Foreign Deception

Plot:1

A man named Kevin Roberts is left a small fortune when his uncle dies. But to inherit the money he must be married within 60 days. This poses a problem since he has not had a date in years and has confessed he's given up on the opposite sex. 2

So, to overcome this problem he seeks the assistance of a greedy lawyer named Matthew Scott. Scott advises him to send for a mail order bride. 3

Roberts takes this advice and orders his bride, Natalia. When she arrives he is very taken with her and slowly starts to fall in love with her. Little does he know, Natalia is a criminal mastermind, who has scammed numerous men in a number of different countries. Natalia is a pro, and Kevin is falling hard and fast. 4

Scott sees right through her, though. And quickly he lets her know he wants a piece of the pie. Natalia is taken with Scott's charm and whit, since he is the first person to ever figure her out.5

At the end of the 60 days Roberts receives his inheritance which Natalia quickly gets her hands on, and she and Scott exit the country together and live a life of crime. Leaving Kevin penniless and heartbroken. He commits suicide.6

Author notes

This is a plot for a play I want to write. So yeah...its not very interesting in this form...but when I write it in lines form hopefully it will be more entertaining. <3

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  • secretpart
    March 18

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    Humm Interesting...

    At first I expected it to be some sort of comedy-romance, but then you ended it pretty dramatically. Somehow, Scott's not really my perfect man, lol. I hope you'll make us like them? Because I only feel sorry for Roberts xD.

  • Black-Bird
    February 25
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    Had me until...

    The sixth paragraph. I wanted Roberts to stay alive, take revenge and follow them. I wanted to see Natalia fall for him eventually and change her ways. I wanted Scott to drop dead.
    Great theme, though. Nevermind what I say, it's ultimately your decision.
    Interesting read.

  • Trendster
    January 31

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    Well its a good story idea but it looks quite one sided. Kevin's role should be more especially in the end....his struggle when he knows about Natalia.


  • Dreams of Insanity
    December 12, 2008

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    It sounds like an incredibly interesting plot. Deffinitely would be something worth writing. I really hope you do! If this became some big shot play, I would surely pay to see it. It sounds excellent.


  • Thorn-on-the-Rose
    September 7, 2008

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    You should write it out, it has a strong background, something I would definently be interested in reading, good job!! =DDD

    -Dani


  • Smashlord Kratos
    June 12, 2008

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    Wow, that's... pretty terrible. I guess I just don't like it when some idiot ruins somebody else's life like that. I don't really know what "mail order bride" is referring to, either.


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    March 23, 2008

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    "mail order bride..." (laughs head off)

    "whit" = "wit"

    Whoa...blunt ending...perhaps more detail?


  • tallblondie gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    Not the most original plot - I do recall a movie with Adam Sandler that sounds awfully familiar to this story line. Except for the suicide thing - they don't put that in Hollywood much.

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