Through the settling dust and haze, the colours appear. But wait! That is not the colour I observed before! What has happened? What has changed? Yet again, as I peer, the colours go from rich red to deep purple. The light about me has also changed ... could this be what has altered my perception of what I see?1
On return to a similar place on the road at a later date, I take time to look again. The clouds hang low, the humidity is high, the colour now has gone very bland, only broken by the cascading jewels being made to dance by the shafts of sun streaking from the portals in the dark puffy ceiling.2
Sitting there with sweat lines across the lenses of my glasses, forcing a jerking view of the scene, my thoughts wander. To others of this land, the explanation is clear, after being told to them by their fathers and their fathers' fathers - the stories of how it all began - yet the majesty of it all eludes the one now confronted with the scene. Is the answer as to why the coat of this inanimate object changes and is seen by every viewer differently, set by nature? To give it the aura of life? Or maybe the explanation is the one understood by those that understand this land so well?3
These things fill my mind as I watch the clouds part and the high angle of the sun casts dark lines in the crevasses and etchings, giving a heightened definition to the now washed and clean surfaces.4
Unable to solve this riddle in my mind, I comfort myself with the notion that maybe I am not supposed to know the answers to these questions. My role is only to marvel and gain solace from the fact that I am one of the privileged, being given the time to just sit and let the moods of "the rock" be presented to me.5
Author notes
"The Rock" is known by one and all here in Australia as Ayers Rock, which is a huge monolith jutting from the surrounding flat semi arid desert. The colours referred to can only be imagined if you have never seen the desert colours change.
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oh i wanna see it!! You have really great descriptions, I feel like I'm actually seeing it, but I know im not lol
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oooh!! that was beautiful, it makes me want to go see it!
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Your descriptions were truly very excellant. You seemed to bring a whole new light to something i have never seen...brought it to a clear picture in my mind. So wonderful job on this...it was really great!
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Good 'un on ya, mate!
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Great Mate
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Good point of view. Its very creative! Great job!
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I love your style of writing and detail. It is a bit unclear what the rock is exactly, but the imagery is vivid.
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Its Uluru, google it lol... it's like Australia's most famous natural landmark =D... Yay Australia!
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Very beautiful. Such perfect, detailed descriptions, a short piece asking superb questions, provoking the thoughts of the reader, pulling their minds instantly into the same track as the character's. Cleverly written, and described wonderfully. Superb imagery, pictures behind every word, so carefully and thoughtfully selected. This sort of piece really makes the reader slow down and think about things, as being in such a place would. I think my favourite part was 'cascading jewels', though there were many other beautiful bits too. Brilliant work!
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Nicely written and very descriptive. I think you have a real knack for giving the reader..well putting the reader there rather. Keep up the good work and until next time,
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Oh, I was think that the rock was something magical, I deffinitely was not expecting this
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Wow...brilliantly descriptive, but it's just my opinion...too wordy. xD
I like how you end this, the realization bit. Very well-structured but it didn't fully hold my interest.
-HT
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Wow, that's really cool.... You really use fantastic imagery to show your reader the rock ^-^
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I think that "The Rock" is pretty well written, "But wait!". You have many parts where it is random. I like your weather descriptions, at how humid it is, and the story allows me to feel and see where I really am. You ask a lot of questions...too many in fact. You do not want the reader to wander away from your story, and into his own mind, where he will sit thinking. No...that is bad. But, I still like this part where you state, "Unable to solve this riddle in my mind, I comfort myself with the notion that maybe I am not supposed to know the answers to these questions. My role is only to marvel and gain solace from the fact that I am one of the privileged, being given the time to just sit and let the moods of "the rock" be presented to me." That is worded very well, and makes me like your writing very much.
I would love to visit this rock, as much as I would love to read your writing. You really have a way with words.
, MagicMonster00M: You have talent. I really enjoyed your story. Keep writing, and good luck on story write. -
I'd like to see that rock sometime. You make it sound really cool.
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Wow...this is great!
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I found this a little hard to follow. Because you were sort of dictating your thoughts it was jumpy and badly phrased in some parts. Still, by writing this way you gave a unique view, and perhaps with a careful edit you could make this into a really great story. (Loved some of the imagry, by the way).
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Wow, you have a really engaging way of writing! I really enjoyed this piece, you allowed me to really try to picture what you are describing. I absolutely loved the last paragraph, particularly the line: "I comfort myself with the notion that maybe I am not supposed to know the answers to these questions". It has so many different scopes of meaning. Thank you for putting this out there!
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I like it!
Good descriptions and detail. Can't wait to see what happens next! Good sentence structure and love the imagery; you have a way with words my friend.
Good Start!
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I love how you described the scenery in this, your imagery is strikingly vivid, and I love stories with great imagery.
This is really well written, and also has really good flow, and it also has good questions in the third paragraph.
I really enjoyed this, well done!
~Miranda
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You described the scene extremely well, which served to make it engaging and enjoyable. Well done.
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i love the rich discriptions and how i can image what you were describing. this is a very good peice. i like this and keep writing. it is pretty good peice.
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Being Aussie, I picked that you were describing Ayers Rock from near the start - or at least a really beautiful sunset! Nice imagery and rich descriptions.
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This is a great description of a scene, it feel slike you were actually there. Great job. Kais =)
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This sounds like poetry, which, by looking at it, I can see that it clearly is not. Now I really wish I could go and see it.
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This is beautiful! I've always wanted to see Ayers Rock, but have never had the chance to go to Australia. The sublimity of nature really seeps out of your words. Simply beautiful, I love it!
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Nice way to describe a piece of bautiful scenery. Very nicely done! i can put myself in the writer's shoe and imagine it myself! Really a job well done
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I thought you did a wonderful job of describing this in great detail.
Great job.
Sarah.
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The discription is awesome. Love the imagery used. It's a really good piece. It actually paints the picture in front of my eyes.
Well Done! Good Job!
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The imagery in the story is perfect. Also I like the flow of the story. It almost reads as though it were a poem. I was confused by the whole colours thing, but after reading the author's note, I think I understand.
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Wonderful descriptions in this piece, you make me want to go there right now.
Since so many people have already commented a lot, I will focus on something different. I liked your author's note giving further explanation of "the rock", an addition that only strengthens your piece.
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Very great job! It is short but I found myself even reading it twice Very well done!
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Very cool. This had the undertones of an incredibly deep almos philosophical point to it. I commend you and you're amazing use of imagery to convey your point,
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Very Graphic!
Go Uluru, go Australia and go your graphic description! Loved it! (if u didn't guess it from the start, i'm aussie)
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Hmmmmm...for some reason this reminded me of Shakespeare, lol. I have no clue why. this was very good, good job ^.^
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Wow... I've seen pictures. I want to go to Australia soooo badly... That'll be the first sight I see! Thanks for sharing this with non-Australians and painting the images in our head.
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I've heard of Ayers Rock, though I've never been to Australia (I do plan to go however). It sounds like an amazing sight, which you usually don't expect from a desert. Great description, I definitely want to see it now.
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Darn
I'm so jealous. I wanna see that. It sounds beautiful. I think it's awesome. I'm guessing it's just one of those natural beauties that can't be replicated, like a sunset or something.
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a vivid description of the rock and how it looks when time passes by. The change from red to deep purple paints a picture of a time from late afternoon slowly changing to night. a nice write. Keep on writing!
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I really like that. You did a good job describing the scenes, very discritptive. I would enjoy reading more of your work.
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cool very discriptive dude very good and lots of long words i agree very medetative!
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Very good. I love how it depicts only a few seconds in someones life but gives it in astonishing detail. Good descriptive words. Keep up the good work!
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Well written!
A well written story! Good words. Thanks for the read! Keep it up!
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Fantastic
The picture you paint here is absolutely gorgeous, I feel almost as though I am there seeing it myself. This story is almost medative causing one to think about life, existence and the reason... Excellent read, thank you. -
Great descriptions. Nice use of words. They seem to flow and not stumble (I really hate stumbling). Make me want to see Austrualia even more. Thanks for sharing
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well written.
it reminds me of something i would write.
i love stories that ask questions, because it shows that nothing is for sure and nothing is perfect (i dont know if u understand what i mean by that but whatever).
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