When I watch that couple who can't get enough of each other and know they're having great sex, probably even now in the bathroom, I remember what it was to be in love.1
I never knew there could be feelings so powerful that would make me abandon all reason, all logic, all understanding.2
I threw away my safety line and wind caught my caution. There was no other choice to make.3
I remember knowing the look in your eye and smile on your face that said, "come over here and kiss me," and you didn't make a sound.4
I remember knowing the the glance of your fingertips where ever they happened to land... my favorite place or a little lower...5
I remember knowing the gaze that said you had checked out of the conversation and you were wherever it was you went... that place I was so jealous of because I could never meet you there. It was there that you began spending all your time and I could never meet you there.6
I never knew there could be feelings so powerful that would make me abandon all reason, all logic, all understanding.7
I grabbed hold of the grace like a string of pearls hanging from heaven and held on with both hands... By now, there was no other choice to make.8
I recall knowing what I know and threats of a pain catch in my chest... That couple come out hand in hand with flushed cheeks and bright eyes. I shook my head and smiled knowing they'd just indulged themselves and the thrill of being caught made it even better. I remember because it used to be me...9
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Wow.. you certainly have some experiences to share. Thank you for your many kind words. It's interesting to hear the other side of the story. Glad you've happily decided who you want to be with.
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I liked this write. It was romantic and sad at the same time. It used to be me too, but from the other end of the spectrum. I used to BE the wife who would "go somewhere else" when I was married. I have since decided whole-heartedly that I am permanently batting for the other team. I have a girlfriend now, with whom I've been for almost 3 years. Thank you for this write. Very well done. I liked the repetition of this verse; I never knew there could be feelings so powerful that would make me abandon all reason, all logic, all understanding. I have those feelings now all the time with my girlfriend that I didn't have very often with either of my husbands. Thank you again. Jeri.
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Thank you...I'm not sure what to say...I'm glad this is so fully relateable to you. If you liked this you'd probably like twoquillmadness too. He's good. I feel that way about him to some extent. Although, when I shared that with him I think he freaked like I was a stalker or something (ha, ha!) He's only 20, so I forgive him. anyway, forgive me for feeling a bit confused but...I don't know how to ask...
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love'er...ya' gotta love'er....awesome
Kat: I love this particular (educate me; "prose", "stanza", "just paragraph"...i dont know - i'm primarily a musician...i can count to 4
anyway....I love this "part" :
..."remember knowing the gaze that said you had checked out of the conversation and you were wherever it was you went... that place I was so jealous of because I could never meet you there. It was there that you began spending all your time and I could never meet you there.".....
LOVE THAT...brilliant...such a common (and sad experience, huh? - sure know i had it with my wife...(sigh))...anyway, i just get "caught" on a string of words, describing an experience so well...it's like u got me inside u...and i was there...understanding....the "mis-connection")
I've learned something here to about the possible structuring of short-story writing...(i just sub'd my first today, actually...check it...i need your intelligent feedback...not just the usual "that was great"...or whatever, that i've gotten from so many others. I need an talented analysis.
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