Through Shadow's Eyes Chapter 8


Shadow tried to take a step back but tripped and fell, her brother pulled her in front of him. Thinking he would save himself or at least take his little sister with him to the after life. Zero glared past Shadow and into her brother's eyes striking even more fear into him, he gripped Shadow tighter and pulled her close to him. 1


Shadow didn't know what to think, she didn't know what was going to happen; and she was afraid. She tried to force her tears back but they overwhelmed her and she started to cry hard. She shut her eyes tight.

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When she opened them, she realized that Zero was no longer in front of her. Some how he had gotten to her brother, without even touching her. Terrifying screams of her brother could be heard for miles. Shadow covered her ears shutting her eyes as Zero continued to gnaw on the legs of the small human boy that laid on the ground covered in his own blood.

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Slowly Zero moved up the human boy's body taking his time gnawing on each limb of his body, making it severely painful. Zero's eyes sparked with delight at the sounds of the screams growing more agonizing.

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Soon silence fell upon the land, and Zero turned to face Shadow still covered in human blood licking slowly at his claws. He watched Shadow start to open her eyes, and slowly uncover her ears. She looked over at Zero whom was still licking his bloody claws, she inched backwards slowly till she bumped into a tree. Fear of what would happen next over came her, as the last of her tears fell.

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The human girl watched him carefully studying the look upon his face. He watched her and his look grew puzzled, as he saw the look of fear in her eyes as she trembled. After he finished cleaning the blood off his claws and face he went up and nudged her gently, letting her know she was okay. He watched her for a moment more and then turned to leave.

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Shadow calmed down enough to stop trembling and got up to follow him. She grabbed her bag and sword and tried to catch up to Zero.They walked in silence for a while, and as they walked Shadow kept glancing at him not knowing what to do or say next.

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It wasn't long after they started walking that they reached the river bank. Shadow sat down near the water looking into the quiet moving stream. Seeing a blur of her reflection she brushed her tear stained cheeks, looked over and smiled at Zero.

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"Thanks, for saving me, again." her voice spoke softly at ease as she relaxed.

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She dipped her fingers into the water. She looked up at the sky, the stars sparkled. She sighed heavily, thinking that she wasn't alone anymore and she never would really be alone again, but then again, maybe she would. She was unsure about what to think, all she knew was that she was safe for the moment, and her brother could no longer harm her. She filled her hands with water and splashed it on her face rubbing her face.

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Grabbing her bag she set her sword close by her and leaned into the grassy land using her bag as a pillow she laid down looking at the stunning stars. Soon she fell into a peaceful sleep. Zero watched her sleep as he cleaned his scales that were covered in dry human blood from moments earlier. Shadow squirmed in her sleep but then settled comfortably curling up in a ball. The wind blew gently, causing the grass to gently sway. The night was comfortable yet cool, however, the breeze was cool enough to cause shadow to shiver. Zero wrapped his wings carefully protectively around the small curled up girl to protect her from the cold and things that might be lurking in the darkness, taking pity on the helpless sleeping being.

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Shadow woke to the warmth and brightness of the sun. She looked around and Zero was no where in sight. She sighed heavily.

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Author notes

Its been a  while but I'm back into writing the story. now since i am working on this with a help of my friend whom i havent talked to in a while he read it and loved it. him and i both think i have improved in my story writing.  plz comment

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  • Angel-Crestfallen
    March 20, 2006
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    excellent

    This was really a great story I hope there will be more .. I really did enjoy reading this.. please IM if you post more chapters on this story and if you need someone ...smlies

  • Hidded Within
    March 19, 2006
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    thanks for your comment i am not big into spelling and grammer. so i really tend not to pay attation to it and my friends help me fix them up later on sometimes if i ask. anyway thanks much for your comment.
    peace to ya


  • March 19, 2006
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    Interesting... I'm sure it would make more sense if I'd read any previous chapters. I take it Zero is a dragony-thing, based on scales, wings, claws, and teeth. I noticed a few grammar things in one paragraph:

    "Terrifying screams of her brother could be heard for miles. Shadow covered her ears shutting her eyes as Zero continued to gnaw on the legs of the small human boy that laid on the ground covered in his own blood."

    I believe it should be "the terrifying screams..." "Shadow covered her ears, shutting her eyes..." "small human boy who lay on the ground..."


  • Sharcu
    March 19, 2006
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    I don't think I have read the first 7 chapters (if I have, it's been so long that I forget it, lol) yet this was still an incredible story! Really, Beth. This is great. I love your description and how you draw the reader in... I was feeling the characters fear and emotions and it kept me on the edge of my seat. After reading just a couple of paragraphs it made me want to keep reading. I hope you'll keep writing chapters. I've often thought about going back and finishing one of my stories that I started about a year ago. The first four chapters were really good, but when I tried to keep writing it, it never sounded the way I wanted to. If you are interested in reading it, it's called "Secrets of the Past." I'm not sure if you have read it or not yet... oh, I just checked and it looks like you read at least the first part. Anyways, really great job, Beth! Let me know if you keep writing it!
    --Tim

  • Hidded Within
    March 19, 2006
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    thanks if you havent read the first 7 chapters it might not make sense though. if you are interested in reading it they are on my authors page under my lists. the first 7 chapters are very strange in length and really not as good as this one written wise but it would make a lot more sense if you read the first 7 chapters. thanks for your comment


  • Angel-Crestfallen
    March 19, 2006
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    I have read it and I think it is very good
    smiles

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