The Tracks

I open my eyes and I see. The train’s coming near. I close my eyes and I see no longer.1

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For Uni, I had to write the shortest Story I possibly could. This is what I came up with.

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  • Embitter
    July 23

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    Again... neat to see so much weight in a single sentence. It's an art form. And the way it's written here is poetic. The first sentence is great in it's brevity. It automatically makes me think of deeper things.