Week Later...1
Nicole shoves me out the2
house for some fresh air.3
I've been channel hopping for4
seven days, eating more,5
sleeping less.6
I walk to the Dustin Smith park7
ten minutes away.8
Passing Kids flying9
on swings.10
Kids passing me on brand new bikes.11
Families sprawled out on picnic12
blankets, laughing.13
Sitting on the marble base14
of the water fountain15
watching the water sprout16
from the shepherd boy's horn17
coins on the bottom18
wished on by five year olds19
I wonder if any came true.20
I would wish but I'm afraid21
that all I'll receive is bad luck.22
***23
FYI24
I rarely ask God for25
favors, but I'm begging26
him to help me27
show me a way.28
***29
Afterwards30
I feel dumb for31
praying to him.32
Like he's really listening.33
***34
This is what happens when you don't35
listen to the voices inside your head36
you crumble37
stumble38
melt39
whine40
want to die41
want to rip your hair42
scream43
disappear44
go back in time45
erase your mistakes46
***47
Wish I48
could do that right now.49
***50
Zale and Nicole51
are sitting on the porch 52
when I turn up.53
They're not speaking.54
Feet stop moving55
when eyes see Zale.56
Nicole sees me57
kicks Zale's knee58
she points to me59
he looks and stands.60
His hands are suffocating in 61
his pockets. When he takes them out62
they're wrinkled and sweaty.63
He doesn't look happy.64
He doesn't look angry.65
Face blank and white66
as a sheet of paper.67
But his eyes are talking to me.68
Blue turned to gray.69
And that's how I know.70
I know that he knows71
what I've known72
what Nicole knows73
what Clare knows74
what dad knows75
what God almighty knows76
and possibly Satan.77
Looking at Nicole78
she mouths she didn't say79
anything.80
I believe her because 81
though I refused to confess82
to Zale myself she wouldn't 83
tell because it's not her84
responsibility.85
Muttering curses86
I disappear inside the house.87
Author notes
yaw Zale knows now. read on. 
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No of course not! I would never end the story so...tragically...unless it's really meant to end that way. But I'm pretty sure there will be a happy ending-or at least a fairly good happy ending where some things don't end quite right but others do. And I agree with you about religion being a big deal in America since that's what it was founded on. But people act like it's a sin if you don't go to church on sunday. And that's why Zel feels like God isn't answering her-because she didn't go to church. I'm kinda a PK (pastors kid) so i know how Zel feels about certian things-well the confusion anyway when it comes to religion. But I'm hopiing things will end well for Zel. I can't say for sure. If i jump ahead and say there will be a good ending it might turn out to be good but bad. So I'll just have to wait and see!
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Oh God... this was possibly the best one yet, Hunnie. I mena, I loved the way she was so casual about the prayer, and then so dismissive... I know religion's a big deal in America, while in Britain it's not so huge really, so I can see from this perspective why it's so difficult for her to admit to prayer. Come on, her dad's well religious and it must have been so tough for her to admit to him what she's going through. And then, the bit where you said all that stuff about wanting to disappear, it was so rhythmic and poetic that it drew me right into her story. Poor Zel! And as for the whole Zale situation... I can imagine it's just as hard for him, because he didn't know... Aww this is so incredible, I'm going to read part twenty five now and if this ends up having a predictable, happy ending, I may cry. It's really visceral and true to reality now, to ruin it with a prissy ending would be a shame. But I don't think you'll do that, will you? Love J xxx
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O.O Nicole told Zale???? What a crappy thing to do!! omfg!! What a horrible friend!! o.o
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Good write. Can't wait for more, please please please tell me when the next one is up. -Juliette
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yay
im waiting for more!! YAY he cna't leave her...can he?
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