Pepper had a calf. We named her Jaffa. We named her Jaffa after Daddy's favourite biscuits because when he realised Pepper was going to have a baby he dropped his Jaffa Cake into his tea !! Jaffa is small and very cute. I love her already. Pepper is taking very good care of Jaffa. She is a good mama. 1
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Jaffa is the second calf born on our farm this month ! :)
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the new calf! (My stint in England saw many a box of orangey Jaffa cakes - YUM!) She sounds adorable. Is this a true story?
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Awwww i like that name Jaffa
a good story in how Jaffer got his name
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Awww!
This is such an adorable story! I loved how you guys picked the name Jaffa! It is such an unusual sotry! Good work!
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Jaffa is so fortunate. Interesting writeup! So, what is the scene after this. Any progress?
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Wow, gotta love the way you decided to name the calf.
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Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, cuuuuuuuuuuuuuute. I love cows! They're beautiful and intelligent creatures. This was really nice, very sweet. Add some descriptions of the cows to get across some imagery. I liked the last line, it was so CUTE!!!!!!!!!! Awwwwww, this is just such a sweet piece. And I like the names. Pepper and Jaffa. How did you come to namePepper? I liked the way Jaffa got her name, it's lovely. I loved this, it was so happy! ^^!
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Very random.... Funny though... Grammar was good and so was your spelling... Keep everyythign you wrrite random, tahts how i like it keep up the good work an dhope everything goes well with the calf
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Awww! So cute! I totally wih I could see the cute little bundle of joy. If you could send me a picture at Kyndallr_mills@yahoo.com. Pretty please! Much appercated
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Aww, calves are sooo cute
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Not much plot but that's okay. The simple clear phrasing made me smile. Just generally like it
beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 1, ending: 2, dialog: 3, characters: 2.
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Aww congrats..LOL...This is an odd posting but still a sweet and cute one. LOL. Needs a picture! HAHA
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That's adorable! Congrats on the birth of the calf. Writing-wise, I can point out a few places with repetition, where you can combine sentences to make them one. Here's a revised version of your paragraph:
Pepper had a calf. We named her Jaffa after Daddy's favourite biscuits because, when he realised Pepper was going to have a baby, he dropped his Jaffa Cake into his tea!! Jaffa is small and very cute. I love her already. Pepper is a good mama, and she is taking very good care of Jaffa.
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Cute!!!
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This was really cute, but like Shadow said you need to expand it because it could make a great story.
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EXPAND EXPAND EXPAND. This could make a really good and cute story, but it's too short and the characters are as flat as paper. Give them and the calf some life. Have dialog and descriptions and use imagry. Put people into your story by making it real!
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LOL, very nice. I think this was a wonderful, short story. Keep up the good work.
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EEEEK!!!!! AWWWWWWWWW A cute little baby calf?!?!?!!?!?! That's soooooo cute!!!!!!! I have never had a cow before!!! I have had a sheep!!!! HIs name was Reko!!!! Anyway! This is cute, adorable, and awesome ^.^
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AWWWWW! I love baby animals. Cows are soooooo cute!. this is a really cute paragraph!
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Good news!
I really liked this. I can see that it's based on something that really happened to you. May I suggest that you take it upon yourself to write more of this...including characters (such as your Daddy) and the dialogue involved in Jaffa's coming to be?
Again, good news. I'm happy for you.
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