All Hot and Bothered

"Laura," Rod begged me, tears in his eyes. "Please, reconsider."1

Just seeing those tears tugged at my heartstrings. "You know I can't," I whispered, feeling his pain seep deeper into me. "I have a commitment, which I plan to honour. To both Alex and myself."2

Rod took hold of both my hands, his tears now falling like blood, and his voice trembling as though he were about to break. "Laura, please," he pleaded, squeezing my hands tighter as he dissolved into hysteria. "You mak me feel what no one ever has, or ever will. Give it a chance, and you will see... One night with you would make my lifetime."3

I already knew that discussing sex with Rod when we were alone in a room was a bad idea, but I continued anyhow. "If I had sex with you," I replied, trying my best to still sound sympathetic, "I would kill my relationship. Not just with Alex and my family, but myself as well. Let's face it, hun... It's not going to happen."4

"Give it a chance," he repeated, and pulled me into a fiery kiss. Caught off-guard, I was completely shocked as Rod worked his magic, unbuttoning my top and continuing lower. Before I knew it, I was on the ground, topless, with my pants unzipped. Rod stared at me, his sad, glassy brown eyes seeming to glaze over. "Such beauty," he whispered, dropping to his knees in front of me. "Absolute beauty, the pinnacle of perfection; What all the world should strive to be..." 5

He bent his head and kissed my neck, his tears splattering my chest like a soft, spring rain. His fingers continued their lazy descent of my torso, touching me even where I feared to go myself. "And I know just how to get you going," he whispered, his voice shaking as he slid his fingers into my most sacred space. The shock hit me like a bolt of lightning as he continued to massage my insides, which were, by now, burning like wildfire. I tried to pull away, but I relented and threw my head back, arching as he hit my hot spot again and again. 6

At the same time, he pulled out his most precious jewel, rubbing the swollen head with force and urgency. "Oh God, he gasped, his breathing ragged. "I think I'm going to..." He moaned as I took his shaft in my hand and continued rubbing its moistened tip with my thumb. 7

"Ohhhh God, how I want you," he rasped, as he continued to pump his fingers in and out of my hot hole. "I want your mouth on me...Oh Lord, yes!" He moaned louder as I took his length into my mouth. He was delirious by this point, and I continued sucking as I felt him getting harder by the minute. 8

He disappeared for a moment, then returned and, donning the sheath, he slid his organ into me. Too surprised to react, I could do nothing but moan and arch my back as he entered my flesh, spasming against my own. He looked down to glimpse himself, his manhood, inside of me, and I let out a cry of pain as he drove it in to the hilt. He withdrew immediately, but I grabbed onto his muscular shoulders and dug my nails in, drawing blood, and he shuddered violently as I again took hold of his erect member and stroked it gently, rubbing the tip with my thumb. 9

"Oh, don't you stop," he begged me, his voice trembling and tears in his eyes as he slowly slipped back into my orifice. I continued to hold him, just stroking and sucking until he finally exploded into convulsions. His orgasms triggered my own and I was reduced to a ball of nerves, right there on the library floor.10

Soon enough, though, he stood up, still shaking from the aftermath of his release. "Oh God," he whispered, almost in tears again. "I'm sorry, Laura... So sorry..." He hugged me tightly to his chest, then disappeared around the nearest corner. Confused, I stared after him, exhausted and wondering what in God's name had just happened...

Author notes

*I started working on the Love and Hockey series when I was in grade nine, but I haven't worked on it since grade ll. My main character, Laura "Ref Mo" Montcalm, is an age-progressed version of myself, and she is everyone's favourite referee, happily married, et cetera. Her best friend Rod, a dark, sensitive 'nerd' from the wrong side of the tracks, is very depressed and emotional, and his intense, romantic feelings for Laura are the only reason for his lonely existence. It's a game of dangerous desire as he attempts to win the affections of the woman that he loves, the only one that he cannot have.
Note: This story was NOT a part of the original book. Instead, it is a fun, yet depressing, piece that explores more of Rod's identity as a sexual creature, as opposed to the manic-depressive that appeared in the first part of the series.

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  • The Menace
    June 11, 2007

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    wow...i like Rod..lol...seriously..this was really nice..so passionate.and filled with emotion...great job..you just seemed to let everythign out


  • Linda King CT-USA
    April 4, 2006
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    great

    are you going to continue this story - or just leave us hanging. not to be rude, but it had just gotten good - then poof - it was over.

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 5, ending: 1, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • rindomai
    March 28, 2006
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    wow...

    well i didnt read the rest (assuming from your authors notes that there is more heh) but based on this excerpt alone... WOW. first off, i LOVE how you characterized Rod. he may be a dreary depressed nerd somewhere else but that kind of passion and desire is just... amazing. and so real. some of the better erotica i've read in a while, actually... mostly because it has a point, has a storyline, and has real characterization beyond the obvious pleasure.

    i think the only "meh" part was the end!!!! what was that all about?! i'm hoping you have more of this somewhere because just ending it like that, saying that she was left with her thoughts... what thoughts? what about him? what happens to them??

    beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, overall: 7, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 5.


  • March 28, 2006
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    WOW

    Excuse me I will be right back..........Back there that's better. That is a wonderful piece of sensual writing. I was breanting hard and copped a boner. Gee thanks, wife is out of town. Okay, now for one critical statement. Continuity errors are a writer worset nightmare. In paragraph 5 you mentioned that he disappered and came back with a sheath, condom I would assume, and later in the paragraph you stated, " I was covered in the milky evidence of his passion. Sorry can't have it both ways either he wore a rubber or he did not. Or, I guess it could have broke and she became pregnat with his child.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: overall, ending: 5, dialog: , characters: 5.