Horrors of a Mind Pt. 3

“Hello Theo, 1

Isn’t it funny how life, through all its mysteries and wonder, can be so cruel? Life determined that it was time for me to kill your mother and I did it. It is a shame that she had to die. She had the most wonderful cookies. She was ond of a kind wasn’t she? She had a smile that would warm a person’s heart, but she didn’t have the will to live when it broke. I left it beating just for you Theo. Nice touch huh? Just so you know, she screamed like a little girl and bled like on too while she died. She was such an easy kill. She didn’t even put up a fight; she just took it saying that God would save her. As if God could have stopped me form doing what I did. He gave all of you free will. She was so pathetic. I hope you are not so when the time comes. Right, Theo?” 2

Theo was sure that this must have been some sick joke and that this was just a mishap that should not have happened. He got up and started to leave his house. He took one last time and left. All the way there he said aloud, “Why did I have to be the one going to work at the cemetery? Why is he doing this to me? Where does he come from and why does he thin he is so great? He isn’t so great. He is but a pathetic person getting his kicks by killing people. He is no better then those monsters on T.V.” He didn’t have time to take the job but he had, and with enthusiasm. This must be just some horrible nightmare. It had to be. It just couldn’t be real.3

Eventually, the night had gotten colder. Ice had started to form on the trees and that eerie silence that Theo despised ever so much, returned. The limbs of the trees blew like sheets in the wind and then started to snap. The concrete had become a glacier and Theo slipped and fell upon his back.4

“Well, well, well. Look what we have here. Why, it’s a cold, miserable man who can’t do anything right and only lands on the wrong end of the broomstick. What a pity it is to be you. I must say though that when your mother died, she did it so very nicely. She even evoked Gods name. It was sad to see such a strong women go to waste but the fact is I had to do it. If I had not killed her, then some maniac a few days from now would have done it. Oh, don’t tremble like that. It’s not your fault I had to kill her. Well, yes it is. You know, I really should stop lying but I can’t!”5

“You bastard! When I catch you, I am going to….”6

“You are going to do what? NOTHING! Because no matter how hard you try or how long you pursue me, you cannot win. You are a helpless and hopeless cause. I am trying to make you a better person by taking all of this away from you but you are refusing me every step of the way. If you will not let me at least try to help you then I will be forced to bring about something only you can see and feel”7

“Do it then if you are so powerful. DO IT! You can’t. Why? Is it because you cannot do anything worth doing that can faze me? Or is it for the sheet fact that I don’t give a shit anymore?”8

“Have it your way but when the demons come and the angles fall, and no one shall be seen, think of me upon the wall and have yourself wiped clean” 9

“What do you mean by that?”10

“You will know in due time but until you open your inner eyes, I will have to take you to a place that is most hideous and bestial. A place where my kind run, fly, play, and kill for the sheer sake of it. You call it the Abyss. We call it home.”11

With that, he lifted his hands and said one word, “Lezramnicra” and Theo was gone. But the world he had entered was unlike any he had ever seem or heard of. There were flowers everywhere, different shades on every plant. There were some that were white and then right next to it, there were some indigo. Each had a scent unique to it, no flower smelled the same. Nothing disturbed the place at all. The animals frolicked and ate all they could. Theo couldn’t believe that this was the Abyss. 12

Suddenly, the scene turned into a gruesome mockery of itself. The trees withered and died and the leaves blew off as if running away. The grass had turned brown and then black. The flowers grew thorns and turned evil looking. They started to fight for room and more and more of them began to die off as well. The animals had become disease ridden and began attaching each other just because they could.13

“What is the matter Theo? Do you not like this place? This is home to my kind and I. It is the place where we were all born. God said he made us out of clay and dirt, what do we think we’re standing on? It is not funny that you, of all people, should start to think of God now more than ever? Just think of it Theo, you were born here in this very place, this very womb. Isn’t it good to be home again?”14

“This is not home. This is a hell that I never wish to return to. Take me home at once. Take me back to the place I lived. Take me back to what I know.”15

But then you would still be living in your blissful ignorance. We wouldn’t want that now would we? A mind is a terrible thing to waste.”16

And then, Fredrick put a clawed hand on John and slowly began to open up his skull. The screams of agony ripped through hell like a saw through wood. Blood slowly streamed down his face and into his eyes. His hair fell off into massive clumps to the black earth. Theo’s skull ripped open and his brain was revealed. Fredrick placed his hand on it and with a grin, took it out.

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  • xTroubled-Teenx
    September 12, 2007

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    there better be

    another part
    or imma be whooping
    some sexy ass
    mwahahaha
    you better write more woman
    i love it
    xoxo
    Shaylyn


  • lil-ole-me
    May 9, 2006
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    uck gross

    i would think in the end that man would win. win out over evil. it's too sad to imagine that even in death - life sucks. no i choose not to think this way. i see to many people living life wishing every minute they were dead. why give the devil the satisfaction of bringing you to your knees... no - i will live a long life - inspite of happiness or sadness.

    language: 3, plot: 3, overall: 6, ending: 3, characters: 3.

  • DeepDarkDesire
    January 28, 2006
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    needs work yet amazing

    hrm, ive read all 3 parts of 'Horrors of a mind'. Yes it kept me engrossed and entertained me for awhile, but I cant help but point out the spelling mistakes, the mistypes, and the general English mistakes. You have a wonderfully gothic idea here, fantastic description at times, yet this needs some more time and work to make it truly empowering. Also, just an author to author piece of advice-If your going to name a place like the Abyss, get your facts right, because you will find that people believe it to be another realm and it's been described completely differently to what you have mentioned. However, I am utterly facinated with your idea, I'd very much like to see more of this story line, I'm hoping for something just as gothically enchanting. 7/10.....4 stars.....grade B....Keep writing, I'm yearning to know more!

  • christinaumsted
    January 21, 2006
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    cool story

    oh yeah good story and great horror images!


  • pugsleyislove
    January 20, 2006
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    OH no no no. There is another part comming up love. Stick around!
    -Hate


  • bludstaindsoliloquy
    January 19, 2006
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    This was realli well written. I realli do like it. I must say though . . . that it would be beneficial for the reader if you would go back and check your spelling and grammar . . . but the story line is awesome.

  • incoherentlypoetic
    January 18, 2006
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    i like this. it sounds like there might be another part, coming, but didnt you say there were only 3? oh well. if this is the ending, i like it. just curious. very awesome story. ~whitney~

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