Is 'better' being forced to take on board the possibilities that one can change? Is 'change' a positive aspect of taking the right way forward? These questions reigned in my mind as I took my first steps along the path toward my old school. The gateway to my past had been opened: should it be right that I would step through it?1
The path seemed different; new, somehow welcoming, instead of repelling prospective rebels and truants. I had been the rebel no one wished to care for, or cared to wish for. I didn’t mean any harm, my rebellion was peaceful and selfish – merely seeking attention by the refusal to do homework or abide by sartorial rules.2
I was the minority kind, flowing against the grain, not following the absurdity of human (school girl) nature. I was the societal reject, and here I was, invited back into the hornets nest. What was I doing? Did I have some kind of morbid curiosity, a craving to be liked that needed quashed, or was I completely aware of what was to come?3
Author notes
The beginning of a new story. Based on a dream I had back in November 2005. Just wondering what you nice people would make of it.
What did you think? Please comment!
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Wow this is beautiful and lovely...I love reading it..you must be a great poet.I wish I got to know you better..if you would like then please don't hesitate to drop in and say hi.You are always welcome.
Love Always SamaraElla.
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This is really good, a very good writer you are great job
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this definitley sounds like it would be a lot of fun. i hope theres more to come. I would love to read it. <3<3 -Ebi
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Very insightful and contemplative - I only hope you will further pursue these subjects and elaborate on them, as you seem to have an aptitude for discussing them.
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I am looking forward to reading an expansion on this. I was actually wondering if this was written about ME!? Ha ha!! (well, besides the truancy and failure to complete the homework - my grades were all that kept me from being kicked out - I guess they didn't like anyone who went against the grain in my school at the time, ha ha). As for "quashed" - I believe it to be a word as I have used it many times in the past, I must check into this one! Nice work.
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hmm...Although this was just a intro, it was too short for my taste. It was good though; did you mean 'squashed' in this :" a craving to be liked that needed quashed." Maybe quased is a word I've never heard of...
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NIce job!
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Thanx for that!
It was my first draft. I copied it straight from the original document. I'll edit and tick that wee box. I know exactly how the story's going to carry on, so that's that hurdle over with! Usually I get stuck at the prologue, and never end up finishing. I find it easier to write stories from the ideas I get in my sleep. I hope to have more posted for you to read very soon.
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This was good, as a begining, it shouldn't tell very much, and this didn't, so it makes you want to keep reading. I liked it a lot. Oh, by the way, if you want to know what people think of it you might want to make it critical.
I'm going to give you critical advice.
It flowed okay, but it could use a little tweaking to make it better, and smoother so it'll really keep the reading, well, reading.
I liked it though, and I might read more, once you write more.
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