~Chapter 4~1
*Pavement*2
Sarah ran down the street panting, listing to the pattern of her feet hit the pavement. She looked around and finally stopped about a mile from her house. She looked around at the skyline and saw the Stratosphere. “Here we go.” She sighed. 3
Sarah kept going only walking this time. She headed down the street and made a right on Collanthey AVE. Then she kept walking and 30 minutes later, she was looking up at the sheer glass face of the Stratosphere. Walking to one of the major pillars she walked into the built in door and went to the grand elevator.4
“Welcome to the Stratosphere” came the voice of the bellhop started in his jolly way. 5
“This modern Marvel is……” Sarah looked around and ignored him. She looked out the window and saw the ground leave and the sky came closer. Finally the elevator stopped and the door opened.6
“Thank you for coming to the Stratosphere, I hope you have a good stay here in Las Vegas.” The bellhop concluded. Nodding as everyone got off he gave Sarah an especially long look as if to be wondering something.7
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I really didn't like the length of this chapter, though it helped with my time problem, I think it might be better placed at the beginning of the next chapter and called chapter 4... but that is up to the author, either way we get to read it all any way..
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Something which differs from the previous songs in that it seems out of order, with the idea of being used only to be turned around into being at an airport? It seems like you have missed some key detail. A script may be really good with this because with scripts. You could just say. like the previous chapter. You could just say what you said. Or what you trully do mean. This one got me side tracked.
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