..."so you really are?"1
"yeah...well...its isnt within my own restriction, is it?"2
" i understand Sheila..always care to remember this humble uncle of yours...well then i'd better be leaving..."3
he walked home as i sat alone on the porch.....it was time..i went to meet domnica and pat at the pub..and told them that i would be returning to the hotel...i gave them my room number as i left....4
i strode into the hotel room..Bang!...the door shut behind me and i was sure that it wasnt the wind.... turned back and there on the couch was a lady..in a red skimpy bikini with a bearded ruffian who lay, his head propped on her lap.....he grunted at me as he got up....5
"c'mon babe, i want u to enteratin me along with this bitch"...he spoke in a rather artificial voice....6
i was taken aback...i tried to get out of the room, but i whip that cracked across me thigh stopped me from doing so...7
" wont u satisy me little lesbian fantasy", he spoke with a chuckle....but this time his exitement gave him away..i knew that voice...it was...8
i knew i was stuck..i slid my hand in my pocket, gripping my mobile...i blindly dialled domnica's number, and began to speak in a rather loud voice...9
"well sir, but , dou think U can MOLEST me in a HOTEL?"...i hoped that domnica would pick up the hint...10
"what do u think of me u silly girl....now u better get started..." he spoke with increased exitement..11
i neeeded time...i came forward and kissed the prostitue he had brought... made sure that it went no further....i felt the lady lick me..i felt utterly uncomfortable in the presence of this man...i couldnt stand the realisation of his identity...12
..........the lady was now tugging at my miniskirt...i kew i had to act fast..i bega to fake a cough...i coughed harder and harder and fell to the floor...buthe saw right throu me...another wip slashed my hand, making me bleed...he pcked me up and laid me on the cot where he tied my hands with a blanket..and turned to the prostitute...."now u'd better get going with this jackarse..."13
...i knew was done with....he was gapping at me wildly...while the lady began to kiss me unceremoniously...14
...i couldnt bear this....my skirt was almost gone...i was being molested not only by the lady for the man had joined her too....it was unbearable...i couldnt hold this anymore...and then the door flung open...but that time was about half naked...a couple police men stepped in and grabbed both of those unwanted elements....i got up..."jut a minute officer i muttered, and walked up to the man, and tugged off his beard...and there stood that evil uncle of mine...my heart was ripped...15
he was the only perrson from my family who accepted that i wasnt wrong...but with such intentions...it should me how the world looked at us bi.s
Author notes
..betrayal again..but this time, severe and burining..
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It's always the uncle

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engaging
I like the tension you have and the dialogue is rapid enough, it could have expanded more, but then again it allows the reader space to fill in the gap. Line 16 has a spelling typo and other than that, very good. blessings and best wishes, ~richard
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, overall: 6, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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Very Nice Lines
Nice effects to give me visulas of how each scene is blocked. This is nice, but I am still looking for more passion here.beginning: 1, language: 3, plot: 3, overall: 6, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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wow...this was amazing...i really liked it...keep writing.
Diya -
WOW babe that was amazing!! this was so sad, i cant believed it ended like this, im hopeing this wasnt true, this has got me worried about you, but yeah, i totally hear the message your sending out in this story, BI's ROCK!!!! yeah sorry had to get that out of my system.. this really was amazing, oyour work amazes me and stands up for BI's, i love your work, keep it up
love you
kerri xXx
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