“Alex?”1
Oh, no. Not you, Alex. Anyone but you. I didn’t think I’d ever run into you again. You moved away with your family not long after you broke my heart. Why are you back?2
“Katie! Wow! It’s great to see you! You’re looking really good.”3
‘Wow’ is right. God, Katie, I’d almost forgotten just how sexy you really were. I’d almost forgotten the way you made my pulse race. Almost.4
“Thanks… so how have you been?”5
What do I want to hear? That you’re happy, content, life’s a bed of roses? That you’re utterly miserable and dying to come back? Maybe… that you miss me?6
“Fine, thanks. And you?”7
How’s life treating you? Do you miss me? Have you replaced me yet?8
“Fine. How’s Nina?”9
Oh, Christ. Why did I ask that? Why would I want to know how that bloody slut is? Little miss I’m-every-guy’s-fantasty-and-I’m-going-to-steal-your-boyfriend-now can burn in hell for all I care.10
“She’s magnificent - from what I hear. She ran off with a twenty-four-year-old Italian with a motorcycle. You were right, Katie-pie - I never should have trusted her.”11
Katie-pie. Do you remember me calling you Katie-pie? It was my own personal nickname for you… do you remember where I used it most?12
“Katie-pie! God, I’d almost forgotten that!”13
Bullshit I had. How could I ever forget the shivers it used to send down my spine? I’ll always remember that way you’d breathe ‘Katie-pie’ into my hair… with my head resting on your chest, and our limbs all entangled. All those magical nights… how could I ever forget?14
“Yea… me too.”15
Bullshit I had. I haven’t forgotten anything about you, Katie-pie. From the way your hair always smelled like lemongrass and honey, to the way you could set my whole body on fire with just one touch… you’re a memorable girl, that’s for sure. Besides… you never forget your first love.16
“Hey, I’ve got to go, I’m late. We’ll catch up some other time, okay?”17
I need to get away. Seeing you again has stirred up all these feelings inside me. I’d forgotten that some of them even existed. But at the same time… you have no idea how much it’s going to kill me to walk away from you.18
“Oh, that’s a shame. Yea, we definitely should. See you later.”19
I love you, Katie-pie!20
“Bye.”21
I love you, Alex!22
Author notes
Um, yeah... evry time they say something you see what they're thinking as well... just so that's clear 
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Beautiful
Critque of content:
"This was a beautiful, touching sensitive story;
I really liked the way you handled the spoken words
versus the inner thoughts."
Ghod! I hope she doesn't think I'm being lame
for writing such a short review
of this work; it really was a nice story,
I just have a real challenge it commenting
'cold' without allowing the emotions of the
piece to stew in my brain for a while
Critque of container:
"It was a bit of a challenge to read
the way it was layed out; the beginning of each
line blending into the background, the ending
standing so stark naked against the rich black."
How she's going to think I'm some kind of
'style-Nazi'...she'll probably never read any
of my stuff... or flame me with e-mail...
Jeezus! She might even get me branded
from Storywrite!
"I'll be lost! So terribly lost, without an
outlet for my dreams!"
I'll be lost! So terribly lost, without a
purge for my nightmares!
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very interesting... a typical thought/conversation in situations like this, i was amused to see it written out. very realistic, i really enjoyed this because i can relate to katie a lot. thanks for entering!
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This is so explicit. The only thing was it got confusing at the end.. are you describing both characters reactions or just katie's. But other than that, it's a really great write. Good luch in the contest.
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Excellent
This wasn't a real conversation you taped was it? Or are you a mind reader? Either way it was a great story! Good luck in the contest.
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Perhaps!!! Next time I'm in the mood for writing something relatively cheerful I may write a sequel...
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awwwwwww that was soo so so good! i liked the way it was written... will you start a story with this?
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very good
can there be more to this i really really like ti!
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