Forbidden Lust

They tell me that you're too old for me. They laugh and call me a silly girl with a crush. I still gaze at you with eyes full of lust, imagining running away with you into the night. We all sit in a room filled with smoke and cheer, I try to remain focused on the conversation. How am I supposed to do this with your green eyes burning into my skin? I have become your slave.1

I close my eyes and drink my coffee and think of living this dream out with you. I open my eyes only to meet yours again. It has become perfectly clear to me that I'm thinking what you're thinking about. I give you a devilish smile and you bow your head and wink your eye at me. I can feel you undressing me with your eyes. I wonder how the others in the room could not feel the electricity of lust brewing between us. It is nearly too much for me to contain. 2

Everyone has fallen asleep now and everything is so dark and quiet. I creep like a kamikaze kitty into your room. I close the door gently and turn around to meet your gaze face to face. Your arms are already wrapped tightly around my waist and I can feel no distance between us now. All longing is about to come to an end for us. 3

I kiss and I bite, I paw and I claw. I can fuck you like no other. Your lips that have haunted my dreams for an eternity are finally pressed against mine. I move my hands up your cheeks and around your neck. I slide my tongue into your mouth, complete with some playful nibbling. I feel your breath upon my neck and then I nearly collapse as I feel your teeth sinking into my neck gently. 4

Recovering from this horny shell shock, I slide my hand down your pants to feel your swollen member. The heat rises between my legs and a feeling of glee rises in my heart as I discover just what a big man you really are.5

Your lips and your tongue romance my mouth as your speedy hands unbutton my see through leopard print shirt. Your hands travel over my breasts while my hands travel downward again. I unbutton your pants and in one second they are gone. You pull your shirt over your head. You go in to touch me some more, but I push you backwards onto the bed. You use your elbows to hold you up so you can watch me tease you. You made jokes before in the middle of a crowd about getting a floor show from me. Well, here it is... 6

I tie my hair up and slip the straps of my black satin bra off of my shoulders. Gone. I tear off my pants and pounce just like a cat on top of you. I go in for some more passionate kissing, but all of a sudden you are on top of me ready to dominate. You are a very, very bad boy and I will punish you for that. I am in charge now and you will do exactly what I want. I get back on top and resume doing what I was doing. I begin kissing your neck and then continue going south. 7

I hear you moan with horny excitement as I kiss the end of your hardened penis, which must be the size of a baseball bat. I slide my lips down the shaft of your member to tease you a little. Playful biting as I come back up. I slide my tongue around the sex machine once more. Your back arches and I know that you can no longer take the torture. You let out a moan and I smile, letting you know that I am ready to fuck. 8

Since you took the torture so willingly, I will reward you by letting you do with me what you will. You take full advantage of this as you lay me down and lay on top of me. I anticipate that huge gift of yours finally inside me, but now you are going to torture me. Your hands navigate down to my breasts and your mouth finds my nipples. Your free hand travels south of the equator to keep my pussy company. I feel your fingers slide around my clit and now my back arches. Please, fuck me hard now. I can now no longer take the torture. You see this in my eyes and a smile of amusement shines across your face. 9

Before any words could be spoken, I feel you come into me with full force. I let out a moan and then take back over the lead. I am now on top of you, riding you so fucking hard. I bite, claw, paw, fuck, fuck fuck... You rest your hands on my hips as we fuck at full speed. I keep begging for harder and deeper and faster. The heat continues to rise with each passionate thrust, until we are both almost over the top. 10

You pick me up a little off the bed and then thrust your dick into me with all of your strength. It makes me want to fuck you until Armageddon comes. I let you have the lead now since you are so obviously a man who knows what he wants. You fuck me so hard and you keep pushing deeper and harder into me. I respond with loud moaning and thrusting myself onto you. I never want this to end, but I am feeling myself go over the top now. I am now at the highest point of orgasm and I am shaking and screaming and breathing so hard. 11

You pick me up off of the bed again and grab my hips and shove your dick up into me again even harder than previously thrusted, dispelling your seed into my womb. We have both gotten off now, but we still remain connected together so as not to forget the feeling of the greatest fuck we both have ever had. 12

We have lived out our uninhibited dream, but the longing is only stronger now. I lay beside you on the bed and your arms are wrapped around me. We both realize that the longing to be together is only stronger now. We both realize the trouble this could bring. How long could we go creeping around in the dark together? The answer is forever. We make plans to meet on the weekends at this hotel halfway between the cities we live in. This is the moment where forbidden lust becomes forbidden love. Nobody can find out about this...13

"I know I got nothin' on you14

I know there's nothing to do15

When times go bad16

And you can't get enough17

Won't you lay me down in the tall grass18

And let me do my stuff"19

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 -Lindsey Buckingham and Stevie Nicks (Second Hand News)21

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  • Venusian Poetess
    January 22, 2006
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    I can take constructive criticism. I find it hilarious how you try to throw the book at me with your formal education in creative writing and such. Pay attention to how things are marked. This isn't marked as a critical piece and so therefore I was not even asking your opinion, so you are right in your assumption that I don't want yours. I just wonder who died and made you the authority on distinguishing erotic poetry from erotic stories. Have a nice night.


  • tinuelena
    January 22, 2006
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    Funny how you can't take a little constructive criticism. I'm not trying to be demeaning here, I'm just trying to help you out. I'm an experienced writer with a formal education in creative writing. But if you don't want to take my suggestions, so be it.

    Have a nice night.

    Elizabeth

  • Venusian Poetess
    January 22, 2006
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    Funny how everyone else disagrees.

  • tinuelena
    January 22, 2006
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    Yeah, I have had really great sex, and yeah, I know how it is to attempt to speak. But I think intentional choppiness is meant for erotica poetry.

    Whatever, I guess I am just used to reading things with more sentence variation. You can still make it feel realistic, but starting every sentence with 'I' or 'You' or 'We' gets really repetitive.

    Elizabeth

  • Venusian Poetess
    January 22, 2006
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    I am proud to say that this is a real life experience.

  • Venusian Poetess
    January 22, 2006
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    If you have ever had really great sex, you would know that when you try to speak in the middle of it, your words become choppy and hurried. This is an erotic story and that was the approach I was taking to make it more realistic.


  • Jesterbells
    January 22, 2006
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    Damn lol my hearts racing=P I like this! i didnt notice anything really choppy bout i thought it flowed great. I thought the wording of the ending was the best about it and i could see the story line unraviling about the whole thing...which i really never noticed about in poems before. Anyway it was easy to read and a very good read. keep it up=]


  • batista
    January 22, 2006
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    sexy

    this didnt seem to be choppy to me, i found it to be really good. stories dont need to have the same qualities as poetry does. i often get the same types of comments, telling me i dont have any rhythm, or i dont rhyme my poems, or its too long or whatever. what they dont realize is, thats not what im going for. when i write a poem, i just write. it just comes out, its completely raw. i dont bother with pussyfooting around by refining it and using a lot of what i call "fairy type descriptors", as a lot of poetry uses, making it all sound quite fruity in my opinion. anyways, i found this to be really hot, great work!

    PS, is it a real life experience, or just made up?

  • tinuelena
    January 22, 2006
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    hehe. I loved this. On a technical note, it might flow better with longer sentences... it was a bit choppy. But the content was great

    Elizabeth


  • xVowsareSpoken
    January 22, 2006
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    Hahaha, I have a poem titled "Forbidden Lust"! How awesome. I loved this, it was so great. I bet the person you wrote this too would really enjoy it. Anyway, I think this is one of the hottest things I've ever read. I really enjoyed the ending as well. I like how you built the climax with your words. Great job!

    Take Care,
    x PatientGrace x

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