Fifteen years later you still find me. In the middle of the night you still haunt me. Echoes while I work still daunt me. Your face in the mirror looking back. Scream "Leave me alone!" and bust the glass. Now you have more control over me than I wanted. I had to move on, "It's for the best.", said Doctor Kyle. Told me to find a new love, so I did. It's been fifteen years now and I still can't be happy. You're still the only one I ever loved. Your beautiful smile and gorgeous green eyes. The way you pouted when you wanted me to feel for you. These things I don't have in my life anymore. My wife she's not like you. I don't know but I feel like her and I are through. She hates the way you torment me. She hates it when I talk of you as if you're still here. I try to go to work, release my mind from memories. No use. Go for a walk and grab a cup or a bite to eat. Little diner in the South of town. Each step I take you take with me, clicking of your heels. Sit down and stare into my coffee. Just coffee, you're not there? I find myself looking for my thoughts of you. You're not there. Have I finally lost all hope for us because you're not here? Clicking sound walking familiar. "Hey cutie can I help you?" the beautiful green eyed, bright smiled, young waitress says. "You look like you need someone to talk to hun, mind if I sit with you? I'm on break anyway?" she giggles. You're not there in my memories anymore love. You're right here in my eyes.1
-To see you again-2
JDM, 20063
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Reincarnation Choice.
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Holy shit!! This is just....... HOLY SHIT!!! I'm speechless. Fantastic job; well done and good luck!!
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A very sad and moving tale
What is it about these lost loves that never die? When I was fourteen I used to carry her satchel home fron art school, we would walk the long way through the park, nodding with daffodils. Now seventy-one years and five marriages on, I still never forgot the first sweet love. So I can appreciate your poem. Sorry I don`t have any "applauds" left today, for this excellent story. -
I appreciated the way the verses flowed with passion and longing. I understood this poem to be about losing someone who was loved. Finding a new relationship, but never quite being able to let go of the past and the new not filling the void. Then meeting someone who reminds you so much of the lost love, that you click and you finally find hope to love again.
Nice job. I thank you for sharing it. Keep writing. Peace.
Jen
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first of all i would like to say that i am so sorry that this is something you go through!! i have something similar--not for 15 yrs, a mere two, but i understand the feelings of frustration and the utter terror that it will continue, but even moreso that it will end. i am so sorry for yo9ur pain.
secondly, i am glad you shared this with me as i do not feel so alone now. thank you for that.
now, i think you wrote this fairly well. there are a few errors and i hope you do not mind me pointing them out. i wish for your story to be absolutely perfect without changing it--only fixing the spelling.
you wanted me to do feel for you
do is not needed here
She hates it when I talk of you as your still here. I try to go to work, release my mind from
your should be you(')r(e)
Your not there. Have I finally lost all hope for us because your not here? Clicking sound walking
same thing with you're
hun, mind if I sit with you I'm on break anyway?" she
you(?) I'm on break anyway"(,) she
giggles. Your not there in my memories anymore love. Your
right here in my eyes.
the you're thing again here. this is a common error i see on here.
i do think you did a good job so please do not be offended. i can see this being a contest poem and there, these things would matter.
thank you again for sharing this with me. viyanna r langager
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very nice
Is this a story of reincarnation? That is how I perceived it. I guess we all perceive things in different ways. I like what you have written. Thank you for sharing this with us on AP. -
I love your poetry when you're in this mood. It's so strong and emotional...just wonderful poetry altogether. Love it, keep writing.
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woo!
Love this story!
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