Moaning in her sleep, Sheryl turned over. She was having trouble falling into a deep sleep because of the summer’s heat. Even late at night the air felt compressing, scorching. Flinging the blankets off of her, Sheryl sprawled out on top of her sheets, letting the fan blow on her bare skin. Settling into a comfortable position, Sheryl nodded off again.1
A caress to her breast tried to pull Sheryl from her sleep. She turned over without actually waking up. The caress became more intense, her breasts were being held in hands and a warm breath was blowing across them. Feeling her nipples perking at the attention, Sheryl managed to halfway open her eyes. Seeing no one there, she figured she was dreaming and she didn’t want to wake from it. Closing her eyes again, she let the caress carry her in waves of contentment.2
Her eyes flew opened when she felt a mouth take one of her nipples between teeth. No one lived with her and she knew she should be alone in the house. She didn’t see or hear anyone, but looking down at her breast, she noticed how the nipple appeared to be tugged on and she knew that she felt teeth teasing it. She could feel the tongue encircling her nipple. This was no dream.3
When Sheryl made a move to get off the bed, she felt a slight pressure on her shoulders, pushing her back down into the mattress. Unable to struggle against the strength, and unsure of what she was struggling against, Sheryl laid back.4
The unseen mouth left her nipple and moved slowly down her body, stopping at her belly button, where she was bathed in the warmth of the tongue. Staring down at her body, there were no tell tale sign of anything unusual happening to her, no wet trail, no shadow, no nothing. But she knew what she was feeling and that the feeling was real, very real.5
The mouth left her belly and traveled down lower. Sheryl closed her legs in a childish attempt to protect herself from her unseen assailant. Crossing her ankles she tried to use all her strength to keep her legs closed, but invisible hands reach between her thighs and seemingly with a will of their own, her legs opened exposing her shaved mound to the attack of her visitor. 6
As the fingers stroked her inner lips, despite her fear, Sheryl felt herself becoming wet. Unconsciously she arched her pelvis upwards to meet the demands of the fingers as they teased her labia. She could feel her lips being parted and two fingers invading her body. The fingers began dancing deep inside her, causing her to moan despite herself. Her juices were beginning to run out and around her lips. Sheryl bit down on her lips to keep any more moans from escaping. The fingers soon left her body and for a moment Sheryl wasn’t sure if it was over or even if she wanted it to be over. But a second later she felt her lips being parted and something thrust inside her mouth. Even though nothing was there, she tasted her own juice and began to make sucking noises. It was like sucking on flavored air, Sheryl could only imagine that she was sucking his fingers, her fingers, she wasn’t even sure what she was sucking on much less the gender.7
As if reading her mind, and wanting to let Sheryl know the gender, Sheryl felt her body being tugged. Moving with the tugging motions, Sheryl found herself bent over the bed, with her upper part buried into the mattress and her ass sticking out and up. Once in that position, she felt the pressure in the middle of the back holding her down.8
Again her legs were forced opened. With one sudden movement, she felt herself being taken from behind. Unseen as it was, she felt her cunt being filled and stretched. Unable to control herself, she began bucking under the pounding, rising her hip up to meet each thrust. No longer caring, Sheryl was moaning out loud and clutching the sheets between her hands. 9
Within minutes, Sheryl felt the hot liquid spraying deep inside her. Letting loose of herself, she was cumming right after her lover. 10
She felt a slap on her ass, and then the withdrawal. After that there was nothing more. Climbing into her bed, Sheryl was asleep within seconds of laying her head down.11
Getting up the next morning, she felt relaxed and refreshed. Convincing herself that it had been a dream, she moved from under her covers. Surprised at the tenderness she felt there, she looked between her legs and saw how red and swollen her lips looked. Not only that, she could also see the traces of her cum where it had dried on her body during the night. Still thinking she really had an erotica dream, she climbed out of bed. When she went to the restroom, she was surprised to discover a single rose laying in her sink. Picking up the rose, she held it close as she inhaled the fragrance, last night was not a dream and she could only hope that her visitor would return again.12
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Darn, if only I could have something like this happen to me XD
Fresh, original, and so very hot. This reminded me of that movie "Hollow Man", you know the part when Kevin Bacon plays with that woman's nipple and she has no idea he's there? This really turned me on...will have to take a cold shower now
Thanks for the brilliant piece.
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Very nice
Love it! Highly erotic! Very mysterious!beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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Very interesting. I'd be interested to see if he comes to visit her again, and what those future meetings entail.
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Great
I really enjoyed your story. I have no complaints.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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wow its good. its kinda weird but awsome. you should make more keep going. its awosme so far love it!
overall: 6.
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lol, i'm glad you liked this and it is a bit werid. i guess thats what happens when you have sleepless nights. thanks for the comment.
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A good first draft
This story was an effective piece of erotica that could be much better than it stands right now. Some of the phrasing is awkward, and some little plot points just seem terribly unlikely. For instance, even though the night is "scorching"(?), she is try to sleep under blankets? Still, I found the overall story very arousing, and that goes a long way towards making me like it.beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 5, overall: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 2.
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I wrote this one night in about a hour, I didn't really planned on writing and didn't know where I was going to take it. I have thought about rewriting it, or just making it over. I don't know yet. Thank you for your honest opinion.
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this was a great story keep it up
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 8, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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this was great! It was really realistic and I liked the idea of a strange visitor and how she liked it without being threatened. good write. -
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I did find this erotic and intriguing. -
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i'm glad you liked it and thanks for commenting!
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This was a nice story. It held my interest and was very erotic. Very visual, I could see it all, almost feel it. But how realistic is it? I have read another "visitor" story, but that ne was more realistic because the intruder, was seen, but he threatened ehr with a knife and forced her to go through it, and he screwed her and she enjoyed it but there was that underlying shame of enjoying it which tortured and heightened the experience for the character. THAT story was more realistically done, in terms of human emotions and reactions I think. Your's was good, but not realistic enough I don't think.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 4, overall: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 1, characters: 3.
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thank you for commenting and i dont know if i was trying for realistic or just wrote it on the spur of the moment, i didnt know where i was going to go with it but later on when i get the hang of this new site, i may add more to it or change it and try to make it more realistic. i'm glad you did take the time to read and comment and help point out what needs to be done to it.
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This was great. something very intriguing about an invisible lover. The new formatting is unusual to me as well. Your have extremely vivid imagination. LOVEd this write!
-SiNbeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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finally i can thank you for commenting on the visitor and i'm glad you liked the story.
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thanks to everyone that commented and liked this story, i would send each a personal reply, but honestly don't know how to on this new format. but i do love getting comments and feedback so i do appreciate it.
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publishable
Section 8 was my favorite. The idea of an invisable lover is exciting, and the plot was great. You have great imagination, and know how to turn your reader on! Where is my invisable lover when I need him? lol -
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Section 8 was my favorite. The idea of an invisable lover is exciting, and the plot was great. You have great imagination, and know how to turn your reader on! Where is my invisable lover when I need him? lollanguage: 5, plot: 4, overall: 8, ending: 4.
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lol thank you for commenting and i'm glad you liked the story and if you find that invisible lover, could you see if he has a twin? i need one too.
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great!
Hehe this was awesome! Very funny and sexy to read. I wonder what it was....a ghost...a vampire maybe? either way it was a great read. Hope to be reading more soon.
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lol.. thank you for the comment and i'm glad you liked the story. later i may change it a bit and make it more of a ghost. and btw... i tried to accept your add friendship thing on here and it didn't work, or at least i dont think it did.
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you have to write more, that was so good, like a better version of poltergeist, i loved it
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i dont know if i am going to write more for the visitor or redo it over and make it a tad bit better. thanks for the comment and i'm glad you liked the story.
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its not too late, are you sure i cant change the name from sheryl to kummie?
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and you say my stories are strange? lol....nice twist to a wet dream...lol
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