The Chronicles of James Bowdin, The Lure of Flesh & Blood (Chapter I)

The Chronicles of James Bowdin, The Lure of Flesh & Blood1

London, September 23rd, 1769. It was a dark and gloomy night. There was a little bit of fog coming down. James Bowdin had taken Elizabeth, his bride-to-be, to the opera. On the way back from the opera house they decided to go for a walk rather taking a coach, her house was not far from there.2

Elizabeth was a beautiful woman, petite and very elegant despite the fact that she was only a farmer's daughter. James was a historian, very much in love with the idea of recollecting and compiling in writings important facts of history. 3

He was in love with her from the very first time he saw her at the market square as he was interviewing a few people about events that had happened years before... the disappearance of locals and other important things he was studying and trying to understand. He fell in love with her gorgeous eyes and her shy smile. James was never known to be driven by desires... right then he knew he had fallen in love with that fair maiden.4

The night before the opera performance he had proposed marriage to Elizabeth. She accepted joyfully to be his wife, the only thing she wanted in life was to please him as her mother had pleased her father. James and Elizabeth were incredibly happy.5

As they were getting near Elizabeth's home she stopped suddenly and taking his hand gently she pulled him closer to her. "My beloved James, please kiss me before we reach home.", she begged shamelessly. James heart pumped harder as he heard her sweet voice and without uttering a word he kissed her. They were locked in a blissful kiss forgetting where they were. His left hand started to cup her breast and in his lustful frenzy he supplicated to her, "Elizabeth, be mine..." he said to her in a husky voice. She could not resist his imploring voice neither his charm... but she also wanted in her heart and in her soul to be his and his alone... she said not one word and gave in to him. James suddenly stopped kissing her remembering where they were and looking around desperately decided to take her into the farm house. 6

She walked inside led by him... as James turned to one of the lanterns hanging at the entrance of the barn. He lighted up the lamp to a dimmed light which gave the place a romantic setting... Elizabeth reached for one of the blankets sitting on one of the corners, placing it over the straws at the end of the barn. James placed the lantern on one of the nails on the wall far from the straws and walking up to where she was, he proceeded to kiss Elizabeth once more... she was lost to heaven and to bliss with that powerful and crushing kiss.7

James placed her gently on the blanket and positioned himself on top of her still kissing her beautiful lips... he could hear her moan in his mouth as he started to lift up her dress. She parted her legs slowly to give him access to her precious sanctuary... he was pleased with her and she felt it in the way he kissed her. Pleasing him was all she wanted, all she craved for and all she was destined to do in her mind, body and soul.8

James' body was reacting to her submissive sensuality and timidity. There was something about her nervousness that drove him crazy and pushed him over the edge. His manhood was throbbing as his fingers ran softly over her slit, feeling her wetness... her body trembled beneath his frame, experiencing things she's never experienced before. Elizabeth was in total ecstasy as he ran his fingers over her engulfed clit... she arched her back and let out moans she tried to drown in her throat unsuccessfully.9

Under her breath she supplicated to him, "James, please... take me... make me yours..." she said, her voice trembling.10

James quickly unbuttoned his pants and placed himself between her wanton thighs, sliding inside of her very tight love canal and against the wall indicating he was her first man ever to enter into that sacred temple. He pushed in slowly as he kissed her. She led out a moan but more like a moan it was a cry of pain, he had entered into her completely and now was thrusting his shaft into her, slowly moving his hips taking pleasure and giving her the same pleasure. She moaned even more as his hips started to pick up a faster pace... she was unbelievable wet and he could slip inside of her easily... in and out... faster and faster. Their moans combined into lover's melody. They were both reaching that transcendent moment in ecstasy... and as Elizabeth was coming to that explosive orgasm she clutched her nails on his back ripping on his flesh... James heard her moans and undergoing the pain of her nails buried on his back he too exploded inside of her. Their juices mixing together inside of her... he rested on top of her for several minutes, his head on her chest.11

He moved to her side and looked at her... she had her eyes closed and a smile upon her lips… he fixed her dressed before buttoning his pants and laying beside her taking her in his arms he said to her, "You are my woman, Elizabeth, you belong to me now..." he said possessively.12

"I love you, James Bodwin..." she said with tears in her eyes... "I am yours forever." her voice trembled.13

He hugged her tightly in his arms making sure she understood the depths of his commitment to her now and as they were embracing each other a noise came from outside. He jumped up to his feet and said to Elizabeth, "Stay here and do not move..."14

James walked slowly to the lantern hanging on the nail and carefully walked outside to see what the noise he had heard was. He stepped outside and as he was looking to the side of the barn he heard Elizabeth scream frightened. James rushed back inside the farm house placing the lamp at the door only to be stopped by something much more powerful than him... he was not able to comprehend what was going on as he heard Elizabeth gasping for air. "Elizabeth..." he yelled for her, there was no answer.15

From the shadows appeared the form of a woman wearing a red and black corset and a black long skirt. She looked dead, her skin pale. He looked at her in disbelief as he saw two thin lines of blood streaming from her lips. "Where is my beloved Elizabeth?" he asked her almost crying. 16

She smiled at him contently and signaled her servant to bring Elizabeth out. Her servant obeyed and brought Elizabeth in his arms, her eyes were closed and her lips no longer had color in them. James noticed the blood streams coming from her delicate neck and dropped to his knees. He called Elizabeth's name in a lament… he could not believe what was happening.17

He looked up and saw the lady standing over him; the servants that held him were no longer beside him but behind her. She looked into his angry and dreadful eyes... "You will be my possession..." She said to him unflinchingly as she laughed.18

The lady in black signaled her servants to take him away and not to harm him. He fought their forces but was unable to move as they were stronger than him. As they were taking him into her carriage he looked to the barn and saw one of the servants taking the lantern he had left at the entrance of the farm house. The servant threw the lantern inside catching the straws on fire. As they drove away he was able to see the fire getting bigger and his eyes moisten with tears. He once more called Elizabeth’s name in a whisper and sobbed desperately.19

To be continued...20

© Elba E. Cruz21

March 20th, 200622

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Author notes



UNDER CONSTRUCTION

This is the Chapter I of the Chronicles of James, the main character of the short story I wrote titled "The Lure of Flesh & Blood" From here I will start a series of short stories to explain how The Count James Bodwin became a Vampire.

I hope you all enjoy it... and please give me your honest opinion... constructive critism are welcome. Remember this is the first story I write on this subject and would like for you to be as objective as possible. Thank you!

I would also like to give verses on flesh a big "Thank you dear" for inspiring me and motivating me to write this story. Jamie you know I appreciate all you've done and here this is for you. <333 Blessings!

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  • Sunshinegf
    March 26, 2006
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    magnificent piece i enjoyed it

  • Ktulu Blackwolfe
    March 23, 2006
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    Just re-reading this...I love this story, can hardly wait for chapter 2...This is so much better than my own story...again you've a great story here.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    March 22, 2006
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    aint that a...., i need to see where this ends now, i need to see more, please sis, i love this story, i like vampire tales, right after lycans and dragons, this is looking to be a great story, keep it flowing


  • DarknessFleeting
    March 21, 2006
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    sumptuous!

    Ok, thank you for the invite to read this. Loved it! I couldn't take my eyes from it! The only criticism I have to offer is to add a little more description, I want to know all the details. Other than that though, very sumptuous write you have here and I look forward to more!
    -Darkness

  • Trial and Error
    March 21, 2006
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    Not a problem I hope I may have helped in the long run

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you for the comment Kristi girl and for the heart warming applause. I am very happy you came by to read this work. Blessed be, Nena


  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    March 21, 2006
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    I love vampire stories!! I think this is very good, I was so into the story that I didn't even notice all the things that were talked about above. I like the points that Mournful Hearts Lie brought up, and I won't go there as far as the other one, I found it rather rude though. I may be out of line in saying that, but it's what I felt when I read that.
    Personally, I didn't think it was THAT bad. I think this is a very good story. It definitely kept me interested, and I can't wait for the next one!


  • Iohagh
    March 21, 2006
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    Even though indeed fantastical
    true love lives maniacal
    for James cares not
    what evil has begot.

    Smoosh.

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you so very much Amoured heart for the constructive critique... I am happy you came by to read. Blessed be, Nena

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you sis for the comment and for sending me the IM with your critique. I truly appreciate it. Blessed be, Nena

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you very much Mournful for the constructive critique... glad you came by to read. Blessings, Nena

  • Trial and Error
    March 21, 2006
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    This has potential... But, as you clicked the "A critical review is invited." box, I feel so inclined as to give you a critical reveiw.

    You were very wordy in writing this. . . While that most likely seems like a contradiction, let me explain: You wrote redundantly in some of you words. . . Such as:
    "My beloved James, please kiss me before we reach home.", she begged him shamelessly.
    The "him" is unnecessary, because there is no one else of whom she is going to beg.
    His manhood was throbbing in his pants as he was running his fingers softly over her slit, feeling her wetness...
    "in his pants" could be taken out, and it could be "as his fingers ran softly over".
    He jumped up to his feet and said to Elizabeth, "Stay here and do not move..." Elizabeth obeyed his order and stayed there quietly.
    The "stay here and do not move"..again, redundant. . .
    She looked dead as her skin was pale.
    "She looked dead, her skin pale."
    These are just some examples as to how it could be thinned out, to make the reader more entranced into the writing, rather than the words, does that make sense?

    The way you used the tense structure highly confused me, along with some of the structured information you gave. . . The first five paragraphs seem to jump back and forth in time. . . It took me a few readings to understand what you meant.

    As well, there were many punctuation mistakes. . . It looks as though that you went and wrote, as though this is just a rough draft. . . Which, may or may not be the case. . .
    But, in my opinion, it could be taken and touched up, and will be an exceptional story.

    It's been a pleasurable read
    <3Kat

  • Armoured Heart
    March 21, 2006
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    v.good

    this is interesting, i love it, although early in the chapter, you said he was not a man driven by desire, yet the way they consimate the relationship makes him seen a vey sexually driven character, but that dosent change the fact that this chapter is really good, well done keep on writting and peace out. -armoured heart-

  • sunny day
    March 21, 2006
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    I love the start!!!

    Elba, My dear sweet sister, your talent for writing is remarkable. Whether a poem or now a short story I am always captivated by your words. I have seen countless Dracula movies and read the book Dracula. You have the makings of a great short story here. Your choice of wording is always resplendent and such a joy to read. You just have a knack for making things flow so smoothly. I love the idea of the woman vampire with male servants. You go on that one sis. You have me hooked here and I will be looking for more from you.
    Thank you for sharing this with us and keep me posted please.
    Going to put a cross on now and get the holy water ready.
    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Lots of love from your sis, Joyce

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you so very much paplegba for the wonderful comment and for the heart warming applause. I am so very happy you enjoyed the reading of this work. Blessed be, Nena

  • Revwilliamfoos
    March 21, 2006
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    loved the vision

    this would make for a very very good and hot movie. good visuals
    good at holding my intrest. keep writeing

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Oh my goodness... Thank you Ktulu brother for the wonderful comment/critique and for the heart warming applause. I am so very happy you came by to read and such comment coming from you who are a veteran writing vampire stories is a wonderful compliment... it is such an honor. Blessed be, Nena

  • Ktulu Blackwolfe
    March 21, 2006
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    I can speak from experience of writing vampire stories when I say that this is remarkable. You tell a tale with words that only very few can do. I really enjoyed this and look forward to your next. The way you wrote this keeps the reader attention til the very end. Also, I know that a story such as this is very difficult to write, at least for me, which is why mine remains unfinished. Thank you for sharing such a great story. Good luck with the rest and keep up the excellent work.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*

  • Mystic Enchantress
    March 21, 2006
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    Oh my sister... thank you for the wonderful comment and for the heart warming applause. I am very happy you liked this work. I know it is a bit different from what I normally write but I am trying to make this story as detailed and enjoyable as possible and your comment just gave me a smile... so I know I am doing a few things right. Love ya sis... Blessed be, Nena


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 21, 2006
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    Wowser, sis! This is incredible! You have such a flair and a talent for writing the most awesome poems and stories and this is certainly no exception! Excellent! Look forward to reading more!

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