What you don't know:Four

On the porch1

Markus entertains2

grandma with wild 3

college stories4

I sit on the5

steps counting6

passing cars7

neighborhood kids8

have come put9

once again10

for their evening mischief11

firecracker12

dirt bombs13

or14

animal torture15

they cut open16

fish alive17

or18

skin lizards19

the kids in this20

neighborhood21

are crazy22

possessed by23

demons that24

make them do25

cruel things26

I know27

because I used28

to be one of29

them.30

Markus has finished31

his story32

slapping his knee33

laughing like34

a maniac35

Jame giggles36

if she laughs37

too hard she has38

chest pain.39

I stifle my own40

laughter as Markus41

chokes on his spit.42

the porch light43

flickers on44

mom steps out45

asks who's46

ready for desert.47

Markrus and grandma48

go in without me.49

***50

Party Up51

Mouse rolls onto52

the gravel driveway53

nine o'clock54

muffled music55

bouncing inside56

his Corvette57

he hops out58

pimps up the stone 59

walk way60

' 'Sup bro?'61

' 'Sup Mouse.'62

he plunks down63

beside me64

twirling his keys65

'Man, what the hell 66

you doing here? It's Saturday.'67

'Friday.' I correct.68

'Whatever. I've been 69

calling you for the past forty eight 70

minutes.'71

my cell is lost72

in the tornado aftermath73

in my room74

wouldn't have mattered if I heard it ring.75

'Sorry about that.'76

'So what man, you in or out77

tonight?'78

there's no way79

I'm staying home.80

know I'm grounded-81

but screw it. mom82

doesn't care anyway.83

we knock fist.84

'In.'85

inside the car86

I'm greeted by two87

brunettes with88

the hugest breast89

I've ever seen.90

bigger then Dolly Parton's91

I wince and look92

at Mouse.93

He knows how I'm skittish94

around girls.95

he gives me his96

don't worry97

look98

and awakens the engine.99

***100

blue lava101

nightclub designed for102

underage103

clubbers who can get in104

without105

guards or ID checks.106

it's this old house107

three hours away 108

in JamesStone109

bought and renovated110

by this kid111

Jordon Cross.112

his dad is one of113

those billionaire114

guys.115

Cross is a spoiled116

asshole.117

so he gets what he wants.118

and it happens to be119

a nightclub.120

blue lava121

is popular for122

raves123

drugs124

alcohol125

sex126

violence127

and rape128

you don't see it happening129

but your not dumb.130

it happens.131

bouncers take care132

of trouble makers.133

erase the rape part134

this135

place136

is 137

awesome.138

***139

blue room140

spoon141

get high142

drink143

this is what144

the room's for.145

crowded. as usual.146

bodies huddle in corners147

on couches148

shadows floating by149

heat150

sweat151

smoke152

mix in153

breathing is hard154

here155

you156

forget157

your158

life159

outside.160

mouse and I 161

share a gasper162

talking163

though noise surrounds us.164

talking about sh-t165

in our lives.166

with mouse-167

it's always some girl168

wanting him to commit169

or his traditional mom170

up his ass.171

I b-tch172

about173

mom174

brothers175

absent father176

smoke exhales from our177

nostrils.178

sometimes179

we wish we could180

just die.181

***182

About Mouse183

his real name184

is Jang Hyuk185

mother and father186

born and raised in Korea.187

moved to America after188

Mouse was born,189

call him Mouse190

because he's small191

kind of skinny.192

we've been friends193

two years.194

I trust him195

with my life.196

never has he 197

let me down.198

we're close.199

as if brothers.200

I've never told201

him this202

but sometimes I 203

wish he and I were kin.204

***205

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  • Juliette Rose
    March 22, 2006
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    I'm loving it so far!!!!!!! Yay!!! Mouse is cool cool cool


  • CupidsMeth
    March 3, 2006
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    lol. thanks.

  • Pain-is-Me
    March 2, 2006
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    hey this is really good, i really like it! keep it up okay? lol

  • Trial and Error
    March 1, 2006
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    Ooooo, Mousey sound cute Hehehehehe, just playin. I've got Eric. Who is so much better than any of your characters xD...Hm yeah, still sick. I've had a migraine all day ...but yeah... I totally can't WAIT for more!!!!!! I'm so going to put this in a list, and put it on my page, so that yeah... People READ IT Cause this ish gonna be AWESOME Anywho, yeah... Love j00 Tia... POST MORE
    <3Kat


  • BlackBloodyRose
    March 1, 2006
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    i cn't wait for more as usualy with ur stuf!! YAY

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