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Last year i was a typical 16 year old and i thought that i could do what i wanted when i wanted i would come in to school with the attitudes that i had at home which got me no where and home and i was soon to find out that it was getting me no where at school. i was always getting in trouble at school for one thing or the other i hated school hated it so i would do think to get out of it wetter it be being but in the cooler for the day cooler being a room where you sit with other students and a teacher. i was always in there because of me being thrown out off maths.2
in the end i was getting relay tied of all the teachers going on at me to do this and do that. so i decided that i would start and bunking off school this was not one of my greatest ideas as i was about to find out.my Friend bunked with me sometimes but she stop when she was ached.3
but i did not stop i got away with it from November to December then i was Cort. i got in a lot of trouble i was put on head teachers report and got put in the cooler(referral) for a week. in that week i learnt a lesson that i was to cookie and that i could not get away with every think. i still got in to trouble because of my uniform or the other thing was because of my 25 out standing detentions. 4
i am a changed person naw but it to late naw i but i am off to collage in September and i have been doing a year coerce at school. 5
so have proved that teenagers can change for the best given a chance6
so if you having the same trouble as me and your parents teachers are telling you you will never change they are wrong you can change but only if you want to. 7
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I think you wrote this very realistically but like Tiger-Lily said, you need to proofred it a little.
Other than that, it was very interesting to read through. Good wok!
Keep writing.
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"Got me nowhere and home", change the "and" to "at.
Line 4: "Cort"? Caught?
Many proofreading errors, I'm afraid. Will need a good once over to rid the work of em. Cappital, etc.
Very good plot, overall. Very believable
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