Blue moon so cool

So we started our journey, a blue moon that's so cool in the brightest night I've ever known.  We started walking I tuned into your talking this is the strongest fight I've lost.  Kept on going without even knowing I was falling falling for you.  A jar with a penny for every time I was ready, to admit it was all about us.  Now we were rich I could build us a bridge and carry on walking tonight.  I kept on thinking that the grey owl was blinking, watching us fly on by.  I took a chance and trod on the grass, and asked you for your hand.  You took my hand but the grass turned to sand and we both sunk into the dunes.  We were so cold I breathed in your soul, and my heart turned to fire  Your beautifully eyes looked right inside and made my fire burn out the the tides, it burnt through our being, turned us into ash, rising above the flames, together at last...1

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  • nesca
    June 15, 2006
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    don't know what happened to you charly but this piece is fantastic, whoa, easy riding baby, really good stuff...

    tony

  • perfect motion
    June 7, 2006
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    wowza!
    poem story!
    I love the line
    'Now we were rich I could build us a bridge and carry on walking tonight'
    that was beautifully done!
    oooh so romantic
    *dies*

  • DramaQueen469
    February 19, 2006
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    Awwwwww!!! That's so cool!! Great write, keep it up and good luck!!

    ~dramaqueen469~