Shia

Shia stepped into the dark house the door creaking behind him. His weight made the floor board’s creek with every step. His eyes darted from wall to wall large wooden door’s surrounded the walls. The house groaned as it settled. Shia took another step the thick coat of dust lazing on the floor flew up in Shia’s face frowning he walked slowly to the first door. “Why, why is he doing this to me,” Shia stuttered.1

“He” was “the voice”. He called Shia’s house and left messages for him all night and all day. Shia never answered them. He wanted Shia to go to a house. He never said anymore besides the instructions on how to get there and what he should do. “…street when you get to the house go in go in any door the rest is up to you.”2

Shia held out his hand inching closer to the doorknob. Jumping back as a centipede crawled mischievously across the door knob. Slowly backing up he ran into a warm figure. Screaming he raced the last door on the left flinging it open he quickly slamed it behind him.3

“Hey sorry I scared you could I come in I’m Jasmine,” a soft girl’s voice called through the heavy wooden door. Shia hesitated before opening the door a crack a hand held a flashlight revealing a beautiful young girl. “Sorry again.”4

“Oh no I’m sorry I didn’t know anybody else would be here.”5

“I didn’t even know I would actually show but that voice was so…”6

“He harassed you to! I was thinking about telling my parents but they didn’t come home and he said they were here that’s how he lured me here.”7

“Really that’s awful I was sleeping over at my friends she disappeared her family was on vacation I came here to get her back.”8

“Well let’s look around this place gives me the creeps.”9

“Me to.” They slowly walked on looking around they where walking down a hallway. The short length of light from the dimming flashlight only revealed at least two feet in front of them there fore the end of the hallway was enveloped in darkness. 10

"Did you hear that?" Jasmine looked around startled. Shia shook his head. 11

"I didn't hear anything... wait I think I just heard a whisper." Shia slowly inched towards a door cracked open. "Coming from this door," he whispered.12

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to be continued...???14

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Screaming he raced the last door on the left flinging it open he quickly slamed it behind him.

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  • Kartz
    September 4
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    Hmmm... I liked the suspense you have thrown in... Good work!


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    July 20

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    "Shia took another step the thick coat of dust lazing on the floor flew up in Shia’s face frowning he walked slowly to the first door" is three sentences in one. You need full stops here.

    Also, "Floor-boards creak" instead of "creek". xD

    Hm...what's the author's note sowing us? A sneak peak?

    Interesting idea. Sorta like that movie that's coming out, with Shia LaBeouf in it.

    -HT


  • Juliette Rose
    April 4, 2006

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    I can't wait for more! Please tell me when you add on! great suspense, and I want to find out more about the characters!
    juliette