While walking home from school Jess was thinking how ironic life could be. She was living in a sweet foster home when her father pulled her out. He wanted to be a 'family'. Dad truly didn't understand what that meant, she was slowly starting to realize.1
Family was where every member was loved and cherished. Not forced to conform to stupid rules, or used as a cleaning servant. She didn't hate her dad, on the contrary, she loved him, as illogical as that may sound.2
She wanted him so to be happy with her, with life in general. She just didn't comprehend what he wanted from her. She did her best to be the best twelve year old she could. She was still a child, but had lived through so much she felt older. A lot older.3
She was thinking girl thoughts no girl should ever have to deal with, but she knew many did. She also knew many had it worse than she. She had good food, a clean bed and even if he didn't show it, a stern father who tried to love her. Problem was, she was a dreamer. 4
She dreamed many things. She dreamed most of being a veterinarian. She adored animals and they her. She could coax squirrels to eat from her hand. Soothe hurt birds and dogs would always beg for her attention. Seemed just what she needed sometimes.5
Dad did allow her to pick out a dog from the pound and once they found a stray kitten in the parking lot of sears and took it home. The kitten never left. Maybe dad was trying to be a family. She shook her head and thought some more. She then thought of the times dad made pancakes for dinner because they were her favorite. How he taught her to ride her bike. How they'd spend Sundays ironing together, while listening to big band music. Dad trying to teach her how to jitterbug to it. 6
The more she thought, the more she realized maybe it was she who was wrong. Parents are supposed to give rules.7
She was old enough, perhaps that's why he gave out so many chores. The harder she thought on this, the more she came to realize that they WERE a family. Strange as it may be to some. 8
She walked home a little lighter in step. No longer dreading her chores and resolving to help out even more. Maybe she'd even try to bake him a cake and see if she could get him to smile. After all, dad deserved that. Suddenly she knew , just knew, that things would be fine. She couldn't wait to get to her home. That's where she and her family belonged. Together.9
Author notes
I wrote this story from real life..I just changed the name of the girl. I still miss my dad..and to this day don't iron a thing as the memories of him at his best are too strong... peace..shzoosy
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent! You really make the emotions detailed and easy to understand. Great job. Keep it up.
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Very good. Shows the thoughts of so many children who have not always known family but are suddenly brought into one. Breaking from the freedom to the gentle ties of the family bond can be hard to fathom in the beginning.
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This is good. I like the way it was written. The way it came across as happening all to you. First person I believe is what the writers call it. I enjoyed the read and it did make me feel like it was a real life story that it truly was happening to you. Good job.
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Aww, that was sweet. Detailed, descriptive, emotional. Great expression of feeling.
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Very VERY beautiful, and extremely unexpected. So wonderful I can hardly express it. Just amazing. Flowed wonderfully, following a train of thought smoothly and consistently, keeping my interest all the way through. Excellent read, and very sweet and simplistic, about a strong subject. Sometimes it's hard to realise someone is hurting you without meaning to, and that they love you. So sweet. I liked th eway she thought of all the things he did for her, and realised it meant he did love her dearly. And then she ran home to do all her chores. Awwww. *wipes away a tear* Very beautiful, strong, and sweet. Great work!
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It sounds like my family, not really. I loved it keep up the good work
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Beautiful, full of emotions, and very detailed... I loved this =]
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A lot of emotions very well woven into this story and a good clear way of showing the thoughts of the main charecture. well written.
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This is really sweet, nice and upbeat and a joy to read. I am happy to read a piece about family that ends happily and isn't dark. This is a really nice tribute to your father too. Great job!
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this is sweet and emtional its true what yousaid about family and everyone should know what it feels like i liked the last bit about peace with your father it was lovely
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Family is what you make it. Perhaps the father in this was doing the best he could.
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This is full of emotion and is really loevely. Well done. Kais=)
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Emotinal and sad
This made me want to cry. Especially because it is... your life? Just the fact that it was true made it emotinal and sad. My favorite part was the last paragraph. The bit about her and her dad finding peace, sort of, and that they were a family. Really cool, nevertheless! -
I loved this, you did a great job with the details and I can tell you poured your heart into this.
Sarah.
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW! This is soo touching! A relationship between a parent and a child is really really strong. I feel priveleged to read this prose. Love this message. Good Job!
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This is a really good story and has a nice message to it. Keep up the good work. You put a lot of emotions in to this.
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This has such a wonderful message. It gives off so many mixtures of feelings in the story. I think that you did a wonderful job
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My whole family is still together; both parents and all ten kids. I hope I never lose any of them....it must be terrible.
Perfect spelling and grammar.
A++
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sadly sweet
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I think that you had a very good message here. And you didn't force it, it just came naturally. I'm glad you have such great memories of your dad. Wonderful and thoughtful story. Thanks for sharing.
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