Amerina dialed the familiar number of 435-8729 of her boyfriend Tommy’s phone number. Awaiting for him to pick up, she got his mother. Asking to speak to Tommy, his mother responded with: “He’s not allowed to use the phone at the moment.” Asking if she could have Tommy called back later; his mother told her he had lost his phone privileges for a while. This was the last straw. Amerina had listened in the background on how Tommy’s mother spoke to him. She had gone too far. Amerina finally blew up.1
“You are a terrible mother! I’ve seen abusive mothers- who abuse their children day in and day out- act better than you. He’s only seventeen and you treat him like he’s twenty. You verbally abuse him, you tell him to do things that you could do if you got up off your lazy fucking ass some time. And it’s called a BABYSITTER! Learn the word. Tommy shouldn’t have to drop his life to take care of YOUR granddaughter. He has a school life and YOU told him yourself that if he fails this year, he would get his GED and go off to college. And not to sound SELFISH but that would mean me being alone… and probably killing myself.” Amerina started yelling into the phone. “You hate me. You’ve called me a fucking whore, you’ve said shit about my mother AND father. You had NO right to go there. It’s my family and you know fucking SHIT about them. If you’re going to make him do things around the house… IT’S CALLED A FUCKING ALLOWANCE!!! Otherwise, do the fucking shit on your own.2
“Do you want to know why we fucking ran away? It’s not because I was pregnant… but because Tommy hates you. And so do I. Do you even LOVE your oldest son? Because to me, it doesn’t show. For neither of us. What’s with hitting your children… or even grandchildren? There are better- and EFFECTIVE- ways of punishment. I should know. My parents would let me sit in the corner for minutes upon minutes… and I never did the shit I did to get in the corner in the first place.”3
Amerina was interrupted by Tommy’s mother. “You have no right to judge me or the way I punish my children.”4
“You’re right, I don’t. But you have no right judging my family. And it’s called abuse. It’s illegal to hit a child regardless their age, what they did, or even if it’s in the form of punishment. Look at your daughter. You hit her… and how she hits her daughters. It passes on how they were taught and their upbringing. But it didn’t affect Tommy. He hated it when you would slap him around. He may SEEM happy around you… but it’s a disguise. A mask. So you don’t see the truth behind his eyes- like you would even care how he feels. But with me… with me, he lets that shield down. And I see the hurt, and helplessness in his eyes. How much he wants to please you. And you don’t give a shit. I’m sick of this. You’re probably not even listening. I’ll just talk to Tommy tomorrow at school. See ya bitch.” With that, Amerina hung up the phone, went to her room and cut her brains out. She cut her arms, legs, chest, stomach, anywhere she could get her hands on. She was sick of Tommy’s mother and sick of everything. All she wanted to do was die… or to lie in Tommy’s arm, having him tell her she was safe.5
The End6
Author notes
Yeah, I'm pissed at my boyfriend's mother and I needed to relieve some steam. GODDAMMIT I hate her. She's a bitch and this is what I wanted to get across. Hopefully I did?
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Wow, intense! A good way to express your feelings about this woman...um....is all of this true? Is my question. Probably not, lol. Anyway...is was really good, there was a lot of dialogue, too.
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the first paragraph has a number of fragmented sentences. she the mother would treat him younger not older than he is comma after lazy. why would amerina kill herself and why would she tell his mother this 'and' shouldn't start a sentence. because to me sounds awkward. more fragmented sentences. comma after punishment not a fullstop. there is no reason for amerina to tell her more about her parents if she doesn't want tommy's mother to talk about her (amerina's) parents.
she should say you're wrong I do, it's called abuse and you have no right....
it passes on should have a comma but i would change passes to carries.
comma after disguise. lose the sentence so you don't see. start new paragraph with Like you care ....lose 'and'... I see the hurt ..... the part 'cut her brains out' is wrongly worded
one can really feel the anger in this piece. you've gotten that across. if this is a true story I'm sorry to hear things are so hard for you.
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thank you ashleigh, i love you so much, i have a name for it "bad mother"
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Thank you so so so much Goompa. If she's as stupid as I think she is, she would think I was telling the truth. And one day, I WILL tell her! Her granddaughters are 3 and 5. They don't know any better and when my love babysits the youngest, she envies and loves him to death because he can't hurt her. He was hit as a child and hated the feeling. When I see im, he doesn't really tell me how he feels (unles he says "I love you") but I see it. I see in his eyes. And I hate that. It makes me want to cry out and hold him close. All the things I brought up in this story are so true... and there was that one part where I had to feel selfish. I barely EVER get my way, and this is one thing I need in life. Love from someone OUTSIDE my family. And that's who I get it from.
Today his mom made him get off the phone and I hve no clue why. He said he would call me back... but it's been about 3... maybe even 4 hours now.
Thank you so much again for giving me this comment. Your kind words won't go unnoticed.
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OUTSTANDING
Well I doubt it got it across to HER, but it sure is a powerfully emotional write that knocked my socks off. You wrote this amazingly well, and sadly- all TOO REAL. The sad part Ashleigh, is that it is NOT against the law to spank a child, but parents have become so unbalanced and have lost the ideal that DISCIPLINE IS OUT OF LOVE, so now we have a society where the rules are all so unspecific, that while one mother is doung a wonderful job (or Father) in this world, hundreds- or thousands of others are bashing their kids in anger. So courts simply say: "You touch that kid, you go to jail."
I WAS spanked as a child, and to be honest, deserved every one. My Mom did spank us kids in anger, my Dad did not. I was hit with a RULER across my hands in 3rd GRADE (it was ALLOWED in the 60's and 70's). I was hit with a paddle- WRONGFULLY because I did nothing wrong, by my gym teacher- in 7th grade...he was an ex Pro Football player. A kid next to me pushed me off the bleachers just as the Coach walked out. I still want to find that man- and wallop his now 65-year-old ass.
Today, it's so messed up, the kids get little or no punishment, and turn into little monsters. Worse- they are never taught WHY the punishment was necessary- so the act wouldn't be repeated! I tell you what, my Dad was a hulking man. We seldom got a whoopin', because it hurt, but as I said, when it did happen, I DID learn my lesson! Sadly, my Dad crossed the line when I was passed those days. When I was 17, I disobeyed a simple command not to leave my room. I said 'screw this' and went across town to hang out. Coming back, he knocked me off the back of my brother's motorcycle with his HUGE hand, and I landed on my ass.
I never respected him again. Even after his death.
Times have changed. Discipline has changed. What should never change is the importance of balance and LOVE when discipline is given. Damn you are a SMART and amazing writer!- Goompa! -
hey hun, that was a a piece fuill of anger ! you expressed yourself wonderfully! as for titles .... hmmm...but at the moment all i can think of is .... A phone call to Hell
luv yah
mom
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OMG!!! THAT WAS SO SO SAD!!! If that is a true story well done for standing up to her!! And yes, your message was very clear.
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