A girl is sitting against the wall of the shopping mall.1
The girl's friend sees her and walks up to her.2
Girl's friend: Hey! What are you doing here all by yourself?3
The girl's friend looks around to see if there is anyone near them that she is not seeing. She sees no one and satisfied, looks back to her friend for a reply.4
Girl: He was suppose to meet me here today...5
Her voice trails off as a lump gets caught in her throat.6
Girl's friend: I thought that was last Saturday..?7
Girl: Yeah he was suppose to meet me then too...8
Girl's friend: Oh okay.. I'm sorry..9
The girl clears her throat and stands up, her voice now back with it's normal cheeriness and her face with it's usual grin, she flips her hair back out of her face.10
Girl: Oh no big deal, we'll talk later..11
Girl's friend: Oh okay.. so how are you anyways?12
Girl: Oh I'm fabulous, I am thinking about going shopping. Want to come?13
The girls' friend looks down at the ground, unable to meet her friend's eyes.14
Girl's friend: Well I would but.. my new boyfriend's going to be here soon. You know how it is, heh.15
Girl: Oh yeah totally no problem.16
Girl's friend: So are you sure you're okay?17
Girl: Oh yeah fine.18
Girl's friend: Okay good, because if you ever need me just call my cell okay?19
Girl: Always.20
Girl's friend: Okay if you're sure- wait..what's that?21
Girl: What's what?22
Girl's friend: That bruise, that's a nasty one. Where'd you get that?23
Girl: Oh no where, my guy and I just got into a little argument, accidentally walked into the door while I was storming out.24
She lets out a half hearted laugh and smiles at her friend.25
Girl's friend: Oh okay, it's just at swim the other day there was that bruise on your hip and - .....26
Her voice trails off.27
Girl: Oh yeah, I fell on the cement on the steps down into the basement of my house.28
Girl's friend: Oh right, course. Hey, I see him coming, he's waving at me pretty enthusiastically. Sure you're okay?29
Girl: Yepp just off to do some shopping now!30
Girl's friend: Okay. Well, remember, you know my cell number if you need me, 'kay?31
Girl: M'kay! Bye!32
The two girls hug and the friend walks off, unknowing that that would be the last time she would see her friend.33
That night the girl went to her boyfriend's apartment, alone, to see why he wasn't here.34
Girl: Hey hun.. why didn't you meet me at the mall today like you promised?35
Boyfriend: Sorry babe, was that today? I was out late with some friends last night-36
Girl: last night?! Last night was our anniversary and you said you were at your grandmother's house! You said she was sick!37
Boyfriend: Don't take that tone with me.38
Girl: Try and stop me, I am so freaking sick of you!39
The girls leaves the apartment building with tears streaming down her cheeks and goes home. 40
She sits alone in her room listening to her mix CD he gave her for her birthday. She had later found out that her best friend had made it and given it to him to give to her because he forgot, but she knew he was busy, and didn't mind. The tears began flowing again.41
She held the phone in her hand and rummaged around in her purse for her friend's new cell number. Unable to find it she sits alone on her bed for another half an hour.42
The lights were hurting her eyes so she dimmed them and grabbed a bottle of Tylenol. There were 86 Tylenol left she counted. She wondered how many she would have to take for it to kill her. She decided it was much more than 86 and all 86 would do is maybe numb her, help her cool down a bit, then she could get some sleep.43
She got a drink and took all 86 of those Tylenol, she went to bed that night, and never woke up.44
Author notes
This si a strory thinger I jsut came up wtih, Jeez it sounds like one of those chainletters, at the end I can jsut imagine something like
"Don't ever be afraid to tell someone what is going on in your life, especially your friends. That is what they are there for. So tell them when something is wrong, instead of trying to deal wtih your problems by yourself. Tell someone, instead of trying to take matters into your own hands, you could lose more than you would believe...."
gosh lol. Well anyways, thanks for reading,hope it wasn't to short or long. Then again I can't please everyone.
xox Cass
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Both of them?
Cass -
i certainly loved it. you have a great way of thnking. if only you could seee.
great job cassie. amazuibng write. both of them
ok well later
bye
Ginny -
The moral of the story? Guys suck. I should know. I am one.
Either way, nice write. *hugg* I likes -
Sad but ASTOUNDINGLY beautiful!
This IS an amazing write. I was srawn to it by the title. But, I know that God has a GREAT message in here for all who will hear. Pain is a sound that is not always verbal it is a silent scream, a bruised and battered, a broken spirit, a wing that has been tattered and torn, it is something incomplete ..... but it always speak ...............................
WILL WE PAY ATEENTION and hear it?
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holy bejesus, i really liked this. it may be because i have sort of been on the recieving end, like the girlfriend in this script, with the whole suicide part. so i could definitely feel the emotions and stuff running through this. you wrote it well, no scruffs of confusion. semi-short but wicked strong. this was wonderful, despite the emense sadness concluding it. great job, really.
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true stuff and sad.
Could be a scene in a movie. I want to say something sensible here about relationships, but all I can say is that things should never go this far. You are a fine writer and could be a screen writer someday. You say it like it is and say it well. Keep up the writing! -
Sad and beleivable. It is written like a play but yo really don't need the scene movements to know what was happening. A really nice write. Very sad though. Very sad...
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Yes a sad story, very well written, good job
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This is an interesting write, it was kind of laid out like a play...I thought the dialogue was good and believable, and the content was sad...
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pretty good.
yeah, tried to see a way that told could've had some sort of deeper meaning... but... no...
really good beside that, though. sorta slow and uninteresting until the end, but well written for a slow one. -
wow this is really good. The form and style that you wrote it in is interesting and it adds to the story some. I agree that it could be one of those chainletters, but not quite, because those are usually not well written and this is well written. also, in your Author's comments, you should say you can't please everyone, not you can't please anyone because this certainly pleased me. Nice job and keep writing.
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great
I think that you have done a very good job on this story.
In the end You said "she told all 86 of those tylenol" intsead of "she took." Just thought I'd let you know.
Again very good job.
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