She sits in her chair, waiting for the bell to ring, Her white hair falling over her face slightly. Peetah hated this time of day, the end of school, it often brought her a good kicking. The other elves in her class bullioed her, just because she didn't come from the mountains. This made her angry, and more willing to be the first to leave.1
The bell rang, and Peetah gathered her things and ran out the classroom, though there was little point. She had been ordered to pick up her younger brother Melvin, and therefore had to wait around. Most of the mountain elves that picked on her walked that way, so the only hope she had was that there were others picking up their children too. Peetah had always hated picking up Melvin. He had always tortured her on the way home. She had often felt like pulling on his flame red hair and leaving him behind. She had also wondered why her older sister, Enya had never been to pick him up. 2
Enya had always made the excuse of being busy after school. Yet Peetah knew she was just chasing after some of the mountain boys in her year. Well why not? Peetah had always seen Enya as the good looking one, long flame red hair, and violet eyes, the mountain elves seem to worship her everywhere she went. Peetah was jealous of her sister, there was no doubt. Her white hair was extremely rare among elves, and only the woodland elves had it in their gene pool. Peetah also had violet eyes. Piercing eyes, which most elves would fear.3
Finally, Peetah heard Melvin coming down the path. She had ignored the insults from the mountain elves that had walked passed her. As Melvin approached, she quickly grabbed his hand and rushed home. 4
At home was always the same, her mother and father would always greet home Enya and Melvin, but they dismissed Peetah, as though they had heard it all before. This had happened every night this week, and Peetah was getting annoyed with it. She heard her parents say that they were going out for a while. The first thing she heard was
"I'm busy, I have a school project to do," from her sister.
"You liar, you just want to go out again," Peetah shouted back, before getting shouted at from her parents. They never took her side. They always favoured her sister over her. Peetah eventually just shouted,
"Then take him with you. I always babysit the little runt. Enya says she is busy and then leaves the minute you walk out the door." She then ran out into the back yard facing into the woods, before starting to cry.
"Whats wrong?" a mystery voice said from outside the yard. Peetah looked up, only to see the most popular elf in the school. Peetah was shell shocked, he was really handsome. Long black hair, emerald green eyes, and tall. Peetah finally managed to mutter out the words
"Family, they don't understand, or even listen to me."
"Family huh? I thought it had something to do with those other elves. I know they pick on you, yet I don't see why. You're really pretty. By the way, my name is Mika," said the young male elf. Peetah looked up and smiled a little, tears still in her velvet eyes,
"Peetah."
"Well Peetah, mind if I call for you before school tomorrow?" Mika asked.
"Sure," Peetah replied
"See you tomorrow then," Mika said, before picking up her hand, and placing a kiss upon it. He then walked back to his family further into the woods.5
Author notes
Well, this is the first chapter of a new fantasy story I'm working on. This is pretty much just the beginning, so if you want the mystery, just be patient and it will be here soon. Hope you like this.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow! you have me hook, line and sinker..... Wheres the restm have you written it yet? I would love to read more on this! It really has me interested! The imagery is superb!


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Good, but your spelling and grammer definitely need work. You also need to space this somewhat, its too cramped together. Keep writing!
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Nice. It's just like an everyday story of life... and then you mention that they're elves and it gives it a little change of air, but not really that much. It's as if normal life poofed into being fantasy. Can't wait to read more.
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This is good. I like the fact it all seems so 'normal' and yet it is elvish people. I think this is really good. PLease continue!!!!!! Kais


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this is a good story i mean killer and the font is not you fault it is this stupid sites, i mean i had to copy and paste in order to read the story, it was worthit, tell me when the next one is posted, keep it flowing
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