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Hope you give the notes at the beginning to keep the readers properly informed. I don't like this stuff. Anyway it has got the right diction and dialogues, intro that make it a worthy reading.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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You might want to put on your title ( Contains Erotica ) that way people won't be surprised when they read it
Other then that...it was very unique. -
ughh....disgusting. remind me not to read more.
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Gay football players....Hmmmm, That's diffrent
I liked it though I liked the description and of course the story itself Nice job
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Haha, wow!! Amazing!!!! I like it!! Yeah, football players (at least where I live) are considered as staright as rulers but it's obvious now that some of them are a little on the gay/bi side, haha. I liked this a lot!! It was nearly perfect and II cannot wait to read the rest!!!!
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WOAH
DAMN! that was awesome! it's so strange that there's an orgy going on with football players. they just seem so straight. but i loved it!beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 10, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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keep going its getting really good. tell me if you add more please i really would love to read mroe of it...good job it turned me on pretty well.
overall: 7.
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holy shit fucking awsome i love it please please please finish it pleaseeee i love gay porn oh yes please
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Interesting can't wait to read the rest.
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