When it all started I was just your average kid. All I wanted to do was have a good time. But then my life came crashing down on me. I lost all my friends and all my hope. I would not have done it, but you said you loved me.1
"Hey Alice, are you coming to my prom bash?" Why would he even have to ask. "Hell yeah I am, I wouldn't miss it for the world." If only I would have known, that you were going to do this to me. I wish I would have known.2
When I walked into your house, there was no one there but you and I. "Andrew, what's going on? Why is it so dark?" I was starting to get a little scared. "Don't worry Alice" You whispered in my ear. "Where is everyone? I thought this was suppose to be a party!" All of a sudden he pushed me onto the floor, causing me to rip my dress. "What the fuck are you doing? Get off me you ass hole!" My screams meant nothing to him. "Come on Alice loosen up. You know I love you" If he loved me then what is going on? "okay Andrew, just get the fuck off me" I saw him raise his hand. I felt nothing but stinging pain cross my face. All I could do was cry, not fight back. That was the night I lost my innocents.3
You left me there naked on your living room floor, crying and bleeding. "If your going to stay, sleep on the couch" He looked down at me with hurting eyes. I can't help but wonder if he is sorry...he looks sorry. I laid there on his floor, unable to move for what felt like forever. Finally I decided to get up. I quickly get dressed and slip out the door.4
I slowly pull into my driveway, hoping not to wake up my Mom. When I walked into the house it was pitch black, I knew right then that she was asleep. I walked into the bathroom and took a long look in the mirror. I looked like hell, one black eye and a cut up lip. "What am I going to tell my Mom?" I whispered to myself. I took off all my clothes and got into the shower. 5
The next morning I woke up in unbearable pain. Not just physical. I dreamt about it all night, replaying over and over in my head. When I went down stares my mom was sitting at the kitchen table already drinking a beer. "What the fuck happened to your face?" she yelled out in horror. "Oh nothing Mom, I just took an elbow in the eye yesterday in gem class." I grabbed a bagel and headed out of the door as fast as possibly.6
Author notes
not done...writers block
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leanna i never read this before why didnt you tell me about it huh?it is great so far hurry up and finish!missyxoxoxxoxoxoxoxo
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Amazing
i really like it, it was vivid and worked well
if this is u, im really sorry but u have 2 tell sumone i know its hard but my friend went thru the same thing and telling sumone is the best thing 2 do
Anyways great write and thnx 4 ur comment on my stuff! keep up the great work!
Alex -
I think this story is far to real i know alot of peopel this has happened to i hope your not one but if you are i hope you find peace you poems are quite sad and i could not imagine going thought any of the stuff decribed in your wrightings great wright
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this moved quickly but it worked.
I am very sorry if this was you, as it was written in the first person.
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Your tenses seem to switch a bit. At first it was past, then at the very end it was present. I think.
Besides that, this is great. I like it and hop you keep up with it once you get over your writers block.
Amanda -
This is a touchy subject, one that people go through all the time. I hope you finish it, it sounds like it would be a good story to read. Nice job so far.
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