Eyes

I glanced accross the room and saw him staring. I can't see why, he broke up with me months ago, and asked out another girl on the same day. How does that work out? Plus, I have a boyfriend. 1

I threw the thought aside, I really didn't want him to like me again, I don't know how to turn people down. I wouldn't be able to stand the thought of a guy looking down, or if he's short, up and me, and see the look of dissapointment in his eyes. The eyes are what always kill me. Their souls are hidden there, and they pull me in, or draw me away. It's always something I'll have stored in the back of my brain. 2

My first boyfriends eyes were blue. They were bright blue, large and electric. They held all his energy, and that was a lot of energy. It was amazing when they looked into mine, not as bright as his, much more dull, a gray blue, not something as great as his.3

The one staring has blue eyes too, but a different sort. They were kind eyes, softer, and I loved to stare into them.4

Now, I love the way my boyfriends eyes make sideways cresent moons when he laughs. Just like the cartoons in the television shows, which can sort of discribe him. He's so goofy and funny, and the half circle of his laughing eyes hold that all there, and staring into them from between people across the room; looking sideways and up at them when we're at the movies and he's holding me in his arms, which feels so good. I feel so safe in his arms. I didn't feel this good in my other two's arms, I felt uncomforatable. It didn't feel right, but now it does.5

I love it when he reaches for my hand, and I love it when all four of our combined hands are intwined, and I can almost no longer tell who's are who's, but I know that it doesn't matter.6

So now, when HE stares, it feels bad, and not right. My mind fills with worries. I won't know what to do, and what will Ethan think, won't he be a little uncomfortable, even though I would say no, wouldn't he feel a little odd. Would our relationship get just a little messed up, I have to think that it would. I know it would. And I couldn't stand no longer seeing those laughing eyes.7

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  • Epsilina
    February 3, 2006
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    Haha, that sounded so like me sometimes. The lack of true storyline, was okay to me though, because it wasn't exactly a story, more like, a telling of thoughts, but I think under a category, it would be a story. I too liked that you concentrated on eyes, to sort of bring the whole story together with a constant focus to make the piece, in a way, stick together more. I thought that it was pretty well written, but just a little jumbled. With a little bit of tweaking in some parts, to try to make it less, for lack of a better word, repetitive.

    Good job.

  • Symphony
    February 3, 2006
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    This was well done, although there wasn't a huge backing storyline wise, you managed to keep my attention cause I wanted to know what was going to happen next!

    The emphasis on eyes was good also, helped to bring the characters alive more vividly.

    Nice job