Sun-like shine1
Cue align2
Gift divine3
The shard4
Tinge of gold5
Complexion as bold6
Riches untold7
The shard8
Fearsome its power9
Creatures, devour10
Beings, they sour11
The shard12
Alluring spell13
Direct from hell14
Binds the cartel15
The shard16
Possess prey?fs will17
Personal choice, nil18
Master of its skill19
The shard20
Mind it twists21
Smooth as kiss22
Unable to resist23
The shard24
Inner, controls25
Minimal tolls26
Grasps its doles27
The shard28
Insides it feasts29
Unleash the beasts30
Expert of artistes31
The shard32
Lust for it grows33
Chaos it throws34
Ghastly its blows35
The shard36
Bide, observe the prone37
See death not known38
Awaits the shown39
The shard40
Shadows, it lurks41
Men, it dirks42
Thus it smirks43
The shard44
Chronicle din45
Repetition begin46
Welcome in 47
The shard48
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Awesome repeat of the shard line, even though you already know that. xD
Very good poem. Nice lyric flow. =)
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Wow...very good effective peom here. I like this a lot.
Line 17, you may want to clear that up, bit onfusing.
But otherwise, pretty goo.
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lol! Well stick round for the chapters, then you'll know what it's all about!
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That was interesting. I don't think I've ever seen anything like that. Unfortunately, I have no idea what you're talking about. *Dies* Heh...I just thought I'd check out some of your work to make up for the serial killer comment on your page. Kudos!
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oh well.... I guess they do, but it's not a rule.
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From what Artemis says, ppl complain when a chapter is too long...
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wow...long chapter...and there are no "rules" about how long each chapter should be.
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My first is 11 pages long. I hope to make it less on my second.
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Harhar!! Ya okay, how long do u make ur chapters?
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Chapter one lies in my comp. Chapter two is in its birth.
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Aha! Vewee nice. Finally a different style, its quite original! So....wheres the story?
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I'll decline, I prefer to stay one chapter ahead. I'll post when I finish my second chapter which, hopefully - now knowing the 'rules' of this site - will not be long.
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Oh, great! Now you may post your first chapter immediately!!
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Actually, this isn't the one I was writing, I decided to change my intended prelude to my first chapter - which is finished - and I wrote this one instead. Congradulate me, it was done in only 15 minutes, yay!
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Verrry cool. It sounds a bit like a chant. It has good rhythm and rhyme.
And why did you say it was going to be long? This is far from long... Perhaps it just seemed long because it took you so long to write it.
Anyway, can't wait to read the coming chapters!
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