Once A Mortal Child Now...

A soft howling of wind blows past my face as I walk down a depressing ally. I’m late for my meeting with him. The rustling of leaves passes my ally and my pathway. Autumn has finally arrived. In the darkness of despair that I walk through every night waiting and wondering till he shows up. 1

A soothing deep voice speaks from behind me saying “Well, well, well looks like you’re the late one this time.” 2

I turn around startled at first as I see him there. 3

“Hey it is not my fault that you keep changing our meeting place Monokno.” I said sternly. 4

Stepping towards me I see his pale face and silver blue eyes glaring at me. 5

“Do you always have to stare at me?” I spoke meaningfully. “Yes, but why shouldn’t I? Your so beautiful the way you look Nan.” He said in a soft tone. 6

"Now you know how I feel about that. You know not to call me by that insignificant pet name.” I said fiercely. 7

He laughed just as he always done. He never took me seriously. “Cute.” He laughed again. His laugh slowly stopped, as his face turned serious. “I’m sorry to cut you short but I just had gotten an arrow just before you had come. I shall send you a letter upon our next meeting Narcyssa.” 8

And with that he disappeared into the quiet darkness. This is so normal these days. Meetings like this are not so useful. Questions are the things that I have but none have been answered for you see I was not always this way. 9

My name, Narcyssa Raven Ayame. Or at least that’s what I tell people. My past is rarely spoken of these days. For you see it’s not something I want to relive. But if you want to understand where I have come from I just explain. 10

You see I use to be a normal every day mortal child. I had a mother and a father I also had two brothers and a sister. I was the oldest out of the four of us at the age of seventeen. My sister was twelve and my brothers were ten years of age. 11

The night that my life would change forever was a normal night clear skies, beautiful stars and a full moon. I had left that house to walk my nightly stroll through the forest close to our house. I’ve been exploring this forest since I was seven years old and knew the area by heart. 12

Nothing odd had ever happened when I took my walk except this time had seemed different. The moon wasn’t a pure white light as it had always been instead the moon was a deep red as it shown upon my soft skin. By this time the darkness I was use to by now and so I continued my walk. 13

There was an odd silence this particular night and I had the feeling of someone following me. So I decided to head home for the time being. When I walked through our front door, which was falling off the hinges by now, I was startled to find my parents had gone to bed and my siblings were still awake reading in the big chair together. 14

Usually my parents are up and my siblings are asleep. I thought nothing of it my parents both had a hard day today. Father with his farming and mother with her cleaning, I wouldn’t blame them if they wanted to go to bed so early and leave my siblings awake downstairs in the living room. 15

My sister Kinara was already yawning widely when I entered and the boys looked ready to pass out. I smiled and took a chair to sit down and take off my boots and this is when I felt the presents of someone on the property. 16

With an odd force of nature the window burst open with a gust of wind. It had blown out our lanterns and candles making the room dim as the nightly atmosphere outside. 17

Startling Kinara had gotten up and closed the window, but when I looked to see if she was walking back she was gone. I didn’t think anything of it though because she had always disappeared like every once in a while. 18

The other problems was that it was still dark in the room. Knowing my brothers they’d willingly relight the lantern and candles, but when I called out there names there was no response from either of them as though no one was there because I did not hear the soft snoring coming from them. They probably had ran off to their beds to sleep the rest of the night away. 19

A bit of fear I could feel rising in my body I tried to over come it. I had no idea that this would be the night that would change my life forever. In the dark I found the lantern and relight it as well as the candles close by. A cold chill sends itself slowly down my back and makes me quiver. 20

I turn around and my body froze. Standing in front of me was a tall man with long silver black hair, his silver ice blue eyes were glaring at my honey brown eyes. His skin was a pale moon light color and his hands were dripping and covered in fresh blood. I still couldn’t move. I felt paralyzed with fear. The candles had gone out again but the lantern was still light and gave him a small shadow cast over his pale face. I could feel the changing of my soft honey brown eyes turn to a dark soulless black. I sensed his body move closer to mine. A cool breeze fell past my face sending my hair behind my shoulders and then a burning sensation upon my neck as I felt like a thousand knives going into my neck and piercing my throat. 21

I felt his presence as he had done this to me, changed me for eternity. Slowly I could see my soft skin turn as pale as his before my very eyes. My teeth ached as they sharpened within my very mouth. My golden locks straightened and turned black as sin. Everything changed and I had a feeling I no longer was Catherine Clare Soname but someone different. I laid on the floor for a few minutes feeling my mortal body decay and die inside me and then something flowing into my mouth. It was so warm and so tempting I couldn’t stop. But it was pulled away before I wanted to be done. 22

My vision came in again and I wiped my face seeing blood upon my hand as well as seeing him there rocking back and forth in my mother’s rocking chair slowly back and forth back and forth in front of a light fire place. My head was pounding and my jaw ached. I felt confused, what had just happened? Who is this man sitting in front of our fire place and why is he here? 23

In a deep soft tone he spoke for the first time to me saying “ Your awake now, finally. I was wondering when you’d get up.” he said this in a most particular up lifting tone. 24

I did not speak and I didn’t want to. He smiled and all I could do was stare blankly at him. “Oh, sorry I have yet to introduce myself. I am Monokno Stabanyo.” he apologized. 25

I opened my mouth to talk but he spoke before I could even get a word out. “ No need to talk I already know who you are, no I’m not a stalker, but I know who you were for a while now.” 26

I was still staring at him and it seemed that an acquired silence was coming so I took all my fear and swallowed it saying very softly like a whisper “ What or who are you?” 27

He stood there for a moment then said “Well I told you who I am. What I am you will soon find out.” He turned to walk out the door, which I realized was now completely off its hinges. 28

“But I can’t just leave! What about my family?” I said with more bravery this time. 29

“I thought you would have remembered by now.” he said sternly. As soon as this passed though my ears I ran into my parents bedroom and when I opened the door I just fell to my knees as tears started to stream down my face. 30

When I went to wipe the tears away I didn’t only wipe away tears but blood as well, blood from my parents. My eyes widened I was scared, I was in denial, I remembered. 31

I ran into my sister’s room as well as mine and there she was just laying there dead on the bed where the sheets were soaked in blood. Panicking now I ran to my both brother’s rooms kicking the door open and screaming as tears fell constantly down my now pale face. Running fast down the stairs feeling sorrow, anguish, and pain I find Monokno still by the open door way with the night’s light shining thought and the anger just built inside of me. 32

I screamed “ What did you do to me?!” 33

He spoke calmly “I told you, you’ll find out soon.” 34

“But why not now?” I yelled at him. 35

He just turned to the quiet night and said “ If you want to understand what I’ve made you, you will follow me tonight and do everything I command you to do.” 36

I had to think and think hard. My family was dead, Monokno killed my siblings when he first entered this house now a grave and I out of his doing I drank his blood and killed my mother and father who’ve cared for me since I was born. Why did this happen to me? What should I do, should I go with him? 37

Slowly I spoke with tears still falling down my white soften face. “Okay, I’ll go with you.” He let me say my final good byes to my now no longer family and I left my house during the night for the last time. 38

We walked though the quiet night hardly to not even speaking a word to one another. Finally as the moon was directly over me as well as him. We reached what looked liked a mansion compared to any of the other houses around here. We came up to the front doors. They looked like they were made out of strong sturdy oak wood. Upon the doors were carvings of symbols I did not recognize. He did not need to open the doors by touching it for there were no door knobs or visible hinges but all he did was what looked like forbidden witchcraft spells to open the huge oak doors and when he was done they slowly creaked open I wasn’t willing to see what was behind those doors. 39

The slow creaking was now almost over for the doors were almost open all the way. I could feel the arising fear coming once again. When the doors were fully open the one who called himself Monokno started to walk forward into the mansion. (I wish not to describe the look of the mansion for it was something I wish not to remember). 40

As he started to walk forward I did not, he stopped abruptly. Looking back at me I saw that he had no expression upon his white colorless face, but signaled me to come. I didn’t do as he commanded me to, I stood there and stared at him and surveyed the mansion outside and inside. As I was doing so a strong pain came to my left side of my face across my soft cheek. I fell to the ground in pain. I saw the blood falling onto the grass from my mouth and cheek. What had just happened? I looked up and Monokno was standing above me his hand out had specks of blood upon it. 41

He spoke vibrantly “ I told you to do as you are told to do. I am your master young one. Don’t do this again for the punishment will be much worse next time around.” He stopped talking and I slowly stood up and followed him into the mansion. 42

It was dimly lighted with soft black and crimson red glowing candles. Dark black drapes over what I assumed to be windows (behind the cloth was long and blocked out all light from the outside world.) Stone floors were cold and gray. Chairs lined with night blue coverings. Statues of people who’ve I have never seen before. We entered a library which had every wall lined with books and a couple of arm chairs that were a dark forest green by a warm some what welcoming fire. He motioned me to sit and this time I did as I was told. 43

“Now it’s time for me to keep my end of the promise.” he softly spoke to me. I kept quiet for I was finally going to understand what he was as well as what I am. 44

“Years have past since we were last known to be ‘alive’. Many people don’t understand our race.” he started. 45

I opened my mouth to speak and this time I got to ask my questions. “What do you mean ‘our race’?” I asked him. 46

“I mean our race of vampires.” He said calmly. 47

I was shocked. Vampires? I had only heard stories of these creatures when I was young but they were so much different then the way the stories described them. In the stories they described these creatures with translucent skin, blood red eyes, and always having a thirst for blood. This creature in front of me which is the same creature of which I am this very night. 48

“Why did you choose me to become one like yourself?” I just had to know. 49

“Because you are the one that was chosen by the God’s and Goddesses above.” he told me. 50

“ But why me?” I questioned him. 51

“ Because I am one of those Gods. I know that it seems strange but you out of so many fit the qualities.” he answered me very sternly. 52

“ How come though? And what qualities?” I pushed the question upon him with force this time. 53

“ Do you honestly want to know why you were chosen? Do you even want to think why I had to do to get this far to kill the way I do? Do you want to know the pain and immortality suffering in place of glorious eternity?” he said this even though he already knew the answer yet he still made it seem like a big deal. 54

“Yes I want to know why, so just tell me.” I nearly swore at him. 55

“If you truly want to know it’s because our race is dwelling in its numbers. I’ve been on a search for a few years now looking for one who could save everyone from near destruction, disappearance, complete death.” He paused. 56

“Now let me guess, “ I started off. “ You found me, turned me, killed my family, and made me leave my sustain life behind just so your vampire race wouldn’t die? Am I correct?” 57

He sighed. “Yes that’s it but only part of the reason.” 58

At this point I was confused. “Is there another reason?” I wondered. 59

“ Yes, there is another reason. All my life I’ve been this way and only was it recently that I’ve started looking for one to choose. There had to be certain qualities that I was looking for. They had to be attracted to the night. Therefore wouldn’t miss the sunlight as much when she was turned. Second was she had to know what they wanted and finding a way of getting no matter how it was to happen. You were out of all people that I’ve seen fit almost every description to the exact to most perfection. The only thing that you didn’t exactly qualify yourself in was age. But it didn’t matter to me by this time and is I dilled your siblings and made you kill your parents while under my control I turned you into an angel of the night.” 60

I was enraged after hearing this explanation but I dare not to be hit again so I kept my mouth shut. Monokno sighed again and didn’t look at me as if he was waiting for an answer or another question. It stayed quiet for a while and the only sound was the crackling of from the fire was warm and had a soft glow upon Monokno’s pale artic white face. 61

“Is there anything that I should know now that my old life is just gone?” I said quietly to kill the silence. 62

“There are only a few things that you need to know. One the sunlight is now your worst enemy but only from sunrise to dusk. When it starts to set you may be in the outside world. Two you may not leave this mansion unless you are with me there are many out there who would kill us if given the chance. And three your name is no longer Catherine Clare Soname.” 63

I could understand the last one Catherine Clare Soname was dead she died only a few hours ago. But I had one last question. “ Then what is my name?” 64

“Some how I knew you were going to ask this question and so I thought long and hard about your new vampire name. I chose Narcyssa Raven Ayame.” 65

At first I didn’t know how I was going to remember that name but some way some how it stuck. “The sun is almost up and I assume you must be exhausted from the night.” he said and then went on. “ I shall show you to your room.” 66

And with that he got up and lead me though the hallway up two flights of beautiful marble staircases and straight to a door that had carvings and inscriptions on them just as the front door had. But this door wasn’t made out of oak wood but oddly enough it looked like marble or even garnet stone. His spell for this door wasn’t as complicated as the other door. Instead all he did was taking his pointer and middle fingers and trace an upside down ‘A’ inside a circle. 67

“If you look on the top you’ll see that your room that you will be staying in is called the Brujah room.” he spoke to me for the last time of that day. 68

Inside the drapes were a maroon red with black lace. Every piece of furniture was black as sin. The bed was a canopy of some fine lace hanging from a star light ceiling. Nothing looked normal it seemed to look like something father would describe when my name wasn’t Narcyssa Raven Ayame. 69

Next thing I knew he had said good night and left me in this demonic room. I was tired so I decided I would go to bed and maybe in the morning it would be better. So I grabbed the covers and they were soft to the touch almost like silk. The canopy closed off all the light to the entire bed it felt as though I was in a luxurious coffin. I lay my head down and went to sleep for the last time as Catherine Clare Soname.70

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  • A Common Psychosis
    April 9, 2006
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    Ah, another new take on the vampire legend. Aside from one or two grammatical errors, the only thing I can find wrrong with this is your word coice in one part. In line 56, you said that the vampires were "dwelling in numbers." I believe a better choice of words would be "dwindling in numbers," as that makes more sense. This was good though, a quick but satisfying read.


  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 14, 2006
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    thank you much

    ~Danica Rose Hunt

  • lilChit
    January 14, 2006
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    It’s a really well written story so far I’m looking forward to reading more!
    ~lilChit~


  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 12, 2006
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    thank you for you comment

    ~Danica Rose Hunt


  • ennovy
    January 12, 2006
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    Publish it !

    My dear I read alot, and this has the makings of a very excellent book about one of my favorite topics,"Vampires"
    You have captured some very deep dark essence, and I want to read a whole lot more. Ennovy

  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 12, 2006
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    thank you i'm working on the second chapter now but it will take me a while before it will be done only because of school but i promise as soon as i'm done i'll post it

    ~Danica Rose Hunt


  • the poess
    January 12, 2006
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    This was very good.
    I do think you need to definately revise it and do a spell check. You also need to seperate it some..at least for posting on here..All of those would make this excellent. It is very very good though, I just feel if you at least did a spell check and then the reader wouldn't have to work as hard to read it and could get the full content easily. VERY good content, by the way
    I look forward to reading more from you.

  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 12, 2006
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    yes thank you it took me a few months to write considering with writers block and all but it's good that people are commenting and yea i know i have some errors but that in time will be corrected thank you again

    ~Danica Rose Hunt

  • Princess Ayeka
    January 12, 2006
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    Hello. This story was pretty well written, not exactly to my current tastes, but well written nonetheless. Some grammatical errors, but not too many. You found a way to get a ton of details in such a short amount of time, good job there. Also, very desciptive in the transformation, I liked that part. I also really liked the way you conveyed the girl's..sadness?...at no longer being Catharine.

  • CrimsonKisses
    January 10, 2006
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    i think you have a really wonderful idea here so far. i would just work on organizing it better, revising, and editing. it seemed like a brainstorm instead of a final draft. your descriptions can be extremely captivating and can suck you into it, but sometimes small errors take a little something away from that. as for a title, i wouldn't worry about it until you finish. then you can think about it and pick a word that describes how you feel about it. anyways i think that this has alot alot of potential! keep up the great work!
    ~erica v|3

  • darkest-princess
    January 10, 2006
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    awesome

    why are you always so god damn good at writing and i can't even write a simple story without making it lack important details. very nice though i love you T see ya later
    ~Em


  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 10, 2006
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    ok thank you

    ~Danica Rose Hunt


  • Barbara Moderators member
    January 10, 2006
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    This is a pretty good story. I look forward to the completed version. A few suggestions: First, this story should be broken in to paragraphs for easier reading. Second, some of the sentences are too short, and too many short sentences in a row make the reading choppy.

    When I cannot think of a title, I will take the main part of a story and boil it down to one word. Then , I'll run that word through an online thesaurus and see what shows up. There are some fairly good titles that can be found that way

  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 10, 2006
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    well right now it isn't even done like book wise i'm on the second chapter now and well whats going on now is shes with the vampire and shes telling her story of how she became one then i'm going to the second book saying differnt storys about what happened and why he left her there in the first book so early when he got the arrow its gonna be good

    ~Danica Rose Hunt


  • spamwitch
    January 10, 2006
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    Other than a few gramatical errors (proof-read really well) the story left me hanging. I'ts hard to suggest a title without an ending, but if I can guess where this is going, might I suggest something alonge the lines of "Once A Mortal Child"... Let me know when you finish, it may help. You have an interesting concept going, don't give up on it!


  • Danica Rose Hunt
    January 10, 2006
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    thank you

    ~Danica Rose Hunt

  • Paint Me Beautiful
    January 10, 2006
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    This is really wonderful, well written, great flow, thanks so much for sharing and I look forward to more from you in the near future.

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