Dear Perry,1
Words can not express the way I feel about you and how you make me feel. I could try and say only certain things but they will never be enough. I love how you look into my eyes when you talk to me, it shows me that you care. The way you luagh at my goofyness it allways makes me feel better. When you touch me I can feel the love you have for me and I hope it is the same way with you. I am looking forward to spending the rest of eternity with you. I don't think there could possibly be anyone else I would rather do it with. Everything you do is so perfect. I can never stay mad at you longer than 5 minutes. The way you look at me with those puppy eyes, who could? The way you care for me makes me feel complete, this all may sound cliche but it all is so true. No one could ever make me feel the way that you do. Thank you for all the love you have given me. Thank you for all the times we have shared. I love you with all my heart. You mean the world to me. 2
Love Allways,3
Your Angel...4
Author notes
This is how I feel about my boyfreind....even though I don't think I could ever show him this...
A contest entry
- Honesty, Love, Words, and Letters by Tangled Angle.
100 points, ended April 9, 2006, 13 entries
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Aww. If you had divided it into more paragraphs it might have flowed a little better, but I do like this and it's very sweet. Thanks for posting.
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Awww, very sweet. very good piece, which many people can relate to and understand. Perhaps (this is just a suggestion) you might be better removing the name? Name's create association, and association is often unwanted in a piece like this. On the other hand, it makes it more personal and feeling, so possibly it's good in there. Anyway, brilliant piece, keep it up and good luck!
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At the end you put ALLWAYS instead of ALWAYS... but besides that is was very sweet.
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This is so sweet, you should show him, this would make him
you even more!
Keep writing this way and you could become a perfesional!
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Cute letter. It always helps to get it out - its that you thought about him that is what counts.
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Oh, you should totally show him this! I think he would love it! Me and my boyfriend regularily exchange love letters and it keeps us so bonded togther. I think he would love it. Well done! Kais =)
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Hmmm... maybe you should show him this. It's certainly sweet! The words you used were so descriptive and mataphoric and just made me feel warm and fuzzy, lol. Great job and I hope he gets to read this. It's really great, keep it up!
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This was short, honest, and not long. lol Most of the entries in this contest were longer, half of them being way too long. But I am happy to see a short letter- a normal sized letter, something you will write to your friend, not some huge long essay- anyway. lol I will debate in my head for the next couple of days whether I should bring this into the finalist list. I think you did a great job, this was refreshing to read. I would be flattered to hear my girlfriend tell me this- if I had one. I did though but whatever- thats a whole other story. Good job :)
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 3, overall: 7, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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