She stood at the shore, gazing towards eternity. 1
With an unearthly beauty and gently rippling at its soft edges, waves kindly lapped her feet with their cleansing, foamy warmth. A sleepy sun yawned contentedly for the night, and gradually began to sink lower and lower in its purple, mystical sky. Clouds scurried, scudding against stars that glittered and sparkled, ready to dazzle the whole night long and the moon glimmered, beautifully haunting in its milky, illuminating rays.2
Would he come? She remembered his downy head of hair that swept across his forehead, his delicate green emeralds, secret pools of romance, and the shining memoirs that danced, through, beyond and across them. She remembered the beautiful sounds she heard in her ears, sounds of the brushing, serene shoreline, even though on that day, they were nowhere near the beach. She remembered sensual feelings of lust and longing and adoration entwined into one web of emotion that she knew would only ever be untangled if her hand 'accidentally' smoothed against his again...3
Author notes
I have nooooo idea where this is going...
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Yay! Thankies.
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Lol thank you... if I get published, I'll send you a copy
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Perfect.
Awwww! This is really good, Julie. The first line is just awesome, I really liked it. It's like, in books or movies, tehy have to do/write something that makes you want to read/watch more, and usually that goes on for a few pages/minutes, till you feel you really want to read more. But in this piece, the first line is enough. It's written really beautifully and it has this poetical 'sound' in it, if you know what I mean. I was amazed by the first line lol!
The fisr paragraph is just gorgeous. I LOVe the picture you're creating with words, It's like I can really see what it's like, in my mind. Absolutely stunning. Rhe way you describe it all is fantastic, and I reckon this could be a great book. You have this short presentation of the boy, and he sounds adorable. I really liked it, Want to read more now, lol, it's fabby. It really is. I love the way you write, it's so beautiful. Please do me the favour and write a book one day, it would be a pleasure to read it. You're really good at this, you have a huge talent and a great gift.
Well done, this was brilliant.
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aww that's so cool...Great job
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Enchanting!
An interesting account of some memorable events.
Everything seemed surreal. Like in a dream two lovers
drifting in the sea of ecstasy. One could easily get lost
in this dimension of rapturous bliss.
Sparkling with things that glitter in luminous passion.
A voyage of infinite wondering where dreams come true.
Very fairtale like and enchanting
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Muhahaha, beautiful, shiny, magical, like I said.
And you know where its going - towards giant winged baboons with serpents for eyes!
Seriously though, this is an excellent start, its all so mystical ooo ^.^ x x x
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