First, I want you to start kissing my neck, and then, you whisper softly in my ear, "I want you." 1
I look at you and you have that smile on your face... you know, the one that makes me go "oooooh" inside and makes me shiver on the outside.2
Then, you start kissing and nibbling gently on my neck and ears as you cuddle with me under the blanket. And then, you kiss me softly and pull away, kissing my nose. You look deep into my eyes and tell me again, "I want you." 3
I will tell you that I want you, too... 4
(but what I want to say is..)5
My thoughts start to scatter as you put your forehead against mine while our noses touch and you tell me how cute, how beautiful I am... 6
Of course, I dont believe you, blushing at the words because I see in your eyes ..I cannot describe into words, and you go on to tell me how you love each part of my face, kissing it as you say it: my eyes, my ears, my nose, my lips. You kiss me again, softly, but with a bit of passion. And as you pull back, you tell me how sweet I look tonight, and how happy you are to be with me. While still cuddling me, you brush your lips against mine in a tiny kiss, then kiss and nibble my neck a bit again. And you ask if I'd like to go into the bedroom- I'll say yes- and you lead me there, holding my hand..... 7
As we snuggle under the covers, you find something romantic on TV, finding TCM playing Casablanca. I sigh and I lay my head on your chest as you stroke my hair a bit. When the time seems right, you sit up and hug me... and you whisper in my ear how beautiful you think I am, and that you want me more than anything. You begin to kiss my neck, then my lips- passionately this time, but still soft. 8
You kiss my nose, and while looking deeply in my eyes, ask me softly, "are you ready?" 9
I'll nod shyly, slightly nervous about what we're about to do. This will be the first time you've ever seen me wearing lingerie. I ask if you'd like me to change, and you said you'd love it, but that you'll miss me. I just smile at you.10
And so I change into a lacy black panty and a lacy red slip in the bathroom and put a silky black robe on over it. While I do this, you change into your silky red and black boxers... I look around and find one of your ties and put it on, loosely around my neck. I tell you to shut your eyes, and I walk into the room, posing in the doorway. Then, I tell you to open them, fully expecting you to laugh at the fact that I was posing for you, but you don't- your eyes get wide as you stare. You come over to me and whisper in my ear, begging me to tell you that I have nothing on under my robe. As you finish talking, you trail kisses from my ear to my lips, ending in a passionate kiss, with a bit of hunger, but still soft and gentle. I tell you that I can't promise you anything, and you groan playfully but softly in my ear.11
You gently tug on my hand and lead me to the bed. As we snuggle, you kiss me again with more passion and want than ever before, but still softly, please. Then you nibble my neck and grab my hand, slowly moving it down your body, until you get it to the place you want it. Using my hand, you massage it a bit, sighing at how good it feels. I feel how hard you are, and you know I like it. You whisper again in my ear, "I want you..."12
Author notes
...I think the repetition of the words, well, add to the story. And the slowness of the story ...it's like it's building up, well, that's what I think. Please let me know what you think of this. Thanks!
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Comments
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Hm...very well written. I agree about the word repetition. Great effect. I gotta agree with Ein below though...O.O
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Let me ask you this. If a guy just read this and did everything you wanted him to... would you really think he really meant any of that? I wouldn't take any list of instructions.
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I agree that the story has build up so as a reader you are at the edge of your seat waiting to see or feel what is happening. It isn't too long as well where you are sitting going "come on!". It was well written.
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Giod but rushed
Take your time...its to childlike, in its use of repetition. Remember,we are reading the story from your point of view...the problem, with writing erotica, is taking your time, not allowing to much out, at once...
Dont get me wrong, its good, and it kept me reading to the end....jus take your time.
Ghost



