I’ve got the TV on in the background to keep me company because, if I’m honest, when you’re not here I feel like I could drown in the loneliness that invades the gap you leave.1
You’re all I think about when you’re not here, and you’re all I can think about when you are here. 2
I’m so in love with you its overwhelming me with every breath I take. 3
If air was a love drug then I’ve swallowed enough to kill me giddily, and I’d die the happiest person alive.4
All because you love me.5
I can feel it like a warm blanket after a freezing day.6
I can touch it like the wind that sweeps across the barren land.7
I can taste it.8
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LOL...
I agree that this is sort of sappy. I don't think that's a bad thing, though. It was cute for such a short story. You present so many interesting images and thoughts with this. Very nicely done.
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awww sweetie, this is amazingly sweet and...oh wow...i feel all mushy inside no matter how much im in a mood right now. anyway, this is beauitful and you should be very proud of yourself. anyway, speak soon, l8az love always sky xxx
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Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!
Kitty, My dear sweet daughter, I felt, touched and tasted every word and they were delicious. The senses are a great idea to use when writing because it is they that make up the work. This is another fine write from you and although some people may differ in opinion, there is nothing wrong with clinging to love. It flowed perfectly as the rhythm didn't miss a beat. You do have a gift for writing and I wish you would see it as others do. Never lose the feeling of love, it is an important part of life that springs from hope eternally.
Thank you for sharing this excellent work with all of us.
Lots of love, Mom xoxoxoxo
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a little to clingy for my liking but good for word usage
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just trying to get your perspective from the age,
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Does it matter?
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love it
i like this very much
i have done something similar, just longer and darker, i like yours alot better though -
I really admire the vulnerability and sincerity in this distinctly raw feeling poem.
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aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww etc for a while
that is tho thweet! (lisp there for added sweetness)
there's SO much feeling in this poem it's incredible I love the "kill me giddily" line
only thing I don't like about this poem is how alone it makes me feel lol
oh well
keep writing
love JC
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Awww kitty this is so sweet im gna have to go the dentist
, nice construction and nice imagery
xxx
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oOo this is truly beautiful! not sure why u didnt post this as a poem....mMm...wow, this made me shiver...a delicious read
good luck with ur love!! 
mushy
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