Chapter 1-let me tell you why

narrator: Melina Baker1

The trees flew past the van’s (that I absolutely despise) window. Against the grey sky the bare trees stood swaying in the wind of an advancing storm. “Melina?” my mom said from the front seat this sudden breaking of the silence blanketing the car made me wince. “Yes mother?” I asked. She turned to glare at me “what?” I said putting on a facade of innocence. “Melina your teacher’s wont like your rude behavior. Please behave better for them than you do for me.” I could sense it coming I wan’t getting out of this car alive if I didn’t apologize immediately so quickly before she could shape the lecture I  spit it out. “Sorry.”  Her mouth relaxed from its tight line formation it had been holding and she turned back to the road.

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I released my breath, rubbing my forehead I looked at the picture on the front of ABA boarding school for young adults. It showed three students standing arms encircling each other, one boy with sandy blonde hair and green eyes and two girls with brown hair and blue eyes presumably twins.

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A quaint little boarding school in the hills of Vermont from the pictures it seemed more like the castle in Harry Potter, the school was actually built to conform to the hills. The large grounds were an expanse of grass. A lake glimmered in the sunlight of a quiet I concluded this HAD to have awful teacher or something because there was no way a place with such majestic beauty must have some pretty major faults.

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Yawning I returned to staring out of the window, as soon as I settled into my regular state of mind yelling from the twins in the back. “Rhishka! Tanya!” I shouted over my shoulder “SHUT UP!!” Rhishka and Tanya are both 13 and impossible to keep in one room together for more than 3 minutes. In the moment generally I wished I could put shock collars on them and when they started arguing I could fry their brains but I loved them anyway. Suddenly the car stopped thrusting me nearly out of my seat but when I looked up I could barely register what I was looking at…

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To be continued…

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Author notes

the pic is what melina looks like.

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  • you had me hooked i realy want to read more verry well writen


  • chikarita2
    January 8

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    It's a good start and hooks my attention. I can really picture the scene. One thing you left out was descriptions of the characters. I can get the basic age range and personality of them, but you need to add things such as hair color or basically if they're pretty or ugly or normal. Some people get carried away by their imagination and get shocked when their blond-haired beauty is actually a cropped-haired smudge.
    Or something. Yea.
    Also, what's with the that keeps showing up???
    I don't think javascript works on storywrite...
    So yea it's a good start. Combine it with other chapters to make up chapter one, because it's too short.
    Good idea though, keep writing

  • pinkspork93
    July 9, 2006
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    full of pwnfulnosity

    GUESS WHAT!!!
    RIGHT NOW YOU SHOULD BE GETTING TO MOHONK TO HANG OUT WITH MEEEEEE!!
    WOOO!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • cindyrox1628
    March 27, 2006
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    its REALLY good!! i didnt kno u were melinda!

  • midnight wolf
    March 20, 2006
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    i liked it, kinda short but very good! great write!

  • Angel Without Wings
    March 20, 2006
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    Awesome

    This is very well done...I like how you put a lot of detail in it...it was a little short...but thats ok...i like how you cut it off it makes me want to read more...wich is a good thing...Great job!....I'm looking forward to the next part!

  • cindyrox1628
    March 19, 2006
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    gnomes!

    yeah!!! good job!!! i really liked it!

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