Emptiness is not Happiness1
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WRITING FOR CONTEST Story Contest- An Ambigous Start..
/Squish! I stepped on the fallen strawberries.. Its cold, grainy & wet feeling irked me as my blank future irritated me. As a child I loved eating chilled strawberries with whipped cream & I thought it would uplift me again. Well, I am older now, and have outgrown a lot of things from my past.
The easy possibility I had of a fresh new optimistic life frustrated me rather than feeling good. I guess leaving sick old ways were going to be more painful & difficult than what I bore, rather others bore, while going through them! Hmmm.. Now a days I seem to have a lot of time in my hands to think & feel & plan.. now that I have stopped complaining & started to see the positives in life. Life definitely seems better, happier, lighter.. But I am unable to understand this extreme discontent, which seems to be tagging along/...
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Great Write
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Thank you fathom me, I'm glad you like my entry. I'm going to give some serious thought to yours and pomes advice about a book. A book that would help others like me so they dont feel like they are the only ones (Isolated) with this problem and maybe even help those who know someone with the same problem. If I was to write a book that is the kind of book I would like to write a book that can be realted to by others.
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Personal life dealt exquisitely well literari
It makes a great read. It feels well to see that you’ve come far in your own growth to be out of fear and pain onto a plateau of despair- this can never be undermined. Maybe your continued walk on this path and light of awareness will lead you a step ahead from the mere contentment felt as you put in.. if not happiness already?
You’ve expressed yourself so beautifully and well here, I do hope you write a book someday as discussed with ‘Pome’ above.. It doesn’t have to cover everything.. things only in this light will also make a beautiful, insightful and an inspiring read for the readers. You'll be amazed how this emotional and philosophical insight will help others and maybe even you.
Thank you very much for entering this piece in my contest- very well written, and the strawberry mood was kept throughout the piece. Good work.
Keep writing,
Kunjal.
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Thank you Pome. I have been told a few times that we should write a book about what we go through. A lot has been written from poems, silent writings, some short stories and journaling, but to put it into a book, I don't know if it is feasable.
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This is good but it ended when it was getting to be best. I wish you could add maybe more? It is up to you however. It could be the beginning of a series or something. Maybe have every aspect write itself out hmmmm.. i don't know. I will say good development of an amibiguous start and I would like to see more
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I do think a lot, perhaps too much. I think about my alters, my other aspects, and I think of how some have bared my strife’s and afflictions with the greatest of finesse, while others have bared them with very little grace at all. Whose fault is that?
Maybe it's not anyone's fault
I like the story and how the flow of the story was kept with the original paragraphs
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