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She's beautiful, most perfect body, luscious curves. Oh, she's got the most gorgeus smile. Everything about her...Beautiful, perfect in every way.2
When she's at school.3
When she's at home...She's crying, alone, spiritless, and faded. Pale, tired looking, underslept. As she holds the blade to her soft snow white skin...She feels her life fade.4
Her world is upside down, instead of right side up. She's happy, but sad. She's healthy, but dying. Crying, but showing a smile. They say beauty is in the eye of the beholder, but her beauty is gone...Long gone.5
She's too weak to keep going, too brittle to move a muscle, too tired to fight back against herself. So, she sits...Weeping, empty, and in fear.6
She fakes it all, the smile, the personality, the faith, the hope. It's all fake, she keeps the reality locked inside her. Away from prying eyes.7
Silence is her life, her parents don't even realize she's still alive. 16 years old, and already half dead. Doesn't even look over the age of 13. 8
The love of her life, they have yet to be together, but she loves him anyways. He doesn't even notice she's alive half the time... Walks by her in the hallways, without even saying hello.9
The phone rings. It's him. The love she follows so... She picks up the phone, answering it in her softest voice, trying not to sound like she's been crying.10
He speaks, asking her to meet him at the park around the block. She hangs up the phone, and gets ready, covering up the look she had. And heads for the front door, and makes her way towards the park.11
She walks through the gate, staring around her looking for a sign of life. When she sees him...Sitting on the swing, staring right at her face. 12
She slowly walks over to him, trying hard not to cry, she stands infront of him, staring into his eyes. 13
He starts to talk, asking why she never talks to him. Replying with only a smirk, he laughs. Then looking at her...He takes her hands and looks at her wrists, spotting the scars and cuts from the pain she tries to take away.14
His eyes start watering... Little does he know the cuts she creates are all because of him...Asking her why she does it... She looks at him, stares deep into his blue eyes, and takes out a shiney silver razor blade. 15
As she keeps her eyes on his, she cuts softly, then deeply into her wrist, feeling the blood run down her arm. Her tears fall, mixing with the blood, as she continues to cut, staring into his eyes...16
He starts crying, feeling the blood and tears fall on him, as she slices her pain away. Slowly she becomes nothing...17
He tries to take the blade away from her, telling her he loves her, and he really wants to work things out...She stares at him.18
Silent, in tears. The blood falling onto his arms, he holds her hand, feeling her shake, he pulls her closer to him in hopes she'll stop ending herself. He kisses her already cold blue lips, and tells her to stop.19
She still cuts, feeling herself fade. Feeling herself die. He feels her shaking, feeling her hands become cold from the loss of blood. She looks down......Holding the blade out infront of her, she motions for him to take it.20
He grabs the blade from her hand, and throws it. Half smiling, he turns to her. Sees her tear struck, he hugs her...Holding her as close as he can, not wanting to say goodbye... She pulls away.21
Staring at him... Staring right into his gorgeus blue eyes. She opens her mouth in attempt to talk... 22
"I Love..."23
She falls onto him, while the blood runs off her arms onto his shirt. 24
He cries her name, only to realize...25
She died for him.26
Author notes
I'M DONE I'M DONE I'M DONE I'M DONE!! FINALLLYYYYYYY
part two;
http://allpoetry.com/Story/489696
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Comments
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fucking amazing
wow, wow, wow, wow...alright, i'll stop with the wows, but god damn, that was fucking amazing...i loved it... i usually get bored with stories, cause they drag on and on and on forever, but yours pulled me in from the very beginning... i loved everything about it... the fact that she put on a happy facade at school, and then at home, she was nothing more than a big ball of depression, and then the ending, i mean, woah, talk about intense...how he was holding her, and she brought out the razor, and she started cuttting, and cutting, and wouldn't stop till she was done. i mean, holy shit, this seriously kicked some major ass...i loved it. you're an amazing writer, and this just shows how wonderful of a writer you are. great job with this one, i fucking loved it to death.
Christina -
I wrote the new one... It's called "Silence Speaks so much" Give me your opinion on whether or not I should make a third part with her living/her funeral etc;/or if I should just leave the reader to wonder whether she's alive or not...or if I should just make a few alternate endings...lol
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awesome write i love it..
nancy -
Damaged Faith.
Wow! This was awesome! This made tears come to my eyes. It was beautifully written, put into words perfectly. Knowing this happens alot makes it very sad. So much emotion was put into this. The girl dyeing for him, with him, in his arms. It was so beautiful I loved it. I will not be surprised if I see your name on books being sold someday and I will be a sure customer. Anyway...Excellent write truly excellent!
Take Care
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Sarah -
i have to agree with vampira i thought it was you till the age of 16 showed up. i was like... BAD KITTY! lol. nicely written hun this is rather sad. but so sweet at the same time. you are an amazing writer i hope to see your name in bookstores someday. id buy your work. its worth every cent and more. this story was so captivating... where part 2? lol... keep it up!
MMFCL
Chantelle -
very nice...morbid....i loved it
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Perfection
Damn it girl, this fuckin made me so damn sad. Sorry for the bad words. I was started to panic until I saw the age thingy and then knew it wasn't you. Had me worried a minute there. This was absolutely beautiful and so damn sad. You did such an amazing job sweety. Bravo! Hugs and bites, Lady Raven
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