Ngathi Dreaming

A long time ago before the dreaming, Ngathi, the great serpent travelled across the barren land we call our world and looked for a mate because he was lonely. He became tired from searching so he slept, and he dreamed. When he awoke there was an egg beside him. It grew and grew until it filled the world, then it broke open and four dreamers, two male and two female fell out. They dreamed peacefully and did not wake until Ngathi kissed them with his tongue. Their names were Thuma, Paba, Yuuwa and Wa’awa.1

When they awoke each was jealous of the others, although they were all the same they could only see the differences. Thuma became angry at the beauty of his brother, his anger turned red and hot and he killed Yuuwa with a hunting stick. Then Yuuwa breathed out and flew up to the sky and dreamed no more. After him went his breath, which blew all around and separated the place where he flew from the land of his sisters and brother.2

Thuma’s anger grew even hotter that his brother escaped and he grew red until his heart burst and the blood flowed out, covering the land and lighting the faces of his sisters. He chased after Yuuwa following him across the heavens, but leaving some of himself to sink into the earth and dwell in the core. And he dreamed no more.3

Wa’awa saw the anger and fear of her brothers and turned her face away, she ran to the edges of the world and there she sat down and cried. She cried so much that her body couldn’t hold it in and tears poured from her to form the ocean that cuts off the land. She was weary from weeping and so slept. While she slept she dreamed and all her dreams came true. When she awoke and saw what she’d done, the creatures she had dreamed wiggled into her tears and began swimming and playing. They were so beautiful she cried some more, and then she went to dwell with them at the bottom of her tears where she sleeps with quiet dreams, making beasts without ears to match her whispered world. Occasionally she turns over and disturbs Paba’s place.4

Paba had no eyes for her brothers and sister but saw only the serpent Ngathi, and she chased after him. Her footprints made hollows and valleys where she trod and she chased the serpent to the ends of the world. When Ngathi saw her persistence he was glad. He kissed her again and she slept. He curled himself around her and slept too. As they slept they dreamed. All the creatures they dreamed came to life and are living still. 5

Index of words taken from the Ayapathu dialect Wordlist: www.geocities.com/Athens/Delphi/2970/ayapathu.htm6

Ngathi – father7

Thuma – fire8

Paba – mother9

Yuuwa – sky, cloud10

Wa’awa - river11

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  • Kethry
    February 25, 2006
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    Dear Makae mae, thank you very much for your posivite and encouraging comments.

  • Kethry
    February 25, 2006
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    Dear FiXato,
    I think exhaled reads better too, but - and I don't know why - exhaledgives a sense of inhaling as well and that's not going to happen in this case. Thank you for your comments, I had fun writing this.

  • Kethry
    February 25, 2006
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    Dear cutefairyblonde,
    I'm not sure where you are reading this from but it's meant to be a short story and not a poem. That was why I promoted this under storywrite, that people expect it to be a story and you get extra points for resonding. Thanks for your response even though it wasn't what you expected.

  • Kethry
    February 25, 2006
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    Dear Styph's sister sorry you can't read this. I had pale green writing on a white background too but I went out and back in and have the blue background as posted. I don't mind that you wasted my points. Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment.

  • Kethry
    February 25, 2006
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    Dear Sunshine,
    thank you for your kind comments. I'll have to keep writing with or without your approval because I don't seem to be able to stop. *G


  • wattle
    February 24, 2006
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    Ms 'Kethry', there is no end to the topics you will take under your wing - I like thank you.

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    February 24, 2006
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    This to me seems more like a short story then a poem???? Maybe i read into it wrong>


  • bludstaindsoliloquy
    February 24, 2006
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    Veri powerfully written . . . strong language . . . good message. I agree with nesorb . . . this piece was beautifully written and definately seems like modern mythology int he making! Well done!!!! Keep penning . . . and please . . . keep sharing!

    Maggie

  • Phed
    February 24, 2006
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    beautifully written.

    Modern mythology in the making! well done


  • FiXato
    February 24, 2006
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    Amazing
    This is a very nice alternative creation story ^_^
    The flow in the text is quite good, though I think that replacing 'breathed out' with 'exhaled' would improve the flow a bit more.
    A nice write, keep it up
    well worth the applause


  • February 24, 2006
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    I think something must be wrong here. Im seeing very pale green writing on a white background making it almost impossible to read, but you have comments so not everyone is seeing it like this. Sorry I dont mean to waste your points I just cant read it


  • February 24, 2006
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    I enjoyed this I like poems that make you think. very well written too

  • Symphony
    February 24, 2006
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    Interesting - I was wondering all the way through how this would tie in with real life, o reven indeed what the actual purpose of the story was and it was as i reached the end of it that i saw the immense depth in meaning behind it ...

    nice job, you have a good way of writing that keeps us reading onwards!


  • memnoch
    February 24, 2006
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    Very interesting! this story is thought provoking, it kind of ventures into religion, the entire "world creation" process written in such a creative way. Great write...

  • fusaoufh
    February 24, 2006
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    keep writing! i love the language you use, it's brilliant

  • Sunshinegf
    February 24, 2006
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    powerfull piece i liked it keep writing
    into the future

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