Life without Mama dearest was hell.He missed her clumsy odorous feet,toothless nasty grin and faint fishy odour.If only the foolish old hag hadn't slipped down the stairs.So boringly inconsiderate of her.1
Friends no longer stopped by.They seemed weary and annoyed by his disregard for that sexy blonde siren of a wife whilst continuously nagging on about his disgusting old mother.But he knew better.Mama worshipped money almost as fervently as he.Both bought as much as they could for as little as they could get away with paying from the poor tradesmen whose families lived on their paltry earnings.Later mother and son would sit down ,sipping hot over sweetened tea, and write down in their account books every last fils. spent. 2
The servants had departed except for "Chef" who continued stuffing suckling lambs with blood spattering everywhere after the ritual slaughtering. But belching and farting alone was no fun and the toilets were no longer splattered in the way he had grown accustomed to..Life hardly seemed worth living but damned if he would commit suicide and let the dogs inherit his considerable wealth.3
Suddenly,an idea came.Getting out the gold Rover sports car with the fancy low numberplate,he drove speedily down to the burial ground.Nothing fancy,Mama would have hated that,but a great pile of dusty yellow sand covering the enormous bulk.Digging frantically,he reached the white cloth covering Mama.Tenderly he picked up the body delighting as the putrid smell filled his parched nostrils.4
Placing the lump reverently in the trunk he drove home.triumphant smile on thin lips.He frantically jerked up the trunk and pulled back the cloth.Mama had not changed much save for the pallid fat maggots sluggishly crawling out of assorted orfices.He dragged the body into the mansion and with difficulty managed to get the body into "Her" chair. The rigor mortis proved challenging but the bones snapped easily.5
He smiled at Mama and began his ritual whining.Suddenly the house had become his home again.He softly kissed the skull like brow and whispered"Welcome home,Mama"6
Author notes
Read the first part so this will make sense,Enjoy.I know I did.
Please tell me what you think
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nice vocabulary. really impressive. good try!!!!
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I loved the beginning of the piece. The end was very unsettling. I liked how the story just flowed on, and then suddenly somebody was digging up an old grave and kissing a skull. Very creepy.
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whoa, this is a bit freaky, gave me chills throughout my spine, great write though, I will check out the first part when I get home from work.
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That's freakish o.o XD But I probably need to read the first part in order for this to make sense to me. nice description.
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Need to work on your punctuation - aways add a space after a full-stop.
Good descriptions though, and interesting characterbeginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 5.
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I need to read part one too I think. From what I read here this guy seems quite creepy. He must have gotten on REALLY well with his mother to get her back like that! Nicely written and fab description. Well Done. Kais =)
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Uhhhhhhmmmm...
So what's going on here? I might read part one, just so that it makes more sense. Thanks for that note!
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...i'll go read the first part i'm guessin so that it makes some sense...
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This was a bit odd, but nicely written. Good job.
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Guess I should take your advice and read the first part...this part is certainly odd enough...creepy too. But there's a twinge of humor at the end, at least I found it so. Glad he has him Mama back!
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Mama will never leave again.
Thank you for readin and commenting.Yes read Part One and then all will be revealedAll the best.Elizabeth
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