Wishes only take you so far,1
Memories last forever.2
Good or bad,3
Happy or sad,4
But the ones you wish to forget;5
Haunt you.6
His tears fell like rain in spring. He had just woke from another bad dream, his memories played all to clear, like a old black and white movie. He often wondered what went wrong, why couldn’t he save her, and was it his fault for letting her go home that night. Things had changed so much after her death. He barley got any sleep any more, her memories were always present. Everything reminded him of her, even every step down State Street, every Pepsi can he ever saw; how could she be gone.7
In five minutes he had lost everything he once loved, with out the chance to tell her he loved her. Why couldn’t he tell her how he felt or why didn’t he tell her he knew. He thought he should of saved her, should have done more. He felt as though it was his fault, he let her go home that night. But how could he have stopped her, what would have happened if he didn’t let her go home, how mad her dad would have been when she finally did have to go home to him.8
Author notes
This is the thing thats before the first chapter thing.. its the second part of my other story so like idk how much sence this will make if you dont read the other story but like its short..
What did you think? Please comment!
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lol thanks beth
~Turtle~ -
I haven't read the other story but I can get the general picture of what's going on, which is a very good thing to be able to do from reading a prologue (what the thing before the story is... lol)...
Hugs,
Beth -
PENGUINS DO NOT GO QUACK!!!!! lol thanks for the comment french fry
Lots Of Love
~~Turtle -
Thank you very much Josh
~Turtle -
Thank you for the comment Iohagh
Lots of pixie love
~!Turtle -
MORE THAN PENGUINS!!! PENGUINS GO QUACK!! This was a great story ^^ alot of imagiary in it!! Good job side kick number 2 ^^
Your hero,
French Fry -
Thanks sis but im still not sure if theres gonna be more lol
love you more then penguins!!
~Turtle -
those opening lines...craziness. so beautiful. wonderful start miss turtle
can't wait to see more
love you more than there are fishes in the sea
Cassie
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love you to..
~Tater Tot -
I'll edit it ok? I love this is this is awesome...dont make it go away... dont ok? you need to write this out... I love you
love ya twiny
-Pinky -
Wishes only take you so far,
Memories last forever.
Good or bad,
Happy or sad,
But the ones you wish to forget;
Haunt you
This was majorly meaningful, expecialy with that opening lines, You did an awesome job on writing this piece, and it's a sad feeling, You wrote a powerful piece here, that does haunt ast emotions, The thought of What if, or I could have done more, all and all, ya do all you can do, if it's not good enough, then it's not good enough. Now the opening stanza really spoke to me on many different levels, let me try to break it down what I see in that.
"Wishes only take you so far," Yes, actions take ya farther, wishing and acting are two things, everyone can wish, and it only take you so far, actions and faith will take you the rest of the way
"Memories last foreverGood or bad,Happy or sad,." Just the memorys you let last forever, like everything there is a choice, Like half of alot of stuff I've been through the memorys slowly fade, just as scars slowly fade, It takes years yes, And the good memorys will fade quicker if ya let them, it just depends on how much you hold them. With every new memory and old one will fade
"But the ones you wish to forget; Haunt you" Wow, I know this feeling way too much, yes it haunts, and seeks to kill your spirit, but you do have a choice, and it can fade, like my sisters case she's 24 and it took her 6 years to fully get over the past. THis was an awesome line, but it can only haunt you when you fear it, if you no longer fear it, or have emotion to it, it has no place to haunt.
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It makes a lot of sense do the immediacy and urgency of his regret which is a story in itself. One of the secrets of great writing is talk in the present, even in flashbacks, transition and then is another now with pow if you can face it straight. One of my mentors said the best writing is merely telling the truth without repeating the same words and trying to make the experience fresh. Then he said the fulfillment of any writing is commenting directly or indirectly on what was learned since that is the pow we all are looking for even if the lesson is it is a lesson. Sometimes when I don't have the answer I pretend I did and ask how did I get to the point where I am content and if I cannot be content then that is the message of I can see it and I am closer too it but I am not there yet once again. I hope this doesn't sound like gobbledygook. If it does just overlook it and read it again much later. If that still fails then delete it. Love you to death and beyond my Pixie. Ciao now.
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