Laura, 2049

My eyes were held tightly shut by the incantations of sleep and sweet dreams, as they had been for the past 6 hours. I could feel my bed beginning its usual 7 AM vibrations in its attempt to awake me as I had requested it to the previous night. Disregarding the now violent tremors, I let my mind's theater carry on playing the clip of Daniel Fenton, in my opinion the hottest teen actor in American cinema's history. Even though I had known this bed for more than 3 years, I was always too drowsy and unprepared for the severe, unexpected actions it took to get me awake. As the images of Danny faded away, I came to my senses and after a series of recuperating blinks, opened my eyes. Before I could sit up straight and revive myself fully from the comforts of sleep, the mattress sprang up like an infuriated cobra's head and thrust me headfirst onto the thinly carpeted floor. Acute pain surged through my body as I stumbled onto my feet, caressing my aching head, as my bed alarm started amidst agitating beeps to repeat the time in its customary monotony. Cursing the bed, I shuffled towards it and in my eagerness to get it to shut up, punched the "Sleeper Awake" button.  1

Later, I hastily scrambled into the shower and pressed the "Quick Shower" tab and let the cool blast of water sooth me. I looked down at the three, half- empty bottles of hair- dying shampoo and conditioner, musing over which color to leave my hair today. It was a quite simple task, pick a color, apply and lather, and finally rinse with cold water. Katherine had once mentioned that John had told her I looked pretty in blonde, so in a sudden desire to impress others (yes, I am a bit of a show- off) I decided on blonde. 2

Once out of the washroom, I hurried into my room and entered the digital combination for my closet, and waited impatiently for it to open. The doors swung open, revealing all of my possessions, even junk from as far back as 6th grade, which lay inside. I rummaged around for my bag, and upon finding it, quickly darted downstairs and into the dining area. My father was fiddling lucklessly with the damaged breakfast maker, desperately trying to get a decent meal out of it, as my mother scanned through the news- gadget at the dining table. As she pushed down more buttons to see if anyone had responded to the notice she had put up offering her ancient 2 sense equipped television for sale, she nodded at me and gestured for me to take the McDonald's coupon chip lying on the kitchen counter for lunch. I loved all the different items at McDonald's, and it was a great hang- out spot… it was no small wonder the US government proclaimed it the national food's group. True, McDonald's was the major reason obesity had taken over more than 90% of the American population, but it was much demanded and undeniably popular that the lives of Americans would alter tremendously if it had been stopped. 3

I slipped the coupon chip into my bag and checked the contents of my bag. My Handy, my text- gadgets, my reader, my music, video, and movie chips, a crumpled 100 dollar bill, and the car- keys... everything and more required for a regular Saturday was present. I made my way to the kitchen, with only as much intention as to inspect the amount of progress my father was making tackling the cooker. He had given up now, and was trying in frustration to contact a mechanic through his Handy. Intent on not wasting any time, I decided to skip breakfast and meet up with Katherine as soon as time would allow me to. 4

With my backpack slung over one shoulder, I clambered into the car, inserted the keys, fastened my seat- belt, chose a speed of 70miles/hr, flipped through the different destinations until I found "Boston Mall," and switched the car onto START MODE. With hardly a sound escaping its motor, it started up and swiftly backed out of the garage. As it entered the main road, teeming with amphibuses and amphicars, an image of the 20th century 'bike' came to me. I smirked at the thought of my high- school parents riding such a pathetically feeble thing on a busy Boston highway… but the way they described it seemed like it was some rare luxury. They often talked about cars, trucks, and buses, although none of these could compare to their modern versions that could run in water, possessed automatic control, and even some that were capable to fly. I shook my head with pity at the poorly lead lives of my parents and the many other adults who were children in the end of the 20th century… what am I saying? They didn't even have a life to lead! As the car advanced, I hooked up my Handy to the car and inserted a video game chip into it. My dad seemed to talk of the olden days as if it were paradise, and he even claims gadgets called cell phones, Play stations, Game boys, X Boxes, computers, DVD players, and MP3 players existed. He states that they were very similar to the different programs incorporated within my Handy, and the main object used to store information was something called a CD (he says that's basically the same thing as a chip, only chips are much smaller and more dependable and durable) but I find enough reason to not believe a word he says. I sighed, and taking the Handy's cordless remote- control, I started the game.5

The car abruptly came to a stop and the door automatically slid open. I had reached Boston Mall. I was disappointed in having to stop the game at such an intense point, but didn't want to keep Katherine waiting too long, so I withdrew the car- keys and detached my Handy and keenly stuffed them into the my backpack. As I stepped out of the car, the door slipped back into place and the lock clicked behind me. I glanced up at clear blue sky, where the frequent Saturday morning commercials played like skits being broadcasted from heaven. I approached the huge building that made up the entrance to the mall, and found Katherine leaning against a pillar, absorbed in her Handy. She glanced up from it, spotted me, and with a cheerful smile on her face, ran toward me. When I asked her if I had caused her any inconvenience keeping her for so long, she simple shrugged and dismissed the matter telling me that she had visited the library to check out a new chip containing some of the latest fashion trends suggested by Fiona Mason, the latest, most hip style guru of the decade. She popped the chip into her reader and showed me the many hundred tips, and impressed by the looks of it; I transferred all of it onto my Handy. Then we slowly proceeded towards the mall. 6

Despite the clear skies outside, the inside of the building was astir with rain drops drizzling from the ceiling. Katherine and I slipped on our jackets and burette, and switched them both to "Rain." This feature on most jackets permitted the material to absorb all of the water and leave us as dry as we would be in the middle of the Sahara. Most articles of clothing served as a heating/ cooling device for the wearer too… particularly useful aspects of clothing that didn't exist 50 years ago when clothing was worn to ensure privacy and display modesty. An enormous television screen hung suspended from the ceiling, and a crowd sat gathered underneath, watching the various news, movies, shows, and commercials that it played. I extracted my Handy once again, and enthusiastically took a video of the extravagant mall and shot Katherine goofing off, acting like a lunatic rejoicing in victory his escape from a mental hospital. I saved it on a spare chip and was about to drop my Handy back into the bag when it beeped, letting off its message alert. I opened up my inbox and found the new message to be an advertisement inviting me to an MC's store in the mall "Holly's MC's," where the MC's were worth half the regular price… an ordinary sale to promote the shop's name amidst public.7

Katherine dragged me around the mall (she seemed to know every nook and cranny of the place.) and lead me into "Holly's MC's." It was a rather small shop, with hardly a flea, let alone a customer there. The brunette at the counter, watching a cooking- show on a medium- sized modern television set, I took to be Holly. The message I had received on my Handy had reminded me that I did need to buy a pair of MC's… the nurse at school had said "Laura, your eyesight has reached the stage where it cannot do without the aid of the modified contacts." When I had told my parents about what the nurse had said, they launched into a whole story of some peculiar object called "glasses." They had the same purpose as MC's, but were much simpler in design and technology, and they had been around since the eighteenth century. My mother described that she had no choice but to wear them when her eyesight grew weaker, and she was often called a 'geek' at school, a term used back then to refer to nerds under the power of glasses. An earlier version of MC's also existed then, but her parents did not allow her to buy them since they believed she was too young and it would be too much to handle for her. It wasn't very simple like the modern MC; it had its limitations… it couldn't be used in dust and could easily get contaminated, it had to be stored and soaked in a special solution, and worst of all, it couldn't change color!8

I took out the chip on which the optician had provided my prescriptions and handed it to Holly, who barely took her eyes off the TV screen as she motioned me to Isle 3. Katherine, being the hyper teenaged girl she was, literally squealed when she saw the numerous makes of MC's abreast on the racks and panels attached to the wall. A tempting aroma hung around the room, probably the food that the cook on Holly's cooking show was making. I remembered that my mother had mentioned that when she was a young girl, the TV's were only two sensed, like the one she was trying to get rid of now. This meant that they could only be perceived by the senses of sight and sound, unlike now, when all the televisions could be enjoyed using the senses of sight, sound, and smell. I found a pair of MC's that Katherine and Holly suggested suited me, so trusting their words, I bought it. Holly packed it in a shopping bag that had a big band of letters spelling out "Holly's MC's" stretching across its top and it even changed colors when held up in the sun, just like the MC's did. 9

We roamed around the mall, spending as much of our money as we possibly could, wandering amidst the bustling throng of shoppers in all the various shops, from small ones like Holly's to big ones that made up a quarter of the whole mall, from empty one's like Holly's to so thickly congested ones that you could not fit inside the shop without having to rub against two people at once. It was a great experience and a truly relieving break from the living nightmares that dominated my school life, and I completely became oblivious to time until my mother's voice anxiously reached me over my Handy. She had used the homing device connected to her Handy to find the whereabouts of my location, and was now inquiring on when I would get home. My Handy identified the time as a startling 9:30PM, and sure enough, as I took a glimpse outside, the skies still displaying advertisements had darkened into night. I told her I would be home immediately, as I had an exasperating three homework assignments I had barely spared a glance to complete.10

I parted with Katherine, promising her I would give her a call on her Handy sometime tomorrow. Waving goodbye, I clambered into my car, inserted the keys, fastened my seat- belt, chose a speed of 70miles/hr, flipped through the different destinations until I found "Home," and switched the car onto START MODE. And as the car almost soundlessly began to back out of the parking lot, I silently thanked god for not placing me to lead a life in 1999.11

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  • christinaumsted
    April 14, 2006
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    cool

    The story was long and good !

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • christinaumsted
    April 14, 2006
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    cool

    The story was long and good !

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 7, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Julia93
    March 17, 2006
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    Sure, I'll break it up. I think a girl in the future could think like Laura did, actually. The changes from the late 20th century to the mid 21 century are supposed to be IMMENSE, as suggested in this story. So the youngsters in that society are supposed to think of the 20th century kind of like we would think of the 1700s, so naturally, they wouldn't find all of the techno stuff in the 20th century believable. Thanks a lot for taking the time to read all of this and for leaving this valuable comment!
    Julia


  • Glenda L Hand
    March 16, 2006
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    Wow, that was a long read. You did good though. As someone else said, maybe break it up a little more.
    One suggestion:what am I saying? They didn't even have a life to lead! As the car advanced, I hooked up my Handy to the car and inserted a video game chip into it. My dad seemed to talk of the olden days as if it were paradise, and he even claims gadgets called cell phones, Play stations, Game boys, X Boxes, computers, DVD players, and MP3 players existed. He states that they were very similar to the different programs incorporated within my Handy, and the main object used to store information was something called a CD (he says that's basically the same thing as a chip, only chips are much smaller and more dependable and durable) but I find enough reason to not believe a word he says.
    This is not very believeable to me. Although my kids will know things I don't, there is history and I can believe my dad rode horses to school, even though I drove. It is okay to make it seem weird to your character, but I think your chacter thinking it is not true is a little over the top.
    IMHO only.

  • Julia93
    March 11, 2006
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    Thanks a lot! Even more thanks if you award me that shiny golden trophy and a few hundred points!
    LOL.... KIDDING!
    Thanks for holding this contest!
    Julia


  • Shancy Fayre
    March 10, 2006
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    This is very imaginative and creative. I enjoyed reading it. You put me there with your characters. Great writing skills.
    Thank you for entering it and best wishes. Shancy.

  • Julia93
    March 10, 2006
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    Thanks so much for taking the time to read this story! I really appreciate it. I'm really very glad to hear that you liked it, too! As for the great career thing... I am planning to become some kind of professional writer when I grow up! Anyways, thanks a lot!
    Julia


  • Master Domtos rose
    March 10, 2006
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    I really enjoyed this ... you penned your character well, imbuing her with the typical impatience, disbelief and cocky self-confidence of all teenagers. Very well written ... if you keep writing like this, you will have a great career ahead of you.

  • Julia93
    March 8, 2006
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    Thanks!
    Julia


  • Darkness Princess
    March 6, 2006
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    wow!! interesting! i really liked all the references to all the so called out-of-date 1999 stuff that we have now. in my personal opinion this stuff will never go out of style, just get more stylish. anyway, very imaginative and witty. i enjoyed reading it! sometimes we just have to stop and think about how things are gonna change in the future and just realize that if we want to hold to somthing that we truly love then we better do it now before it becomes obsolete. again, very imaginative! good luck in the contest! keep up the great writes!!

  • Julia93
    February 10, 2006
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    Thanks so much for reading this piece too! Sorry I haven't looked at any of your stuff yet... it's just that I'm really busy with school, but when I get time, I will be sure to stop by and comment on a couple of your poems. I'll look into the length of the paragraphs soon. Thanks again for your time and comment!
    Julia

  • Julia93
    February 10, 2006
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    You're kidding me... I don't think I've heard of many 12 year olds getting published before. Anyways, thank you so much for your time, comment, and applause!
    Julia


  • ThespusLives
    February 5, 2006
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    Marvelous!

    I wouldn't change a thing, this was publishable. The idea of a Handy made a lot of sense. Overall, this was fun to read. I actually wished it were longer! I think you should start writing plays and books if you can; I wouldn't doubt that you will gte published.


  • Definative Illness
    February 5, 2006
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    You are very clever! I liked all the new things you put in here, such as the MC's, and the McDonald's thing was funny. I didn't really mind the length because you were actually telling a story. The only thing I would do is break up the story into some smaller parapgraphs so the words wpn't drive the reader nuts. Other than that, excellent job and let me know if you want some of your other stuff read.

    >>> Catalyst <<<

  • Julia93
    February 4, 2006
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    Thanks alot Juliette! I am really, really grateful towards you for reading this whole long thing. Hope you didn't get bored!
    Julia


  • Juliette Rose
    February 3, 2006
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    Oh, this is funny! Very inventive and creative. Way to go! Haha, I especially like the "handy" (ipod, cell, computer, gameboy,videogame, and whatever else they've made!) Great job -Juliette

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