great read. I hope my comment helped you out in any way.
MagicMonster00M: Good luck in story write!
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This was a great read, even if it was just a vent.
I somewhat know how you feel, but only because one of my fears is that when I'm gone that I will become one of the forgotten. I'm so terrified of being forgotten that I do some stupid things, just so that I may gain the hope that I won't be forgotten (although it never truly works...) -
Nice vent. Good way to let things out when it seems like life sucks sometimes lol
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Great vent! I would sometimes feel like this in a different sort of way. I felt like a was a shadow; everyone knew I was there but no one cared. Your feelings do make sense, and we all have our irrational fears. I'll let you in on a little secret: I'm afraid of stairs, the dark, and deer.
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A good one on life. Makes a reader think. One spelling mistake in - disapeared.. i guess it should be double "p"
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Strange but intruiging. I think I've read it before, but I can't remember if I commented...
You could tell it was a rant...if it was a story I would be yelling things like SPELLING, NO IM CHAT, PARAGRAPH, EXPAND at you. Since it's not serious, I guess I can forget all about it
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Bizarre, but a very good vent - I love reading the phobias and thoughts of others, even though that sounds rather horrible. I used to experience something similar, I believed when I was a child that whenever I was left alone everyone had left me forever and was never returning to care for me. I empathise with you because it is not a nice feeling.
I'm not sure how concerned you are with the language or flow, but the full stop between 'fear' and 'that' in the first line did not make much sense - maybe a comma was needed.
Anyway, keep up the good work and well done for having the courage to vent your feelings.
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This is a good look into your life, I like it, I think that telling people about it may stop it happening! I really like it, and I think that it is really really smart to get facts out there like this!!!
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Hehe!
What a great way to get rid of depression! ☺ I admire that you've posted that and then admitted it was you! Aw! That's so cute!
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i loved it
good work, its really awesome to read someone's unhidden feelings when they allow them to be uncoated by sugar and just be the raw emotions they are! good work! -
even thought this is true you used correct grammer and no spelling mistakes. i like it but dont worry it happens to me when im paranoid about something, just dont rely your self to be in a big crowd then its even harder
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Don't worry, writing is a great way to get stuff of your chest, and it can also help stress! lol!
If you want to keep this up, you could maybe break it up into paragraphs, just a thought.
And I can promise, there are plenty of people on here who now know you exist!
~Miranda
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That's okay; it's good to let it out. I feel that way sometimes too. Just remember that at any given time in any given day in your entire life, SOMEONE is thinking about you. You just have to believe in that.
On a StoryWrite note, there are two edits I wanted to make. First of all, your first two sentences could be made into one (I have this irrational fear that when I'm alone, everyone else forgets I exist). Secondly, the word "noone" is actually two words ("no one"), but I think a few people already mentioned that.
Don't worry! I'M thinking of you!
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Its always good to let things out. Maybe not to other people as there is a fear of rejection that is apparent and that can be both good and bad...it is good though that you are saying it to someone.
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Venting is a good thing, so don't worry about that. I'm sure that's not true. No one is left behind of forgotten when out of site. *hugs U*
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its kind of like a journal but it is pretty good. it was flowing and that fear is okay. my cousin has that fear too. keep writing.
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"noone" = "no one"
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You'd be surprised, but this is a common fear.
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I feel like that all the time. I sometimes fell like i am a ghost and that know one can see me or even knows i exsist except my family but i have come to the conclusions that we are a whole ghost family...and you thought you idea was weird! lol
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It's alright to feel like this. I feel like it sometimes. But most of the time I want to feel like this is because I want to be left alone.
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it's always ok to vent...and sometimes everyone feels like they just disappears
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Venting is perfectly okay. People know you exist and those that know you have an opinon of you whether that is negative or positive I don't know.
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This is good! IT kinda caught my attention, alittle. I agree with the Authors notes, but good job anyway! I can't wait to read more! Keep the good work up!
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i love a good vent and although it is relativly short, I thought it to be exceptional
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I remember reading this...
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This it something we all feel, if not all the time then sometimes. Even when you your self know its not true, you feel it anyway, dont feel selfish, its a natural emotion
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You know what? This to me sounds like a part out of a diary entry or something, and would make a great story if you continued on it. This is interesting, and yes, I can relate to how you feel. Well done, and nor errors that I could see. Kais =)
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Wow, that is really true. I can relate to this in so many ways. And I'm sure a million other people can. That's a very good story and it's about time somebody wrote something like that! And as for what Blazing Writer said, that saying came into my mind, too. "You can be in a room with a million people, but still feel alone." I think that's how it goes, lol.
Well, I didn't see any grammar errors so that's a plus. Keep on writing!
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I feel like this sometimes and I strongly connect with it. I forgot how the saying goes but it's something like You can be in a room with a million people yet you still feel all alone. Great job on your use of words.
~Blazing Mike~
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Uh uh, yeah! I do feel that way sometimes.
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Hmmm... Ya know, you might be right. Yet that doesn't mean nobody is thinking about you when you're not around.
I personally refuse to think that being meaningless is part of sharing a world with 6 billion other people. Each of us has too many friends and family for that. Heck, I sometimes miss talking to people I've never actually met. (Don't ask.) -
Nice rant, if you ever were to go back and build on this I thinkg that it would make a wonderful story idea.
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a common feeling that everyone might feel and get or experienced before doesn't matter and venting is good seriously it is! cuz sometimes with vents you are actually writing out a good poem/story well done
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Great job at expressing ur feelings. Great job. Dont worry, ppl do think about u, even when u arent around, I garentee it.
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A lot of folks feel like that sometimes. It's scary to be alone, and I've never gotten past feeling this way, too. Great amount of feeling in this.
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Oh! Don't feel like that. You can never disappear- wherever you are always remember you are loved by your friends and family. : )
This was a nice little entry, good job.
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1. Dont use **'s, use actual words to explain your feelings.
2. noone should be no-one
Criticism said, I liked it. It rung true and everybody could relate...even if it was irrational.
I get wanting to write stuff that nobody you know in 'real life' reads...nobody: family, friends, acqaintances...no-one knows I am a member on storywrite...it is the place I can write anything I want. -
Straight up.
I have this same sort of feeling, sometimes.
Theres only one cure.
Surround yourself with people, and turn those strangers into friends!
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Hm a place to vent out what you feel hm interesting. Definately very true these kind of people do exist in a society...sad to know but that's how the world is...
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Needing to vent is always a great idea. I like that you decided to put in sort of a story. I'm sure I have felt this way before about certain people in my family, everyone probably has felt this way a time or two before. This was very well written, and I liked it. Keep up the great work.
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I am somewhat of an introvert so I don't have that problem but maybe if you have some pictures of your family/friends, you can put them up on your wall. That way, it will seem that they are looking at you and you'll never disappear. Remember, in this group, you are never alone!
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I agree, just believe in yourself and miracles can always happen no matter what
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You know, as long as you believe in yourself, there is no chance of you disappearing - you are important in your own right!
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I'm not going to psychoanalyze this...except to say it is not all that unusual. I would like to try correcting some of your English, however:
First...Don't say "this" irrational fear. "An" irrational fear is better and less juvenille.
Next: Get rid of the word "That" at the start of the next sentence. Why is it even there? Simply begin with: "When I'm alone..."
Don't see anyone WHO (not "that") knows me!
I feel AS IF (not "like") I've disappeared.
Again, get rid of the next "like"...IT IS AS IF I'M SUDDENLY (It also would be better to say: "as if I have suddenly BECOME a ghost")
"Noone" is two words. No one.
Don't use "general" direction. It's really a tired and hackneyed phrase that doesn't mean much or show too much thought. "In my direction" is enough.
You need a comma after the word DIRECTION...because the start of your parenthetical comma phrase already exists (before the words "may even") The comma, in a case like this comes in PAIRS! Like a parenthesis.
Get RID of this "sigh" business. Either write it or don't write it in a story...(if youmust, change the whole point of view to third person and say your character sighed)but don't put in these ridiculous stage directions. They are really extremely childish and silly. You cannot show me one short story or novel where this is used. Please stop using it.
Also don't use the word "whatever." This is worse than "etc." If it is important enough to write...then WRITE IT! If it is NOT...then DON'T WRITE IT! But don't be ridiculous and write Etc. or "Whatever."
And again, BTW, don't worry about it...I'm sure no one has forgotten you! (But don't forget what I'm trying to tell you here!)
GA
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you definitely vent well. a very organized vent, i must say ;D in any case, hopefully you really do believe in the last few sentences.. "i know they remember me"... and even if someone doesn't think about you every moment of every day, it doesn't mean you are non-existent. at some point, someone that you love and someone that loves you back, will see something that reminds them of you and smile... because they do remember you and they do love you
and don't worry.. i feel exactly the same sometimes
just keep on writin', to vent or to have fun. writing is a great way to cope with anything.
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Unusual???
Very unusual. ??? I don't understand the plot or storyline, but maybe you should add to it. I think you should add to it. Good job, any how. -
If this is personal, it's really great, but if it's not, it's still a great write. I thought you really put a lot of emotion into the writing and I wish you good luck in the future.
Interesting last sentence. 'I just can't help it'.
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Crazy. When a tree falls in the middle of a forest kind of thing, huh? Well, think about all those times that you've talked about one of your other friends when they aren't there. Doesn't matter if it's good or bad. Imagine how many people are thinking, or talking about you right now. If you died, people would continue to talk about you. Maybe in small ways: "She left me sweater at my house" "Yeah, that guy liked orange juice, too."
That's what I think about, sometimes.
Nice writing.
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I feel the same way. although being alone is sometimes good... in fact, i love it. but i guess i love it because i like it when i am unnoticed... because people leave you alone and dont talk about you and dont judge you.... there is nothing but you.
this was a good expression of your feelings and i hope that it helped your situation. well done!
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