You answered her phone. That's when I lost it. I already hate how you sometimes go over to her house at night...now you've answered her phone too. I hate it, you guys spend so much time together. It makes me think...why don't you just go out with her instead?1
I hated hearing about the snow ball fight you guys had, and how you picked her up to throw her in a puddle. I guess that's what some of my friends would call flirting. I'm being really stupid..but it hurts me...and I don't know why.2
It's just not fair, it's like you'd rather go outside and hang out with her then talk to me or anything. It just makes me think...why DON'T you just leave me and ask her out?3
I don't know when you'll read this, or if you ever will. I think I want to keep this to myself, at least for now.4
I'm really sorry, Aaron. I know you said you loved me and only me..but today..just...I dunno..lately when your feeling bad...you just blow me off and stuff..and it hurts..you did it again today..and so I've been in a bad mood since..not your fault though...but when I called Cierra to talk to her...you answered her phone...so obviously you were with her....so I just told her I was gonna go..so that you two could spend your precious time together.5
I'm really sorry if this makes you feel worse...but you told me to post it. But Aaron? No matter what....I'll always love you.6
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I was really upset when I wrote this..so..yeah...
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Wow.
I can totally relate. It sucks. Tell me about it. I am soo with ya.
I really hope things wil work out for ya. Everyone deserves it.
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this is really upsetting, and I'm sorry for your problems, I've had to deal with similar before, so I know it hurts, I hope things work out for you
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This is really sad, considering that I am in a bad mood and don't want to talk to anyone. Great writing. I loved it and feel sorry for you.
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Well I have read it.. I'm not sure what to say about it, though. I'm glad we got to talk about it last night, though, hopefully that helped you to understand. You are the only one, Trish, she's just one of my best friends... And I'll NEVER leave you, ok? I'm glad we could talk about it.. I love you
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=S he hasnt read it yet. i know, i would get mad and stuff if the guy i lvoed hung out with my best friend way more then he did with me. but you do have to know that he loves YOU!!!!!! not her or sara or some other girl... YYYYYYYYYYYOOOOOOOOOUUUUUUU and only you!!!!!!!!!!!!! he answered her phone? thats a little creppy. . .but yeah. ooo hes on. LUV YA!
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Hey! This is nice, it almost seems like a journal entry. Um' Hey you just have to believe and trust Aaron. I am sure he loves you very much, And Aaron if you read this: Please give your loving soul a chance to hear you out, she wants to. I really feel for the both of you and respect you as well. Wow! Trish is your name right? Hope so. lol. you are such a beautiful person! Your heart is bigger than you think.....Smile I am here if you need me. This goes to the both of you....
By the way I play around with my guy friends alot in a respectful way. lol. We don't consider it flirting, The friendship bond is a cherished pact nothing more.... Take it easy my friend....
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This is pretty personal, and it seems it was meant for who is involved, so it may be difficult for others to understand. The funny thing is, I've actually revised my rants. I've found that looking into your own thoughts and projecting them into a form that everyone can truly feel will bring the rest of my work to a new level.
As for style, I think imagery and description would really bring a more introspective quality to this. I do not know if this is current, but if you are still battling with these issues, exploring it in your own mind may bring to light some answers.
The raw emotion in this piece can be molded. I've always felt that writing isn't just about what is on paper, it is about refining raw emotion into pure energy that can pack a powerful punch.
There are several ways I think that can bring the issue up even more, especially if you want to turn this into more written than a letter/rant. A bit of repitition seems like it would add the effect. Another thing I can see improving is the transition. In the beginning you are very harsh, and towards the end forgiving. It seems like there is a lot missing in between the lines. If you put the transition between anger/hurt into forgiveness in... it may help for understanding purposes, as well as clarifying things for yourself.
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