we sat back and watched things pass1
we waited to think things through2
we had no impusions3
and didn't bother to change4
we bled to feel alive5
though6
nothing made us feel real7
death was too tempting8
scratches climbed our arms9
blood coated our hands10
tears clung to the air11
refusing to fall12
we hoped you were happier with us gone13
we defenitly were14
Author notes
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this was verry emotional i like it quite allot!!!!
yes verry well done for this peice!!!! -
Aww..
Very striking and powerful piece! Such a dramatic ending ;___;. I really enjoyed it; it had a nice flow and the words were were selected. -
Very morbid but not to depressing, the writers seemed happy to die which is good. The note has a slightly surreal quality as it is dealing with a very sad thing in a happy way.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 2, ending: 4, characters: 2.
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omg! it made me cry! is this how you feel? or just in the dark mood? hmm, loved it, it showed the darker side to you great write, you've written alot latley,..........kewl!
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