so...1
you thought you could just play me like that?2
string me along...3
...in your web of lies?4
you thought you could steal from me?5
take as you please?6
without giving back...7
but you never really knew me, did you?8
you never saw me when i was angry...9
...with you10
and when i was hurting, you made up some sweet, stupid excuse11
to make me think you were worth it12
but you've never seen me angry...13
...like i am right now14
did you honestly think you could get away with it all?15
pretending to be mr. right...16
pretending to be prince charming...17
you're no gentleman18
not even so much as dirt19
i said i didn't love you...20
...and you begged i take you back21
i said that i loved you...22
...and you threw it in my face23
cursed indecision24
you fool!25
did you honestly think...26
...that in the end you'd get me?27
so just go...28
...get out of my life29
...go smoke your pot30
...lace your cigarettes31
i hope you get arrested32
Author notes
if anyone does drugs and is reading this poem, please don't be offended by the last part...this poem is specifically to a certain someone who told me he never did pot, but i've recently found out it was all a lie...it's not so much that he does pot that bothers me (although i don't like it), but more the fact that he lied about it...
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I like the lack of capitals and the run-on sentences. For some reason, it gives a sense of anger and desperation. I understand how you must have felt when you wrote this, which shows how good you are at writing.
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This made me mad at this person. I felt each emotion, keep it up! Remember, m'friend, broken hearts are just fresh starts. I believe I said that to all the heartbreak stories here, but for your situation, I give you my best wishes. Find someone you'd treasure each little moment with. :]
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Emotional...mostly pissed, as far as I got from it, hahaha.
I enjoyed reading it though, I got the feeling too actually.
You did good with this and I could help but laugh by the last line. It struck me as strong, this piece.
Wonderful job!
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Wow all of the emotion....i chould tell you got anoyed!!
this betral was really good!!
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Hmm...
Honestly, I don't care for those how do drugs--It disgusts me. Especially people who lie. Believe me, I know the anger you feel...so many stupid, uncaring people in the world.
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Wow... Wonderful. Very strong, sharp biting and vengeful. Great job in expressing feelings here, I could taste the anger, and the hurt. I really liked reading this because of the power in it. Great job. It flowed nicely, and fitted very perfectly. Keep it up!
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I don't know why I love "cursed indecision" for some reason! It just struck me as powerful. Great work. Very strong emotions
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Drugs are terrible, and you had every right to be angry with your specific someone. I hope this person does get arrested, that would teach them a thing or two.
Such a stupid thing to do to your body.
Anyway, hope all works out for you in future things. Bye
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I Agree
Sorry, the new Storywrite has glitchhes, lol.beginning: , language: , plot: , overall: overall, ending: , dialog: , characters: .
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I Agree
Well no need to apology. Drugs ruin not only the lives of abusers but of those involved with them too. I speak from experience (as one who knew an abuser.) I understand your anger.beginning: 2, language: 3, overall: 5, ending: 3.
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This is really a blog entry, right?
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Yes been there and been hurt myself. No not offened, felt taht way about many a lying cheating man.
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thank you
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Um. Hi Im doctor kelly and I believe that you are suffering from a broken heart. =) No but for real, good job portraying this side of broken heartedness, I hope everything turns out ok and you can cheer up. =)
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There is no reason anyone should be offended by this, only hypocrites would be. Anyway, this was good, I found little bit of humor in it, even though it was serious. Good work.
-Tyler
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