The house was build on the land that used to be a grave yard.she died in1
3/20/1917 he killed her with axe and there blood on the floor and he buried her in the basement walls.said Rj.How did she died ?asked Jack.2
She was murdered in her bed room.said Rj.Murdered by whom?asked Emile.3
Her lover !said Dr.Miller.This house had some bad rememberings of the 4
murder of Sara J.Crane.You said this house is cruse!said Dr.Hungas .5
Yes!said Rj.There's writting on these wallS!said Connor.Get out of this 6
house!said polteris .It's sara talking to us!said Duncan.What's is poltergise?asked Rj.A evil spirit that can harm you!said Dr.Miller.7
Look out!said Kim.What the hell is that ?asked Kim.A Axe!said Rj.Who washing the dishes ,Jack?asked Rj.The ghost is washing the dishes!said 8
Dr.Miller.She throw them at me!said Rj. Hey don't throw that knife at me ,Sara!said Kim.She not listening to you!said Duncan.She is here!said Kim.This house is evil !said Connor.She threw an axe right near the door and she scream lound like a bashee.She open the door and saw sara with an axe in her hand and she shut the door closed .She woke in the 9
moring and saw the writting on the wall and that she sara wrote last night.There blood in the bathroom!said Kim.There arrow pionting to this wall!said Rj.She was killed by her lover and burined in the basement walls.said Dr.Miller.She has wedding ring on her firgure.said Rj.She was married to sir Jonath Wales .said Jack.He paid her lover to killed and deposed of the body!said Kim.There one ghost and there many more bodies to be found!said Emile.I found a body in the rose garnden!said kim.I found a body in the fire place . said Rj.There three bodys burnied ! Dr.Hungas.We need to find the Cemtery !said Rj.This is the cemerty outside of the house!said Duncan.She is back!said Kim.Well ,We need a plan soon!said Rj.There was some old blue prints in the attica !said Rj.10
Our plan is to burn the bodies!said Rj.With what ?asked Kim.Paint thinner!said Rj.They threw paint thinner on the bodies and watch the bodied burn into ashes.The woked up and pack their thing ,got into the car ,they drove off .You think sara spriti will rest in peace?asked Kim.11
Only time will time!said Rj12
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Author notes
Horror:They got vistit from sara's ghost!
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Jared Parr
Ok first of all this has nothing to do with you story i dont even know why im putting it on here. Anyway Jared Parr is a butt fugly super freak who smells like christmas (yeah weird). Then he wanted to take over the world so we won't let him. Then we destroyed christmas and saved the super fat santa who was fat. Then Ben came out of no where and said you cant destroy christmas and so we took a Bazuka and shot it at the north pole. Go Santa. Then the fround shook and santa cracked the earth in half and then imploded and then the sun farted and then boooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooom
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Great
Great story, but gets confusing. Confusing because your many of your characters talk in the same line. Your lines sometimes aren't full, and separated too early. Most your sentences don't have a space after the period, don't have quotations, and aren't fully formed. Interesting plot over all, but your writing organization isn't the best. Keep writing!
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Screeches of the night.
And yes only time will tell!Lots of blood and gore.This would make a great horror film.Do you like to watch horror movies.I do and actually never get frightened while all the family run away screaming or can't sleep.Me I fall asleep like the dead!
Honey use the spellcheck.I do all the time as have difficulty in spelling.Your work is good so don't want it marred by avoidable mistakes.All the best.Elizabeth.
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