baby i want to love you, that's all i ever wanted.1
loving you was the only thing, i was ever good at doing,2
you made my life worth living,but now you have someone new.3
and you told me you don't want me any more so why lie to me and 4
SAY you'll love me.5
you knew i loved you and never stopped.6
the thing's we did, the stuff we was going to do.7
the words that i have, that i can never say.8
why put me through this pain.9
why give a damn you stopped caring a long time ago.10
and i gave up on you. when you started treating me like this.11
the love i had is dead and gone.the love for you is hell.12
i know hell on earth is where i live,13
it's where you told me to go on living14
with out you bye my side was it a dream.15
and you really never loved me? 16
never loved me? or did you love me at one point.17
and stop-ed caring.baby i know love cause i live for love.18
and this can never because you make me feel dead inside,19
sometimes i love the way it feels and sometimes i don't20
all depending on how i feel or how you make me feel21
why you do this to me. I'll never know, 22
i thought your wife should be something better23
but, "Hun" thank you for killing me in side............24
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all i can think of is be open and honest with me that's what i will when i read your stuff cause i hate lieing
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Damien....You're poem was indeed heartbreaking. A friend of mine is going through that same situation right now and I really hate seeing them hurt. Heartbreaks are a bitch...but they only make you stronger. So with that....great poem and keep writing!!!!
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A good job
Thank you this was great. I think "throw" should be "through" but hey I don't wanna get all picky. This was good and I love it.
Great job, hun!....you get to feeling better, okay?
~Lisi~ -
A good job
Thank you this was great. I think "throw" should be "through" but hey I don't wanna get all picky. This was good and I love it. Great job, hun!....you get to feeling better, okay?
~Lisi~ -
A good job
Thank you this was great. I think "throw" should be "through" but hey I don't wanna get all picky. This was good and I love it. Great job, hun!....you get to feeling better, okay?
~Lisi~ -
A good job
Thank you this was great. I think "throw" should be "through" but hey I don't wanna get all picky. This was good and I love it. Great job, hun!....you get to feeling better, okay?
~Lisi~ -
damein I thought this was pretty good and I loved reading it... just one thing really caught my attention...where is the rhythm towards the beginning? I mean, I see what you're getting at and I can totally relate, and that's all I see wrong with it. Good job, hun!
...and I hope you get to feelin better.
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im sorry i'll make it so you know what it means ok
hopely it will be good -
DEEP
Damein, Damein, Damein. Your poem is very much heartbreaking and many of us can identify with what your saying and IT does feel like crap when someone loses intrest in you. But i dont see the need to start name calling especialy if you say you love someone. There is some serious anger towards the end but i do hope you dont mean it when you say she is a bitch. okay aside from my counseling session com criticism, youR poem coughy my attension and that should mean sumin.
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