AS TOLD TO EDNA BY PAUL THE PERSISTENT PHILANDERER.1
Two summers ago Helen and I took advantage of the possibility of an illicit week together; the excuse was a conference in Switzerland. Our respective spouses believed the story - why should they not?2
Helen, although a sublimely erotic and lovely woman, was small. One does not call beautiful women short; the word is petite. I was seven inches taller than Helen and she always wore high heels.3
She had a voracious appetite for sex and sometimes, when we were out together, she would demand to be satisfied. It was unwise to argue; if Helen didn't get what she wanted within an unreasonably short period of time, a monumental sulk would ensue. She also had exhibitionist tendencies: I don't mean she wanted to have sex openly in front of others; what turned her on was the possibility of being seen whilst being fucked.4
That evening, Helen and I returned to the hotel room shortly after eleven; the night was warm and we opened the doors onto our balcony overlooking moonlit Lake Geneva. Voices drifted up from the garden three floors below - we could see several colleagues sitting there, talking and laughing over drinks and cigarettes. I leant over to kiss her.5
Helen's hand moved to my groin and she murmured in my ear, "Paul, I want you to fuck me out here." And she slipped out of her dress, took off her bra and panties and reached out to grip the art nouveau railing of the balcony. I gazed with pounding lust at her slim, tanned body as she offered her taut buttocks to me. I desired her most in her white stockings, suspender belt and white patent leather stilettos. We both knew that, if any of the drinkers in the garden looked up, they would be able to see her clearly in the moonlight reflected off the lake.6
She told me not to undress; she wanted to be fucked like a cheap whore. So I dropped my trousers to the ground and, gripping her haunches, slipped into her. After no more than two or three minutes' thrusting, Helen ordered me to come. I plunged wildly into her, gasping and grunting like an animal, and felt her tense as her orgasm hit.7
Helen writhed in abandon on the balcony, clutching at the rail, struggling not to cry out in delight as I pumped my warm semen up her. As she convulsed, a shoe-strap broke and one of her stilettos fell off the balcony, landing with a crash on the table in the garden below.8
"Oh shit," whispered Helen, as the heads of the drinkers below turned to see where the stiletto had come from. She pushed me back into the room in a desperate attempt to avoid recognition.9
The next morning, the concierge gave me a small parcel. I opened it and found Helen's broken stiletto inside, together with a handwritten message. "Dear Paul," it said, "Helen's secret is safe with us. Love, Mary & John, Wendy & Eric, Frances & Peter."10
Author notes
In a similar vein.....
www.allpoetry.com/poem/1764200 .
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real nice.
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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In-depth comments such as yours are always deeply appreciated. It's a privilege to be exposed to the cutting candour of your highly intellectual comments. My heartfelt thanks.
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Your eye for detail always enhances the read for me. Most would write that she griped the rail, but not you. You add the finesse of the art nouveau railing. Its the little things I tell the wife
Is it time to change that picture yet, I liked your old one So much better. It didn't have me running for a bucket...
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excellent !!!
well edna..again i love what i have just read...still the same comment ...excellent piece - simple, entertaining, elegantly erotic piece...and hey you are cute !!!! -
Well, Well, Edna darling, I have kept that secret since that night, but now the cat is well and truly out of the bag,I will get rid of these photo's that I was going to use for blackmail, but there will be other balcony's and other dirty weekends.!!!!!
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Dear Master D-R: You are naturally entitled to your opinion and I have no objection whatsoever to criticism, so I shall not delete your remark. However I feel there is a measure of retailiatory vindictiveness on your having commented at all. Never mind. Goodbye.
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To each his own give MDr the boot . He/She/It always has to be negative to just about everyone's work. You did a good job .You were descriptive without being over done. You kept the attention of the reader. You made people laugh. what more could be asked for.
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Very superficial and a very tired old theme ... this does not stick out in the mind as a unique write. The language is ok, the descriptions trite and shopworn. Try again, because this style of write is seen all too often in the mens' magazines and, while they are only girly mags, the guys (and girls) who read them do still have brains enough to be discerning about what they read.
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wow this is really good i think the best i have read it really is the beginging the way it is told its as if just somebody reading it aloud seems like they are having the story being told to them ilove your you of words and the style it is written in it makes the story ellegent yet sexual its great nothing is over done it leaves some to the imagination and that i think it what a story should do leave some of it to be imagined by the reader your a great writer and i hope you endup writing a book this is great...!!!
love
steph -
I am happy to announce this won the contest. Thank you, Kyleen! I shall plough on with more smut...........
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Very nice story. Not to over the top. I like erotic not pornographic and this fits the bill perfectly.WOuld have liked to have been in the crowd below. Better yet, would have like to have been in the balcony.
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Marvelous Tale
Awesome story, with such warmth from the beginning, that turns into hot heat, you captured us, and set the readers on fire with the beaauriful Helen! She was the inferno, of lust! Your
tale, is composed eloquently with some sweet enchanting scenes, to feed our vivid imagination. Your talent is showing! So my friend write ON!....Ennovy -
This is very good. I say, I loved this write. I can see this step by step and the ending was very well written. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
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great
This is AMAZING. you are very talented///////////////// -
Click - loved this read - filled with real humour and a chuckle as well. So easy to imagine this scene and the secret being safe with all those spectators was a great way to end the story. Well written.
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I won't tell a soul!
An exhibitionist is always a perfect asset to any lustful event especially on a balcony with as wide a view as possible.Was Victor around/I really feel you should invite him on trips where there is a chance for him to exercise his visual fetish.Helen sounds very special and has a marvellous sense of adventure.How long have you two been friends?And darling you know there is no such thing as a secret only a really strong climax.Perfect write from the perfect erotic and highly exotic Lady Edna Fortune Teller to the Stars,no less.Love as always my dear.Elizabeth. -
What can I say! Wow. Brilliant story.
Debs x
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The next morning, the concierge gave me a small parcel. I opened it and found Helen's broken stiletto inside, together with a handwritten message. "Dear Paul," it said, "Helen's secret is safe with us. Love, Mary & John, Wendy & Eric, Frances & Peter."
A great climax ...
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This was truely priceless. I loved the suspence to it. The climaxe was also amazing. You are a gifted individual indeed.
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Dear Robin,
You ask "Could you please explain to me from a talent perspective how this piece is unique against say the mundane pieces that land in any number of men's magazines?"
And I am afraid I do not know as I don't read men's porn magazines (hard or soft). Can you tell me yourself? I should be interested to know if you feel it would be saleable to those magazines and I should appreciate any leads you may have. -
Awesome, most enjoyable write !!!!
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Guess alls well that ends well. You seem to do quite well when the applause is going on, but contrary to your statements as I have read some suggestions on your pieces simply do not handle criticism well at all. While I enjoyed this write and got a good mental picture of the narrative, could you please explain to me from a talent perspective how this piece is unique against say the mundane pieces that land in any number of men's magazines? RC
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Humorous
Haha... I liked it. I love embarassing stories and you have an awesome talent for making it hilarious. Congrats!
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Sometimes, being fucked like a cheap whore is wonderful and fun!!! Great job!!
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Have a Valium and a glass of milk, and call m
Oh, my, delightful.
Edna, I've missed reading your writing. I suppose you've either been on holiday or working very hard at ... something else, I won't venture to guess right now, as I'm sodding drunk (just a few glasses of merlot, but I am so fond of exaggerating). Well, yes. I'll bookmark this and read it again when I'm sober.
Cheers!
jean-pierre
P.S. What's this bit of exchange between you and Rae? Did it happen during the full moon or a couple of nights after? Check your calendars, ladies. Now kiss and make up. Or shake on it, if you prefer. I can't have two dear friends fussing like Arab and Jew. Or Turk and Christian, take your pick. -
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well written and thought out piece. creative. keep it up
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very cool
W O W This ROCKS MY KNICKERS LOL
Definitely a HOT one, and the twist at the end was HILARIOUS. I'm loving it.....
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Helena is not your type.
Welcome back and rather a tame tale from Edna!There are some exotic erotica moments but am used to something a little more vulgar and frankly explicit.Hope that your time in solitary did not tame the tiger in your tank.Helena sounds far too prissy for you my dear.Love the twist and of course all your secrets are safe with us.Great read as always and glad you are back on the scene.Buffy. -
excellant write edna the rest seems to have done you well i like this one not as vulgar as usual this one is wonderful xx Cheryl
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Another great write Edna, where can I find more audio of you reading, it adds another incredible dimension to your work.
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My dear Ayizan,
I am happy to accept sensible comments and criticisms, whether hostile, appreciative or whatever. But it helps if I can understand what you are talking about. You said:--
"I believe if you did a bit of editing here and there on your story, that the images of the story you're conveying will become less hunched and bunched up. In a few spots, you tried to avoid the stop-n-go sentences but then, did it."
Hunched?
Bunched up?
In a few spots?
stop-n-go sentences?
But then did it?
If this is some sort of literary criticism then forgive me but it's in a foreign language.
Love, Edna.
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In all honesty, I believe if you did a bit of editing here and there on your story, that the images of the story you're conveying will become less hunched and bunched up. In a few spots, you tried to avoid the stop-n-go sentences but then, did it. Suggestively, for instance, try this and hopifully you'll understand what I'm saying....
Two summers ago, Helen and I took advantage of the possibility of an illicit week together (the excuse was a conference in Switzerland). Our respective spouses believed the story - why should they not?
Helen, although a sublimely erotic and lovely woman, was small. One does not call beautiful women short... the word is petite; I was seven inches taller than Helen and she always wore high heels.
She had a voracious appetite for sex and sometimes when we were out together, she would demand to be satisfied. It was unwise to argue especially if Helen didn't get what she wanted within an unreasonably short period of time, but then, a monumental sulk would ensue; also had exhibitionist tendencies. I don't mean she wanted to have sex openly in front of others however, what turned her on was the possibility of being seen whilst being fucked.
...understand now?
Rae -
Wow, this was HOT. I almost had an orgasm reading it! LOL Cute twist at the end giving it a different "touch." (no pun intended). This is bookmarkable! Thanks for sharing!
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Lol I almost spat my tea out
Glad to have you back and you have to watch out for women named Helen 
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Very nice. I love the lake so much. A good fuck becomes great near any body of water. I can't wait to share this one with a special friend of mine. I'm tempted to drop shoes on purpose, now. Thanks so much.
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Welcome back. This story has a nice,light touch. I like the subtlety here, with so much implied - shown not told. And the twist in the tail is excellent. Your rustication has certainly not harmed your writing.
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